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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Barbara--this is the last time I can review--my membership expires at 5pm. I'll try to keep tabs on my fans' work--I'll do some reading here and there whenever I stop by to check and reply to messages--my first priority is to maintain correspondence with everyone who wants to. Keep up the great work. Cheers. LIZ


Katherine raised her hand. "Not here. At home you can do that all night if you want?" (PERIOD)

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. Please keep in touch.
reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 16-Jan-2022
    If I don't catch you first--message me and I'll respond!
Comment from Ben Colder
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You wore me out on this one. These boys are really finding much to admire the coach. He is a great example and something they really need. Lengthy, I know you are trying to finish and bring another into play. It is your style. Well done, Barb.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Thank you for sticking with the long post. I think this is the longest. I think???
reply by Ben Colder on 16-Jan-2022
    Yes, it is for me. I glanced at your new one and love the photo of the young lady and the horse. Reminded me of my daughter and her first horse.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Excellent writing.
I don't think I've ever read a piece with the density of kiss, kissed, or kissing. I'm guessing every 12-14 words. (smiley face)
Good luck with the book.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    LOL.. This is almost a the end. It is a romance. Thank you for sticking with it.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
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Wow! Gabriel and Katherine certainly seem in love, head over heels, and the kids like them too. I need to get caught up on the plot line and character development of this one. Question: what's your background that allows you to work within a football context so easily?

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    I raised four boys and grew up in a sports family. LOL Thank you for the kind review
Comment from nomi338
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I love these characters. This story gives me such a good feeling, I find myself smiling as I read it. I am having a hard time waiting for them to take the step that will see them uniting as a family as Gabriel and Katherine walk down the aisle and wed.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Thank you for the encouragement. I needed it right now.
reply by nomi338 on 16-Jan-2022
    As always, it was my pleasure.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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I'm glad finally Katherine and Gabriel had a first date. Gabriel also is serving as a father for her boys and a replacement husband for fixing things around the house. What a perfect candidate to be Katherine's husband. I hope she will say Yes.

Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Gabriel has a right to use caution with Katherine. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
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Excellent story my friend and the storyline is interesting and held my attention throughout the piece and the characters interact nicely together throughout!
Thank you for sharing this well written piece with us and many blessings to you and your family this New Year;-)

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Thank you for the encouragement.
reply by Melodie Michelle on 16-Jan-2022
    ;-)
Comment from BethShelby
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This was an excellent chapter. I'm surprised that Gabriel is unsure Katherine would accept his proposal but I guess that is because he knows she has something she hasn't told him yet. Whether or not she is ready probably has to do with the news about the biopsy. Since there is ten post left, I'm guessing the news may not be what we want to hear. I'm looking forward to whatever comes next.

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 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. Gabriel also knows she had a horrible first marriage.
Comment from Begin Again
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"Jordan will right down."

Great as always but the spacing and font made it very difficult to read for these poor eyes. I had to skim a lot of it (sorry). But the dating part and Gabriel's proof of how he's changing and managing things was great. Well done!



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 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    Thank you. I added spaces, I don't know why they are not showing up. I will go back and check. I will fix that area of the missing word.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara, this was another great chapter, but I will admit it is was very, very long. Also you've skipped the double spacing between paragraphs.I know in books you don't do that, but on this site it makes it easier to read. It was as always well written. I found one thing right at beginning: with Reggie at this side = at his side. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
    I accidentally hit save before I added the spacing. I went back and did the spacing. I must have been doing it while you were reading. Thank you.