Springtime Miracle
A one line poem15 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your one-line poem is excellent in every respect--descriptive, and delightful, with appealing inclusion of alliteration and rhyming. It conveys a message about how art can catch our eye and please us.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Your one-line poem is excellent in every respect--descriptive, and delightful, with appealing inclusion of alliteration and rhyming. It conveys a message about how art can catch our eye and please us.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Janice, for sharing and praising my poem.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A very nice sentiment. The poem flows well. The picture goes with words well. The background color is complementary.
Suggestion:
Be careful of connotation. Blush is usually embarrassment or pride. Flush is usually used to connote the same but caused by sickness.
It also refers to toilets and to full. With so many meanings in a short line it can be confusing.
I would suggest, if syllable count is not a concern something like resplendent.
Sorry if I sound picky, but succinct words work best, in my opinion.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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A very nice sentiment. The poem flows well. The picture goes with words well. The background color is complementary.
Suggestion:
Be careful of connotation. Blush is usually embarrassment or pride. Flush is usually used to connote the same but caused by sickness.
It also refers to toilets and to full. With so many meanings in a short line it can be confusing.
I would suggest, if syllable count is not a concern something like resplendent.
Sorry if I sound picky, but succinct words work best, in my opinion.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment. I understand what you are saying about connotations, but I think the average reader will understand what BRUSH and FLUSH mean here. .
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
A wonderful one-line poem that, despite its brevity, is rich in visual and emotive imagery.
Reminds me of the meadow behind our home.
How I am longing for spring!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Hello Mystery Writer!
A wonderful one-line poem that, despite its brevity, is rich in visual and emotive imagery.
Reminds me of the meadow behind our home.
How I am longing for spring!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for the lovely praise of my one-liner.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-line poem, Springtime Miracle, notes that the Maker's mighty hand can fill the world canvas with a stroke. The colors will be bright and the the tone, just right.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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This one-line poem, Springtime Miracle, notes that the Maker's mighty hand can fill the world canvas with a stroke. The colors will be bright and the the tone, just right.
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Bill, for sharing and praising my poem.
Comment from zanya
Excellent use of the limited format here of just one line of poetry - an expression of the power and love of God for his people and their earthly home
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Excellent use of the limited format here of just one line of poetry - an expression of the power and love of God for his people and their earthly home
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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I am delighted you enjoyed my one-liner, Zanya. Many thanks for sharing.
