Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Writer's Lesson"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from sue133
I enjoyed reading your poem. It is a difficult form of poetry and I think you have mostly mastered it. I am wondering about the second quatrain, second and fourth line..'Soulfully' 'honoring'. They don't seem to rhyme.
The theme is excellent and a good lesson. As in painting, it's important to get going with it and not ponder too long. After all, one can paint over or write over anything !
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It is a difficult form of poetry and I think you have mostly mastered it. I am wondering about the second quatrain, second and fourth line..'Soulfully' 'honoring'. They don't seem to rhyme.
The theme is excellent and a good lesson. As in painting, it's important to get going with it and not ponder too long. After all, one can paint over or write over anything !
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Sue - Oh! My last edit failed to post, thanks for catching that- the intended was replace soulfully had been conjuring - smiling back, Jim
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I agree with what you say: "So, resume, you must with pen and ink.
But, tune to your inner voice, don't overthink."
I have been away from Fanstory for a while due to health issue. I am back now and will listen to my inner voice. Write write write.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I agree with what you say: "So, resume, you must with pen and ink.
But, tune to your inner voice, don't overthink."
I have been away from Fanstory for a while due to health issue. I am back now and will listen to my inner voice. Write write write.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
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My prays are pouring forth, sending your the highest in best in your recovery - to use as you deem purposeful, Be well! Jim
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
What an encouraging poem, well done!! Your words hit home for me as a new writer. I enjoyed the pace and the message conveyed. I will recommend your work to others.
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What an encouraging poem, well done!! Your words hit home for me as a new writer. I enjoyed the pace and the message conveyed. I will recommend your work to others.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
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Have a wonderful Thursday! Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
Fantastic words of advice! Yes, we can overthink something and lose the inspiration in our art. The rough draft time is to let creativity flow and as you expertly compared it to the sculpture and the artist, we need to treasure the gems of our words.
I wonder if in your first line "you ceased the draft." Did you mean "seized the draft" to take hold of it to allow play? Or "ceased to draft" as in stop creating drafts ?
The title needs an apostrophe (A Writer's Lesson) but I know sometimes FS chews up apostrophes. But I found if I type directly and not copy and paste, there isn't any problem.
its' unseen treasure; (its) for the possessive
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Fantastic words of advice! Yes, we can overthink something and lose the inspiration in our art. The rough draft time is to let creativity flow and as you expertly compared it to the sculpture and the artist, we need to treasure the gems of our words.
I wonder if in your first line "you ceased the draft." Did you mean "seized the draft" to take hold of it to allow play? Or "ceased to draft" as in stop creating drafts ?
The title needs an apostrophe (A Writer's Lesson) but I know sometimes FS chews up apostrophes. But I found if I type directly and not copy and paste, there isn't any problem.
its' unseen treasure; (its) for the possessive
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much - This is good feedback, I will employ it, best always, Jim
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I believe poets put themselves out there more than prose writers. The poem must evoke emotion using only a few words. I enjoyed reading.
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I believe poets put themselves out there more than prose writers. The poem must evoke emotion using only a few words. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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thank you Barbara, Yes it was self-flagellation for putting out unpolished work of late ...ugh!
Comment from royowen
It would probably be great if you separated them into the four quatrains you suggested, just for the reader's sake Jim, although a lot of folks leave as a single stanza, but that's not what you said in your notes. But beautifully written Jim, I admire you effort, blessings Roy
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It would probably be great if you separated them into the four quatrains you suggested, just for the reader's sake Jim, although a lot of folks leave as a single stanza, but that's not what you said in your notes. But beautifully written Jim, I admire you effort, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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You are so correct and totally within reason as you indicate. Thank you as always for your honest feedback!
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Well done
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem reads well to tell of the process writers go through to write their thoughts out. I enjoyed reading it. Your image choice pairs well with your words. I like the comparison of the sculptor and woodworker to the process of writing. You are right about the over thinking of a work. Writers always want to make it better when it's already there.
its' unseen treasure; --> its
Respectfully, Jan
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Your poem reads well to tell of the process writers go through to write their thoughts out. I enjoyed reading it. Your image choice pairs well with your words. I like the comparison of the sculptor and woodworker to the process of writing. You are right about the over thinking of a work. Writers always want to make it better when it's already there.
its' unseen treasure; --> its
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Jan! Grammarly's got me on this one. I appreciate your advice.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It is an excellent lesson, and one all writers of all forms could learn from. The last couplet said it all. Don't over think, that is where they go wrong. The more instantanious the better the final result. Well done! :) Sandra xx
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It is an excellent lesson, and one all writers of all forms could learn from. The last couplet said it all. Don't over think, that is where they go wrong. The more instantanious the better the final result. Well done! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Smiling back!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a wonderful poem that covers a variety of handcrafted arts. But your artisan work of choice is with words. The words you chose are clever and effective and I think the inner voice is right! Well-done!
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This is a wonderful poem that covers a variety of handcrafted arts. But your artisan work of choice is with words. The words you chose are clever and effective and I think the inner voice is right! Well-done!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Terry, I do appreciate your comments, thank you!
Comment from Anne Johnston
A well-written poem giving those of us who dare to write poetry, some good advice. I like the last lines: "So, resume, you must with pen and ink.
But, tune to your inner voice, don't over think." Often we write something from our heart, and then try to perfect it, when maybe it was best left as it was.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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A well-written poem giving those of us who dare to write poetry, some good advice. I like the last lines: "So, resume, you must with pen and ink.
But, tune to your inner voice, don't over think." Often we write something from our heart, and then try to perfect it, when maybe it was best left as it was.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Hi Anne, thank you!
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You are welcome
