A fortress
A rondeau.49 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
I need to build a fortress too...to block out the turmoil that seems to surround me, but then I wonder if I leave behind the ones I love as well. I am still building in my heart and mind, to believe I follow the way he wants me to go...It's a very tall and rugged mountain to climb, but I am sure in the end his comfort will far exceeds my struggles.
Always, Carol
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I need to build a fortress too...to block out the turmoil that seems to surround me, but then I wonder if I leave behind the ones I love as well. I am still building in my heart and mind, to believe I follow the way he wants me to go...It's a very tall and rugged mountain to climb, but I am sure in the end his comfort will far exceeds my struggles.
Always, Carol
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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A sort of being in the world but not of the world, we can empathise with them, but not support the foolishness, thanks Carol blessings Roy
Comment from Cecilia Lynne1
I am continually inspired by your gift of expression and writing.
I am encouraged as I read your entries.
I have always been drawn to the great poets of the past and anyone like yourself who is gifted in that manner today. Your poem entitled "A Fortress" is beautiful.
As a result of this review I have been exposed and have learned the origin and requirements involved in the writing of a 'rondeau' poem. Which you have appeared to have adhered to in accordance to your excellent supportive notes. Your rhyming is great. I am counting 14 Lines but I am understanding that an original 'rondeau' is 15. And that lines 9 and 15 are short. I follow line 9 but am not seeing a similar short refrain line 15. Am I missing something or is line 15 omitted? I follow that all other lines are longer and the same metrical meter count of 8. Your supportive choice of art is excellent. Because I am not quite understanding the structure I have concentrated my review comments on the layout rather than the actual story line which I thoroughly have enjoyed and is supported with scripture in your notes. It is an awesome poem and deserves six stars in my opinion.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I am continually inspired by your gift of expression and writing.
I am encouraged as I read your entries.
I have always been drawn to the great poets of the past and anyone like yourself who is gifted in that manner today. Your poem entitled "A Fortress" is beautiful.
As a result of this review I have been exposed and have learned the origin and requirements involved in the writing of a 'rondeau' poem. Which you have appeared to have adhered to in accordance to your excellent supportive notes. Your rhyming is great. I am counting 14 Lines but I am understanding that an original 'rondeau' is 15. And that lines 9 and 15 are short. I follow line 9 but am not seeing a similar short refrain line 15. Am I missing something or is line 15 omitted? I follow that all other lines are longer and the same metrical meter count of 8. Your supportive choice of art is excellent. Because I am not quite understanding the structure I have concentrated my review comments on the layout rather than the actual story line which I thoroughly have enjoyed and is supported with scripture in your notes. It is an awesome poem and deserves six stars in my opinion.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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You?re right about the 15 line, it was merely and oversight CeciliaLynne, I thank you for such a most encouraging review, comments and stars, blessings my friend, you are massive inspiration, blessings Roy
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Blessings.
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Thank you CeciliaLynne
Comment from lyenochka
What a great message, Roy! I always pray for God's protection over my mind and heart because the evil one can so easily affect our thinking and desires. Thank you for saying it so well.
I think you are missing your 15th line with just the refrain.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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What a great message, Roy! I always pray for God's protection over my mind and heart because the evil one can so easily affect our thinking and desires. Thank you for saying it so well.
I think you are missing your 15th line with just the refrain.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Yes, I?ve fixed both now Helen, thanks for your diligence and support, blessings Roy
Comment from Gloria ....
A fine sentiment and excellent rhythm and rhymes.
Just need to add the last line
I build a fortress.
Love your publishing here, and rondeau. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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A fine sentiment and excellent rhythm and rhymes.
Just need to add the last line
I build a fortress.
Love your publishing here, and rondeau. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much Gloria, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Blessings Owen, "To live by faith in wisdom's face", describes what I also think living by faith means; that every step we take in life is witnessed by our creator. Although we cannot see him we sense his face is ever before us. Well done, God bless you, friend.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Blessings Owen, "To live by faith in wisdom's face", describes what I also think living by faith means; that every step we take in life is witnessed by our creator. Although we cannot see him we sense his face is ever before us. Well done, God bless you, friend.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much Frank, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You wish to build a fortress for your mind, you live by faith, in wisdom's face and with trust's presence be aligned; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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You wish to build a fortress for your mind, you live by faith, in wisdom's face and with trust's presence be aligned; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Brent & Sami
This poem was absolutely amazing! Very powerful story of leaving behind all ways and taking up a new leaf. A spiritual journey that all of us can embrace. I appreciate your valor and your sincereity in your writing. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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This poem was absolutely amazing! Very powerful story of leaving behind all ways and taking up a new leaf. A spiritual journey that all of us can embrace. I appreciate your valor and your sincereity in your writing. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much B&S for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Carol Clark2
The Rondeau form is new to me, and I appreciate the explanation. I also love the fortress imagery, and the decision to embrace wise options, to live by faith with wisdom and trust. I'm wondering if you left off the refrain at the end on purpose, as you have 14 lines here. I like the rhymes you chose. Blessings. Carol
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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The Rondeau form is new to me, and I appreciate the explanation. I also love the fortress imagery, and the decision to embrace wise options, to live by faith with wisdom and trust. I'm wondering if you left off the refrain at the end on purpose, as you have 14 lines here. I like the rhymes you chose. Blessings. Carol
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much Carol, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You're welcome, Roy. I enjoyed your poem.
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your poetry. It's interesting and entertaining. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your poetry. It's interesting and entertaining. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much Raul, for these empathetic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
