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Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the ultimate predisposition of dowsing.
The work highlights the prognostication team comprising Cordelia and her husband as they make their way through farmlands reminiscent of an improved harvest in the future.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of dowsing.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the ultimate predisposition of dowsing.
The work highlights the prognostication team comprising Cordelia and her husband as they make their way through farmlands reminiscent of an improved harvest in the future.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of dowsing.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is an entertaining chapter and will have to go back and read up to this point if available. I will revisit to find out. Your notes were informative had I not read them would have been lost, popping in where I did. Anyway, I will certainly revisit.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This is an entertaining chapter and will have to go back and read up to this point if available. I will revisit to find out. Your notes were informative had I not read them would have been lost, popping in where I did. Anyway, I will certainly revisit.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I am so pleased you want to read the previous chapters. If you go to my portfolio, you can read them. There is no need for a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from Frank Malley
Coleridge's "suspension of disbelief" established a requirement for the reading of imaginative literature. He also suggested that some intelligent semblance to what humans call "reality" was necessary. Crop circles came to my attention fifty years ago when Led Zeppelin depicted one on an album cover; because these sometimes enormous, relatively perfect circles appeared overnight, they became the source of mystery and mysticism. Although crop circles were explained and attributed to human agency, there is apparently still conviction amongst us that these are in some sense supernatural outcomes. And attached to that conviction are a whole bunch of elaborate understandings, including one that is not described in this piece: Michael and Mary lines. Hmm. But - I'll suspend disbelief. This story is a little too laborious and cute for me, like teenage girls who have substituted crop circles for more typical adolescent infatuations. If this is literature, it would benefit from a rewriting that built up the locations' visual impact and possible histories, and spend less time oohing and ahhing.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Coleridge's "suspension of disbelief" established a requirement for the reading of imaginative literature. He also suggested that some intelligent semblance to what humans call "reality" was necessary. Crop circles came to my attention fifty years ago when Led Zeppelin depicted one on an album cover; because these sometimes enormous, relatively perfect circles appeared overnight, they became the source of mystery and mysticism. Although crop circles were explained and attributed to human agency, there is apparently still conviction amongst us that these are in some sense supernatural outcomes. And attached to that conviction are a whole bunch of elaborate understandings, including one that is not described in this piece: Michael and Mary lines. Hmm. But - I'll suspend disbelief. This story is a little too laborious and cute for me, like teenage girls who have substituted crop circles for more typical adolescent infatuations. If this is literature, it would benefit from a rewriting that built up the locations' visual impact and possible histories, and spend less time oohing and ahhing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I actually have personally experienced all of these events. If you want to get some background reading, visit my portfolio. No reviews necessary, just enjoy.
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I guess I'm a diehard skeptic, but I'll take a look at your portfolio.
Thanks.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This journey is really interesting, Liz. It almost makes me want to be on it, feeling the varying sensations at each stop. I wonder how one knows they are a dowser? I'll have to look for your FB page.
Just one tiny typo: "backed out o nto the A361 highway," - remove the space between the o and into.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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This journey is really interesting, Liz. It almost makes me want to be on it, feeling the varying sensations at each stop. I wonder how one knows they are a dowser? I'll have to look for your FB page.
Just one tiny typo: "backed out o nto the A361 highway," - remove the space between the o and into.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. Anyone can be a dowser, you just have to follow a few steps. Then, you'll find yourself dowsing. If you want to be a member, there are just a few questions to answer.
Comment from aryr
Definitely a greatly fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. It was great that
Madeline and Cordelia finally found a crop circle worthy of their investigation. I am really grateful for your narrative notes (one literally repeats itself) to jiggle my memory. It is interesting that Madeline feels she is about the be transported somewhere? An amazing chapter.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Definitely a greatly fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. It was great that
Madeline and Cordelia finally found a crop circle worthy of their investigation. I am really grateful for your narrative notes (one literally repeats itself) to jiggle my memory. It is interesting that Madeline feels she is about the be transported somewhere? An amazing chapter.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I'm glad it is entertaining you.
Comment from BethShelby
I've not read any of your story before, but all this is not completely foreign to me. I've known several dowsers. My daughter is into all kind energy work and my son uses some of these things in his chiropractic work and seems to be able to sense things that lead to healing. I know about crop circles and ley lines. I haven't heard about the Mary and Michael lines. Anyways I find the subject fascinating.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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I've not read any of your story before, but all this is not completely foreign to me. I've known several dowsers. My daughter is into all kind energy work and my son uses some of these things in his chiropractic work and seems to be able to sense things that lead to healing. I know about crop circles and ley lines. I haven't heard about the Mary and Michael lines. Anyways I find the subject fascinating.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your enlightening review. I am thrilled to hear about your knowledge of these subjects. You'll have to ask your children if they have heard of the Mary & Michael line. It's interesting they both work with energies. Is there history in your heritage? My grandfather was a dowser. When I was 3 he taught me how to use a willow Y stick. It was so cool to have that stick pulled right toward the ground.
If you want to catch up, you are welcome to go to my portfolio and read the previous chapters. No review necessary. Just enjoy.
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My grandfather was a dowser too. He always found the place to dig a well and he could find studs in the wall. My children got interested later. Don used muscle testing to tell him whatever he needs to know about what is going on in the body. There is a lot science can't explain.
Comment from lyenochka
It seems ominous since there will be events that in the future they want to forget. But at least, so far, they had a great experience and a change of energy.
She waggled her hands (I had trouble imagining this. What movements are these?)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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It seems ominous since there will be events that in the future they want to forget. But at least, so far, they had a great experience and a change of energy.
She waggled her hands (I had trouble imagining this. What movements are these?)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. Waggled means palms facing her & then twisted so they are away from her. I tried to find a name for that motion. I know that isn't the best. Maybe I should just say it like I just did. I did not want to use the word waved, it's to used.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your novel continues to hold my interest. BUT:
'Little did we know, there would be, in the future, some things we would be fighting to forget forever. '
Commenting on events yet to come either marks your narrator as clairvoyant, or highlights the fact that this is just a piece of writing, excluding the reader from the happening of it. Are you sure you want to do either of these things? I would fix this.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Your novel continues to hold my interest. BUT:
'Little did we know, there would be, in the future, some things we would be fighting to forget forever. '
Commenting on events yet to come either marks your narrator as clairvoyant, or highlights the fact that this is just a piece of writing, excluding the reader from the happening of it. Are you sure you want to do either of these things? I would fix this.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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I am using it as a clairvoyant foreshadowing. It will a fill in eventually. I have given several hints all along in different chapters.
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I have changed the rating as it was a deliberate choice. K
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All of this stuff has actually happened to me in reality except one section yet to come. In the story it is told in passed tense, so Madeline knows what will happen in their future, because she has already lived it. I feel it draws the reader in, to wonder what will happen.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You had an interesting adventure in England. I notice you mention Stonehenge as if you had already been there but I don't remember reading about it and I think I've not missed any part of your trip. When talking about your unbrellas, you need to correct " . . . we didn't used them. . . "
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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You had an interesting adventure in England. I notice you mention Stonehenge as if you had already been there but I don't remember reading about it and I think I've not missed any part of your trip. When talking about your unbrellas, you need to correct " . . . we didn't used them. . . "
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. It was
Chapter 11 where they had a frustrating time at Stonehenge.
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So I did miss one. I'll look for it if I get some time.
