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A fortress

A rondeau.

49 total reviews 
Comment from Monica Chaddick
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A lovely piece of work, as usual. Great flow. An easy read. It is always a pleasure to read and review your work. Best of luck in all of your future writing endeavors.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Thanks Monica, for these superb comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Wow, a fortress in my mind - this is so interesting as an image. But the faith it's the one that keeps this sanctuary going. "As one should never be defined,
to be disabled and confined,
But all wise options should embrace,
to live by faith, in wisdom's face,
and with trust's presence be aligned.
I build a fortress..."

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Iza, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
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Your poem is indeed a great advice, we all need to build a fortress that shields us from ignorance and faith leads the way. Your poem flows smoothly and words are well chosen. Thankyou for sharing!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Saria, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
reply by Saria/Shreyamsi on 18-Jan-2022
Comment from Gee
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Nice Rondeau
I didn't notice this in the recent rondeau contest.
I think this would have won.

None-the-less, thanks for another enjoyable poem and sharing with us.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
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Just came upon this skillfully written piece. The metaphor of a fortress for the mind is a compelling one. The photo is a wonderful visual support for the theme.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Nancy, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
reply by NANCY V. FORREST on 18-Jan-2022
    :-)
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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"I build a fortress for my mind,
lest foes will breach, a weakness find."
This is truly meant to grab your reader's immediate attention. It is a powerful beginning.
You will not fall into old ways, as you have built a strong fortress. That fortress is one of strong faith in God.
Wonderfully put to help others to build their own fortress.
Blessings,
Mary

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Mary, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Fabulous! I wish I hadn't wasted all my six stars.
I don't know the rules of poetry, but I know that I liked that - a lot.
Great work.
Good luck with it.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks Wayne, for these great comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a well written rondeau of how faith is a fortress that keeps you strong from returning to bad ways that it got you to move away from.
The pictures reminds me of Cinderella's Castle in Disneylland/Disney World
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Joan, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
reply by dragonpoet on 18-Jan-2022
    You are so kindly welcoe, Roy.
    Joan
Comment from lancellot
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This is a very interesting poem. I guess it all depends on your personal chosen point of view. Does the fortress you build confine you, or does it keep the bad elements out and you in a more pure, faithful form?

Very interesting indeed.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Lance, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Janetsue
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This is an excellent rondeau with a spiritual message and added citation of Scripture in the Author's Note. Faith is a precious blessing. In troubled times, more people open their hearts to the comfort that is waiting for them. I am glad you shared this personal message, Roy. You never know who will be reading it with new understanding.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much Janet, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy