Mysterious Ways
With trust and hope, and God as your friend.19 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
You have 4 votes now.
All the pain and anguish in this world is caused by us.
Adamo and Eva disobeyed and ate from the tree of knowledge .. God could have destroyed them but instead to prove his point that without his guidance , we will not be happy , he let them go and live their lives .. have children and populate Earth.
We all have freewill and we can decide the path we want to follow.
Sadly those in power are greedy and seek wealth and they will go to war to have it causing much sufferings.
Even just ordinary people are inclined to seek success and are ready to squash anyone that gets in their path.
God is watching with sad eyes but he knows that this is the only way to prove his point.
God gave a time limit in which this dispute was to take place.
Hopefully the end is near. It's obvious that we need his guidance. Alone we are lost.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Ciao!
You have 4 votes now.
All the pain and anguish in this world is caused by us.
Adamo and Eva disobeyed and ate from the tree of knowledge .. God could have destroyed them but instead to prove his point that without his guidance , we will not be happy , he let them go and live their lives .. have children and populate Earth.
We all have freewill and we can decide the path we want to follow.
Sadly those in power are greedy and seek wealth and they will go to war to have it causing much sufferings.
Even just ordinary people are inclined to seek success and are ready to squash anyone that gets in their path.
God is watching with sad eyes but he knows that this is the only way to prove his point.
God gave a time limit in which this dispute was to take place.
Hopefully the end is near. It's obvious that we need his guidance. Alone we are lost.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you for voting for my entry! I agree with you about the greed and evil in today's world... we must be such a disappointment to God.
Comment from poetwatch
You got the message out, LisaMay. :) I hope it stays in your heart and you keep sharing it. We all need to hear from writers their faith and love for God and his Son. This is a good entry for the 39 Word Spiritual Fiction Contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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You got the message out, LisaMay. :) I hope it stays in your heart and you keep sharing it. We all need to hear from writers their faith and love for God and his Son. This is a good entry for the 39 Word Spiritual Fiction Contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your kind words Jose.
Comment from Debra White
Hello LisaMay :)
Good luck in the voting booth with this well thought out entry.
I enjoyed your theme and the angle you approached the prompt from.
I also liked that you used dialogue throughout.
Best wishes as always, Debra
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Hello LisaMay :)
Good luck in the voting booth with this well thought out entry.
I enjoyed your theme and the angle you approached the prompt from.
I also liked that you used dialogue throughout.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from lancellot
Interesting. Many people who live on the street do have mental illnesses, and this person seems to be one, because his guardian angel sucks at his job. All joking aside, I think this is very touching and was a great story idea for the contest.
Good luck.
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Interesting. Many people who live on the street do have mental illnesses, and this person seems to be one, because his guardian angel sucks at his job. All joking aside, I think this is very touching and was a great story idea for the contest.
Good luck.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great entry for the 39 Word Spiritual Fiction writing prompt contest. Good form according to the contest requirements.
We have a huge homeless people problem in the United States of America.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
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Great entry for the 39 Word Spiritual Fiction writing prompt contest. Good form according to the contest requirements.
We have a huge homeless people problem in the United States of America.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Everyone needs a guardian angel. Your story explains it very well.
At times, life can be tough. But as long as one has a positive attitude, life isn't like hell.
Thanks for sharing.
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Everyone needs a guardian angel. Your story explains it very well.
At times, life can be tough. But as long as one has a positive attitude, life isn't like hell.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from Debbie Pope
Miss Cookie would be proud of this spiritual fiction. The mark of good fiction is that the author makes the experience real. You certainly do that. Your dialogue is true to life and wise. You say it all in six sentences. You vary the length of your sentences from one word to twelve to make it interesting.
Well done. And, thank you for the verses from the hymn. Last note. You need a comma after "angel" don't you? Or does the however make the first clause dependent? I don't know, but I expect you will.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Miss Cookie would be proud of this spiritual fiction. The mark of good fiction is that the author makes the experience real. You certainly do that. Your dialogue is true to life and wise. You say it all in six sentences. You vary the length of your sentences from one word to twelve to make it interesting.
Well done. And, thank you for the verses from the hymn. Last note. You need a comma after "angel" don't you? Or does the however make the first clause dependent? I don't know, but I expect you will.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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I miss Miss Cookie's items of simple faith.
Thanks for your comments about my brief story. Using commas I found to be an interesting technical/personal decision. The case for and against use of the 'serial' comma and the 'oxford' comma is a bit regional. I have reverted to Australian/NZ/Brit usage here as I was taught that a comma isn't necessary when only 2 items are listed.... I noticed on FanStory, predominantly American, use of separating commas is much more widespread.
I checked it out on what the Internet says. It seems to discourage over-use:
"Despite being named after a British University, the Oxford comma (the comma used before "and" in lists (e.g., I like wookies, ewoks, and droids)) is not considered standard in UK English because only one style guide (Oxford) recommends it."
I also read this about the New York Times style guide: "In most cases, The Times stylebook discourages the serial comma, often called the Oxford comma because it was traditionally used by the Oxford University Press.)"
I tend to use that comma when there might be some ambiguity, but in my sentence I didn't mind the link between having a guardian angel and trusting in God. I also felt it was more natural to speech, as I find reading too many commas is interruptive to spoken flow. So I did think about it, but found it unnecessary in this case.
However, I do use that comma quite often, and will continue to do so. (See in that sentence it would still make sense if the comma wasn't there, but we have probably gotten used to seeing it there.) Another thing - off this site, I would never use 'gotten', I would use 'got', as 'gotten' is considered American usage here. Language variations are interesting and often perplexing. (Hmmm.... does that need a comma? hahaha.)
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I did want to hear your answer about the comma, but I did not mean for you to have to read all that. It's a very confusing issue. As far as I am concerned, with creative writing, commas go where the writer wants them. As a high school paper grader, I made students use commas with independent clauses joined by and. With creative writing, it is a different matter altogether.
I miss Miss Cookie, too. Nobody has told me to stay on praying ground lately.
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I found it interesting to read about commas. Language evolves and creative use is more acceptable... I guess it becomes a personal style. When Liz was a regular poster it used to peeve me how often she used 'erstwhile'... my personal preference would have been for a different word.
Nice chatting with you... stay on praying ground!
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Thank you for saying that. Nice to remember Miss Cookie today.
As to Liz, I didn't read much that she wrote. If an author that I read on FanStory used erstwhile just once, I don't think I would read that author again. Peeves me, too, and who needs that.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Jesus is our Heaven friend. Thank you for sharing this lovely 39 words. This is profoundly true for us Christians. You did a wonderful job. Have a great day. Shirley
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Jesus is our Heaven friend. Thank you for sharing this lovely 39 words. This is profoundly true for us Christians. You did a wonderful job. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Very nice. The selected photo fits well. The author notes are even better.
Good luck, Competition seems tough. And now for the rest of my reading what they have to say.
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Very nice. The selected photo fits well. The author notes are even better.
Good luck, Competition seems tough. And now for the rest of my reading what they have to say.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
As a retired church musician, I always loved Abide With Me. Your spiritual flash fiction story is short but comforting and reassuring. I enjoy writing flash fiction, but I couldn't make 39 words work. You did an impressive job. Best wishes in the contest.
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As a retired church musician, I always loved Abide With Me. Your spiritual flash fiction story is short but comforting and reassuring. I enjoy writing flash fiction, but I couldn't make 39 words work. You did an impressive job. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
