Cell Number 273
A visit to the historic prison. (350 words)16 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This was entertaining until the last part. how sad that Benson's great grandfather was imprisoned wrongfully and felt the need to commit suicide. And sadder yet that his spirit remains in the very cell he was locked up in when he killed himself. It is no wonder Benson was hesitant to go on the tour of the old jail cell of a hundred years ago!
Even today there are those who are wrongfully imprisoned because they are poor and are not represented fairly by the attorney assigned to their case. I hope I never am in that situation, that's for sure!
Jesse
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This was entertaining until the last part. how sad that Benson's great grandfather was imprisoned wrongfully and felt the need to commit suicide. And sadder yet that his spirit remains in the very cell he was locked up in when he killed himself. It is no wonder Benson was hesitant to go on the tour of the old jail cell of a hundred years ago!
Even today there are those who are wrongfully imprisoned because they are poor and are not represented fairly by the attorney assigned to their case. I hope I never am in that situation, that's for sure!
Jesse
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your feedback. I hate miscarriages of justice, especially when poverty leads to it and punishment becomes extreme. I would hate to be locked up too.
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Yes, freedom is a very precious thing.
Extreme poverty is not. Freedom from poverty and freedom from being locked up are two things I always hope I have.
Jesse
Comment from Wils
I can relate to this story. I once did a night tour of Fremantle Prison in Perth. That place is creepy. You caught the mood very well. Somehow you can't help but want to spice up the creepiness. Nice job.
Geoff
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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I can relate to this story. I once did a night tour of Fremantle Prison in Perth. That place is creepy. You caught the mood very well. Somehow you can't help but want to spice up the creepiness. Nice job.
Geoff
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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That would creep me out too. Convict history can be deeply troubling. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from royowen
Isn't that a very sad story indeed, I'm sure there would have been many miscarriages of justice, especially all those years ago, particularly among the poor. It was really quite interesting, and scary, great write, well done, blessings Roy
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Isn't that a very sad story indeed, I'm sure there would have been many miscarriages of justice, especially all those years ago, particularly among the poor. It was really quite interesting, and scary, great write, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Plenty of excitement in this story, and I like the inclusion of a little history in your notes. A really good image to set the scene. Reminds of the night-time Ghost Tours at the former Sydney Quarantine Station. My son played a horrid trick on me there. I had forgotten till I read your story! Well written. Best wishes for your success. (My entry is too plain, and not very exciting, but nevertheless ...)
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Plenty of excitement in this story, and I like the inclusion of a little history in your notes. A really good image to set the scene. Reminds of the night-time Ghost Tours at the former Sydney Quarantine Station. My son played a horrid trick on me there. I had forgotten till I read your story! Well written. Best wishes for your success. (My entry is too plain, and not very exciting, but nevertheless ...)
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your comments. I can think of nothing worse than being falsely accused and locked away.
Oooh... what trick did your son play on you at the quarantine station?
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He went ahead too, and popped out next to a coffin, just as they were opening it. Everything was in almost darkness.
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Oh my gosh, I would've jumped out of my skin!
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I was not happy with him - which amused him even more. He nearly gave me a heart attack. He was a great practical joker, and I was usually the victim!
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Kids love a reaction.
Comment from lindafisher
This is a well written piece of fiction, but with an element of truth via your explanatory notes. The debtors prison of Newgate, London was a prime example of injustice. I love your spooky story.
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This is a well written piece of fiction, but with an element of truth via your explanatory notes. The debtors prison of Newgate, London was a prime example of injustice. I love your spooky story.
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A scary write Lisa, inventive and believable too. In Lichfield at the old town hall they have cells in the basement, the door is always open and you can wander around and look at the cells whenever you want. I once visited and is was cold and dingy down there and I was easily frightened and I soon left never to return! Your write brought back the memory. Love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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A scary write Lisa, inventive and believable too. In Lichfield at the old town hall they have cells in the basement, the door is always open and you can wander around and look at the cells whenever you want. I once visited and is was cold and dingy down there and I was easily frightened and I soon left never to return! Your write brought back the memory. Love Dolly x
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Prisons give me the heeby jeebies. I'd hate to be locked up.
I tried to avoid making the story too scary as it was quite specific in the contest 'rules' that it was not to be a horror story.
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The mix was just right I thought, a tantalising touch of the supernatural which made it even more believable x x x
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Thank you!
