Faded Away
My love for you just...9 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This piece, must be, for it sounds reflective of what was once. For those who haven't experience such a splitting, you are fortunate. For we that have, that is a story where we shouldn't say "I'm sorry." (Love Story)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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This piece, must be, for it sounds reflective of what was once. For those who haven't experience such a splitting, you are fortunate. For we that have, that is a story where we shouldn't say "I'm sorry." (Love Story)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this great review. I love that movie, it's worth re-watching. Have a good evening. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem of broken hearts, Faded Away, has a good rhyme and meter as the poet struggles with the undoing of a relationship which takes a lot of flesh away with the removed bindings.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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This poem of broken hearts, Faded Away, has a good rhyme and meter as the poet struggles with the undoing of a relationship which takes a lot of flesh away with the removed bindings.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you, you are a very perceptive person. I appreciate this great review. :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
There are no words that can ease the loss and pain that a person goes through. Praying that the love of God enfolds you during this time; Remember when the sun goes down, the stars come out, and there's a moon shining above you.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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There are no words that can ease the loss and pain that a person goes through. Praying that the love of God enfolds you during this time; Remember when the sun goes down, the stars come out, and there's a moon shining above you.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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You are a very understanding person. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. :)
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thank you.
Comment from WriterHeather
A heartbreaking but beautifully written piece for the broken hearts contest. It sound as though the one who was hurt took back their power! So its has a sort of uplifting ending. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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A heartbreaking but beautifully written piece for the broken hearts contest. It sound as though the one who was hurt took back their power! So its has a sort of uplifting ending. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you, as always I appreciate the stars. :)
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a very good story, but the meter needs to be cleaned up a bit. This will be good piece of verse when it reads more smoothly. One thing to look at is the first syllable of each line. Some are hard beats, and some are soft.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This is a very good story, but the meter needs to be cleaned up a bit. This will be good piece of verse when it reads more smoothly. One thing to look at is the first syllable of each line. Some are hard beats, and some are soft.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading. I really don't pay attention to meter and things like that. I just write what I feel in my heart, but I know that it's important to a lot of writers. Thanks again.
Comment from Lunar Duck
The feeling is disturbingly lonely. Many will relate to that. The use of similes and descriptive phrases definitely enhance the poem. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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The feeling is disturbingly lonely. Many will relate to that. The use of similes and descriptive phrases definitely enhance the poem. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for this review, it's appreciated.
Comment from Thatguypk
An uncommonly sensible broken heart, who instead of allowing the pain to continue by sliding back into an old routine, breaks free in an attempt to be mended. That takes strength. A very nicely written message to fellow heart-break sufferers.
PK
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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An uncommonly sensible broken heart, who instead of allowing the pain to continue by sliding back into an old routine, breaks free in an attempt to be mended. That takes strength. A very nicely written message to fellow heart-break sufferers.
PK
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this insightful review, I'm always glad to hear from you. :)
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello mystery poet a merry Monday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Broken Hearts writing prompt entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Hello mystery poet a merry Monday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Broken Hearts writing prompt entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this nice review. :)
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and unique. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poetry. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and unique. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poetry. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you Raul 1. I appreciate this great review. :)
