Shying Away From It
When city noise becomes too much. (573 words)10 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
You have written an excellent and thought-provoking story. For you, being left alone in the forest is a joy and a source of restoration and refreshment. I also enjoyed your Author's Notes.
I wish you success for your fine entry.
Wendy
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You have written an excellent and thought-provoking story. For you, being left alone in the forest is a joy and a source of restoration and refreshment. I also enjoyed your Author's Notes.
I wish you success for your fine entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You are brave to pitch a tent in a wilderness or forest. Evidently you knew the surroundings and familiarity of the nature's forest. The bio is greatly appreciated being this was ground area where famous writers had been.
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You are brave to pitch a tent in a wilderness or forest. Evidently you knew the surroundings and familiarity of the nature's forest. The bio is greatly appreciated being this was ground area where famous writers had been.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Left alone in the forest contest.
I like the story about the introverted, Gemma who didn't like urban life. She missed the tranquility of country life.
I can relate to Gemma's desire to be left alone sometimes. I'm the same way. It's easier to write with peace and quiet.
I like the thought that trees like social distancing.
I agree with you, aloneness and loneliness are not the same.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Excellent entry for the Left alone in the forest contest.
I like the story about the introverted, Gemma who didn't like urban life. She missed the tranquility of country life.
I can relate to Gemma's desire to be left alone sometimes. I'm the same way. It's easier to write with peace and quiet.
I like the thought that trees like social distancing.
I agree with you, aloneness and loneliness are not the same.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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oops! You have reviewed a different story to mine. These details are not from my story.
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Oh no, I was using my phone. Sorry. I will change it now.
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Okay, I changed it.
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Thank you! I appreciate that you did this.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Shying Away from It, brings the reader to the core of the woods to get the sense of privacy that seems so impossible to achieve anywhere else.
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This story, Shying Away from It, brings the reader to the core of the woods to get the sense of privacy that seems so impossible to achieve anywhere else.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
I love this write. For, it's not everyday, that a writer pick heavy
topics and subject matters. And this is something that should
be bought to the forefront. For, I believe that many establishments
blast, and force feed their customers loud music, as a distraction,
that clouds their judgement. And on the other side of the same token,
many people can't handle silence cause they have been knee deep in
chaos so long, that they hate to hear themselves think. Nice Write.
Keep Writing. And Stay Connected
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I love this write. For, it's not everyday, that a writer pick heavy
topics and subject matters. And this is something that should
be bought to the forefront. For, I believe that many establishments
blast, and force feed their customers loud music, as a distraction,
that clouds their judgement. And on the other side of the same token,
many people can't handle silence cause they have been knee deep in
chaos so long, that they hate to hear themselves think. Nice Write.
Keep Writing. And Stay Connected
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good story, well written.
When I read the contest caption, I thought of Hansel and Gretel being left in the forest, or Stephen King's girl who loved Tom Gordon. I hope your twist wins you the gold!
Good luck.
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Good story, well written.
When I read the contest caption, I thought of Hansel and Gretel being left in the forest, or Stephen King's girl who loved Tom Gordon. I hope your twist wins you the gold!
Good luck.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Shirley McLain
A nice soothing story to read. I can identify with wanting solitary time. I know a lot of people who can't stand silence. You did a great job. Shirley
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A nice soothing story to read. I can identify with wanting solitary time. I know a lot of people who can't stand silence. You did a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a lovely piece of writing and there is a real sense of place pervading it. It's also a good choice for the competition as most folk will graduate to the action/fear/horror type of thing which the prompt lends itself to.
The trees in this forest know how to live, thought Gemma. you don't really need the thought tag here. There's only Gemma and the italics signal the direct thought process. To use italics and the tag is like telling the reader twice.
Good job
GMG
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Hi there,
This is a lovely piece of writing and there is a real sense of place pervading it. It's also a good choice for the competition as most folk will graduate to the action/fear/horror type of thing which the prompt lends itself to.
The trees in this forest know how to live, thought Gemma. you don't really need the thought tag here. There's only Gemma and the italics signal the direct thought process. To use italics and the tag is like telling the reader twice.
Good job
GMG
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your encouraging response to my story, and also for your advice regarding expression of Gemma's thoughts.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In this Fiction, Gemma got a chance, in a spiritual order, for she felt trees are like individuals, they cannot speak but express their emotions, scientifically true though, she had to go for a camp in the mean time; as if she felt the blessing deep within and after feeling lonely and remembering her a country girl now she felt she was where she needed to be, she could not wait for days; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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In this Fiction, Gemma got a chance, in a spiritual order, for she felt trees are like individuals, they cannot speak but express their emotions, scientifically true though, she had to go for a camp in the mean time; as if she felt the blessing deep within and after feeling lonely and remembering her a country girl now she felt she was where she needed to be, she could not wait for days; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you well. Thanks for sharing that story with us good luck in the contest. I can relate to wanting to get away from city life, I moved from a urban city in NJ to west virgina and never looked back. I cherish peace and quiet.
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Hello fellow writer a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you well. Thanks for sharing that story with us good luck in the contest. I can relate to wanting to get away from city life, I moved from a urban city in NJ to west virgina and never looked back. I cherish peace and quiet.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
