The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Why the Stutter"Adventures around & upon a hill
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Comment from James Ott
The easy narrative kept my interest. The dialogue is natural and moved the story along. (I know aviation terminology and "check your six" means the pilot should look behind him for an enemy.) The writing in general is excellent. I wondered about the "point" of it all, though this is a chapter and a "point" may not be necessary at that stage. I wondered, too, about the present tense used in the reference to the narrator's love of keraoki. One wonders where it is all going, perhaps a good thing.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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The easy narrative kept my interest. The dialogue is natural and moved the story along. (I know aviation terminology and "check your six" means the pilot should look behind him for an enemy.) The writing in general is excellent. I wondered about the "point" of it all, though this is a chapter and a "point" may not be necessary at that stage. I wondered, too, about the present tense used in the reference to the narrator's love of keraoki. One wonders where it is all going, perhaps a good thing.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. If you would like to read previous chapters, go to my portfolio. No reviews are necessary, just enjoy and get caught up.
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Will do as soon as I get free time.
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Remember, no reviewing necessary, just read it like you do a regular book. Although sometimes when I'm reading a really good book. I think, 'oh, I don't have to write a review.
Comment from papa55mike
Well, that chapter covered about everything from dousing to crop circles. The part about dragging the harps up the mountain will be interesting. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Well, that chapter covered about everything from dousing to crop circles. The part about dragging the harps up the mountain will be interesting. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. If you haven't read previous chapters, go to my portfolio. No reviews are necessary, just enjoy and get caught up.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter and going off to sing Karaoke sounds like fun for them. Their discussion of crop circles is always interesting and so is the info you add in your after notes. I had no idea they have been around for so long. You do have a few missing words and quotes: . . private just . . . the first I met them . . . tomorrow's," . . .
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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This is an interesting chapter and going off to sing Karaoke sounds like fun for them. Their discussion of crop circles is always interesting and so is the info you add in your after notes. I had no idea they have been around for so long. You do have a few missing words and quotes: . . private just . . . the first I met them . . . tomorrow's," . . .
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter and going off to sing Karaoke sounds like fun for them. Their discussion of crop circles is always interesting and so is the info you add in your after notes. I had no idea they have been around for so long. You do have a few missing words and quotes: . . private just . . . the first I met them . . . tomorrow's," . . .
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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This is an interesting chapter and going off to sing Karaoke sounds like fun for them. Their discussion of crop circles is always interesting and so is the info you add in your after notes. I had no idea they have been around for so long. You do have a few missing words and quotes: . . private just . . . the first I met them . . . tomorrow's," . . .
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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I fixed up the suggestions...thank you
Comment from aryr
This indeed was a great continuation chapter, Liz. I really enjoyed the thought or idea of going to a Karaoke Bar. Both of the ladies would definitely do their best. It was surprising that Glastonbury Tor had instilled the reactions to the pending hike up the stairs. Perhaps there was indeed something different about those steps? Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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This indeed was a great continuation chapter, Liz. I really enjoyed the thought or idea of going to a Karaoke Bar. Both of the ladies would definitely do their best. It was surprising that Glastonbury Tor had instilled the reactions to the pending hike up the stairs. Perhaps there was indeed something different about those steps? Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. We shall soon see what this is all about in about 3 or4 chapters from now.
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You are so very welcome, Liz.
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***grin***
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Mmmm, now I will just think about it, lol. (not really) lol.
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lol
Comment from Judy Lawless
It's interesting how the whole group seems to feel the stress of things, and how a simple suggestion can bring it back down, Liz. And now they're headed for some fun with karaoke. Well done
I found this that I missed last time:
"they are hopping on a private just(jet) with..."
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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It's interesting how the whole group seems to feel the stress of things, and how a simple suggestion can bring it back down, Liz. And now they're headed for some fun with karaoke. Well done
I found this that I missed last time:
"they are hopping on a private just(jet) with..."
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the fun review. I'm glad you are following the story. It's fun to get your reactions.
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You're most welcome, Liz.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This works well as a stand-alone story, it's when trying to work it into the context of your nvel that things seem to come unstuck. Also, the choice of title doesn't reflect the chapter as a whole, and you have belaboured the point of 'each others six'.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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This works well as a stand-alone story, it's when trying to work it into the context of your nvel that things seem to come unstuck. Also, the choice of title doesn't reflect the chapter as a whole, and you have belaboured the point of 'each others six'.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your review. The belaboring is a characteristic of Madeline.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Great chapter. I've been following along as best I can, but I feel I still have some catching up to do. I'm happy Cordelia convinced Madiline to go for Karaoke. I will continue to follow this.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Great chapter. I've been following along as best I can, but I feel I still have some catching up to do. I'm happy Cordelia convinced Madiline to go for Karaoke. I will continue to follow this.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your review. I may have invited you to go to my portfolio. You will also find detailed Author's notes that may clear some of this us. It is intentionally cloaked in mystery because even the characters don't know what is about to happen.
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Thanks Liz, I'll do that. Sorry I sound so confused. It's difficult to read, stop, and then go back, especially with a complicated story line.
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I agree, that's why sometimes, I prefer to binge read some people books.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Great read. Very creative. I felt as if I were there listening to the singers with songs from the past. You have my best wishes. And I hope you win the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Great read. Very creative. I felt as if I were there listening to the singers with songs from the past. You have my best wishes. And I hope you win the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. If you are interested, you can go to my portfolio to read the previous chapters. No review is required, just enjoy.
I just noticed. I think you must have done the same as I have. There is something that happens if we hit return too many times. It knocks the number of stars down. I did that with one of my 6 star writers, I'd given her a 4. She was confused. I couldn't do anything except apologize. I was a bit mortified. But I learned to look before pressing send. Sometimes I've forgotten & can only hope I haven't done that again. The reason I say this is because yours ended up on 2 stars. I am sure you did not intend to give me a 2.
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Thank you so much. I will get to reading your work soon.
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***warm smile***
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Thank you.
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Thank you for your fun review.
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You are welcome.
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***smile***
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you connect these ladies together. I can't remember the "Liz" from the previous chapters. Can you add her into your list of characters at the end?
You prepare us well for the karaoke scene that is coming up. Cordelia has a good explanation as to why the harp music is very different.
It seems all the ladies have some feeling of fear about the Tor and the stuttering confirms it.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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I like how you connect these ladies together. I can't remember the "Liz" from the previous chapters. Can you add her into your list of characters at the end?
You prepare us well for the karaoke scene that is coming up. Cordelia has a good explanation as to why the harp music is very different.
It seems all the ladies have some feeling of fear about the Tor and the stuttering confirms it.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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I just realized & had to hope out of bed to take this down. There are chapters before this. I get confused with what I'm working on & what I'm supposed to post.' I guess I can't erase this just add to it.,
Thank you for getting the review straight. Liz was one of the friends & companions of a harpist. Madeline was checking to see who was affected by the prospective trip to Glastonbury.
