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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from Melodie Michelle
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Yes, we love our high school football here in Texas, esp East Texas, my friend! The storyline is interesting and held my attention throughout the piece;-) The characters interacted perfectly together! The imagery is spot on and ties it all together for a great presentation!
Thanks for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Melodie Michelle on 07-Feb-2022
    ;-)
Comment from Wendy G
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What a great chapter, and thank you for the extra information in the notes about the drainage procedure. I always enjoy your writing, as it is clear and interesting, so thank you. I hope your travels are safe and happy and that you have a lovely time with your mother.
Wendy

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Another great chapter to read. You did an excellent job, as always. I didn't see a single error. Does pressure changes cause you to swell? If you have to wear a compression sleeve when you fly, it seems to indicate pressure changes could be a problem. Have a great evening. Shirley

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Yes, air pressure causes problems. I think that's also why changes in altitude does too.
Comment from judiverse
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The in-laws are interfering again, using Katherine's cancer as an excuse to get custody. I hope that notion will quickly get squashed. They are not interested in the boys. If they were, they'd have visited them and shown them some attention. Gabriel's job offer is another complication. I think he didn't take it for good reasons. He's where he wants to be at this point in his life. Excellent developments and characterization. judi

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Gabe is in a good place.
reply by judiverse on 07-Feb-2022
    You're very welcome. I'm glad Gabriel decided to stay where he was. He didn't even have to think about it very long. judi
Comment from Ric Myworld
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As they get closer and Gabe just turned down a college coaching spot, we can only hope there's good news coming for Katherine. Have a nice trip! No, let me rephrase that. Have a nice vacation visiting your mom! Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
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I thank you for the realistic representation of what it is like to deal with his terrible disease. I pray that I nor anyone I know and love will ever have to face it. If that issue comes up, stories like yours will help me learn how to approach it. I am wise enough to know that each situation depends upon the individual. So, I do not expect to be able to duplicate your approach or anyone else's.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by nomi338 on 07-Feb-2022
    Reviewing your work has never been difficult. Good quality writing demands positive reviews. When a reviewer responds negatively, he is lying and being dishonest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    You're so sweet and encouraging. I do get some negative reviews. Most of them have to deal with being too goody two shoes. They want more sex. One person actually said Gabe would have left Katherine a long time ago because she won't go to bed with him. No man would put up with that.
reply by nomi338 on 07-Feb-2022
    Spoken like a true idiot. People like that give good men a bad name and reputation. Please, do not listen to those clowns.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you. I want to keep my novels wholesome. I want unconditional love to win.
reply by nomi338 on 07-Feb-2022
    I am with you 100%. You must compromise your standards to please someone who does not really care, they only want cheap entertainment.
Comment from Jay Squires
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Bravo. Dang, that Gabriel is is just too doggone good a person.

Sarah offered, "That's because you've pouted all morning." [I'm not sure that answers the question: "I'm not sure what Mom fixed for lunch."]

The Bears were victorious and O'Henry didn't get the ball again. [You know, I find that hard to believe that O'Henry wouldn't get the ball over a period of 3 quarters. It would be more believable to say he never made more than 10 yards.]

"I felt there wasn't any reason too. [... any reason to.]

This will probably be the last chapter you post until you return.


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    You're correct. I have fixed those areas. Thank you.
Comment from royowen
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I think somehow Katherine's affliction will probably follow your experience. But kudos to this character Gabriel. It shows people can change into somebody they respect and like. After all life is about one's own integrity and dignity, not cleverness or ambition, we have to live with ourselves, I've been both sides of the fence. Doing the right thing is a decision. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by royowen on 07-Feb-2022
    Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Sankey
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A total, lovely, long read, making up for your "down" time, ahead, I guess. In your notes below the chapter.... only if you agree. so the surgeon put (it)on[ it].

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anne Johnston
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Thank you for this chapter. I like the decision that Gabriel made to stay with his school. Glad Katherine is recovering well. I had surgery for breast cancer over three years ago, but did not have to go through treatments.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
    That's a good thing. My mom had her left breast removed because of cancer and just had to take a pill. My cancer ended up being stage 4, so had all the treatments. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Anne Johnston on 06-Feb-2022
    You are welcome