Blissfully Yoked
A matched pair, any other travel too burdensome.3 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
It turns out that you didn't waste those good rhymes after all! I always thought 'free form' meant no fixed rhyme structure, which your poem clearly has, with its mono-rhyme stanzas. That waterfall looks like a 'mare's tail', but maybe a more horsey picture would've suited your poetic concept better. I like your use of language in this as you describe your happily yoked partnership
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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It turns out that you didn't waste those good rhymes after all! I always thought 'free form' meant no fixed rhyme structure, which your poem clearly has, with its mono-rhyme stanzas. That waterfall looks like a 'mare's tail', but maybe a more horsey picture would've suited your poetic concept better. I like your use of language in this as you describe your happily yoked partnership
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
Comment from T.E. Loper
I'm not sure that rhyme, when used in any form at any time, is ever wasted, even when the norm, through haste, is ignored. There's a certain uncertainty in the phrase "free form." To create a single word is to form. To gather words together creates a form. In this sense, the contest implies we are free to form, for it would be impossible to be free of form. Of course, I could be wrong.
I really like your poem. Your word choice and attention to rhyme and iambic tetrameter are excellent.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I'm not sure that rhyme, when used in any form at any time, is ever wasted, even when the norm, through haste, is ignored. There's a certain uncertainty in the phrase "free form." To create a single word is to form. To gather words together creates a form. In this sense, the contest implies we are free to form, for it would be impossible to be free of form. Of course, I could be wrong.
I really like your poem. Your word choice and attention to rhyme and iambic tetrameter are excellent.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you. But I'm not going to be calling myself a poet an tie soon.
Comment from Terry Broxson
A well-done poem for this contest, good luck. It is interesting that it is an entry to free-form poetry. The poem could be interrupted in many ways. A husband and wife, two horses, two partners, maybe even two trains of thoughts all moving forward together and making it easier because of the other. Good work.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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A well-done poem for this contest, good luck. It is interesting that it is an entry to free-form poetry. The poem could be interrupted in many ways. A husband and wife, two horses, two partners, maybe even two trains of thoughts all moving forward together and making it easier because of the other. Good work.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Thank you.
I'll always remember James Stewart in 'Shenandoah' when I think of matched pairs. But for this, it is my wife and I.
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You are right, but interesting isn't the word.
I'm no poet, but having written that, I ignorantly looked for a place to play it. I guess you don't want me as a Hearts partner.