Off the rails
Going ...24 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping--brilliantly narrated--stunning depiction of crash pending and John's terror. Skillful incorporation of backstory as to her storming out and mother's fear for her.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Gripping--brilliantly narrated--stunning depiction of crash pending and John's terror. Skillful incorporation of backstory as to her storming out and mother's fear for her.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you Liz! Super review. I am glad you enjoyed it!
Wendy
Comment from Anne Johnston
This is a beautiful story, Wendy, and very well written. It shows two things, that prayer is powerful, and that God can work miracles when they are needed. I am sure that we have angels watching out for us.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This is a beautiful story, Wendy, and very well written. It shows two things, that prayer is powerful, and that God can work miracles when they are needed. I am sure that we have angels watching out for us.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you Anne, very much. I appreciate your review. Yes, with Him all things are possible.
Wendy
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You are welcome, Wendy
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've written a beautiful and thought-provoking story for this contest, Wendy. Miracles such as this are often considered supernatural fiction, but sometimes they do happen. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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You've written a beautiful and thought-provoking story for this contest, Wendy. Miracles such as this are often considered supernatural fiction, but sometimes they do happen. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you Judy for your thoughtful review. Yes, they are possible indeed. This story is fiction, but supernatural events happened, as they could in real life, if God chose to act in such a way by sending an angel to protect someone. I appreciate your time and kind words.
Wendy
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You?re welcome, Wendy.
Comment from Annmuma
My dad was a railroad engineer and he once hit a child who had his ear to the tracks listening to train. In spite of the whistle, the child did not move in time and Daddy's train hit him. The family lived in a very rural, wooded area. Of course, the child was taken to the hospital and the Missouri-Pacific was picking up all charges. My dad was devastated and was there every day to visit. One day, he came in to find that the family had taken the boy from the hospital in the middle of the night -- the thought was that they were afraid they would have charges to pay.
This happened back in the mid-1940's. They never found the family; from what I heard as a child myself, was that no one really looked. Times were so different; there was no thought of lawsuit.
Anyway, back to your story. well written and I enjoyed it. By the way, the second-in-command or a railroad engine used to be the Fireman. Then the Switchman and the Conductor. Don't know if it is still that way or not. ann
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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My dad was a railroad engineer and he once hit a child who had his ear to the tracks listening to train. In spite of the whistle, the child did not move in time and Daddy's train hit him. The family lived in a very rural, wooded area. Of course, the child was taken to the hospital and the Missouri-Pacific was picking up all charges. My dad was devastated and was there every day to visit. One day, he came in to find that the family had taken the boy from the hospital in the middle of the night -- the thought was that they were afraid they would have charges to pay.
This happened back in the mid-1940's. They never found the family; from what I heard as a child myself, was that no one really looked. Times were so different; there was no thought of lawsuit.
Anyway, back to your story. well written and I enjoyed it. By the way, the second-in-command or a railroad engine used to be the Fireman. Then the Switchman and the Conductor. Don't know if it is still that way or not. ann
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you Ann - a super review. Much appreciated. I am sorry your father went through that horrific experience. In Australia, our terms are different, so I just left it as second-in-charge.
Wendy
Comment from Begin Again
I believe very strongly in those angels who watch over us so closely and keep us safe from harm. You've written it well and addressed the occasion perfectly. I loved it!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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I believe very strongly in those angels who watch over us so closely and keep us safe from harm. You've written it well and addressed the occasion perfectly. I loved it!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much Carol. I appreciate your positive and encouraging words.
Wendy
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
Wonderful story. I like the way you narrate that prayer changes things. Erica could have died and her father, the train driver would have grieved for her but God changes things because her mother prayed. Thanks for sharing and wishing you the very best in the contest, Kit
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Wonderful story. I like the way you narrate that prayer changes things. Erica could have died and her father, the train driver would have grieved for her but God changes things because her mother prayed. Thanks for sharing and wishing you the very best in the contest, Kit
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you for reviewing Kit. I appreciate it a lot.
Wendy
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You are welcome
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
You did a great job of tying your angel story together so well with John's wife's prayer. Though this was a story of the supernatural, I do believe it could truly happen. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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You did a great job of tying your angel story together so well with John's wife's prayer. Though this was a story of the supernatural, I do believe it could truly happen. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you Verna. I too believe it could really happen. God often works in ways we cannot comprehend. I appreciate your review.
Wendy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This short story is well-written, but I was not totally convinced by the events described. I felt that the key element was forced, and that the prayers of the characters' loved ones were merely supporting material to force the unlikely conclusion.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This short story is well-written, but I was not totally convinced by the events described. I felt that the key element was forced, and that the prayers of the characters' loved ones were merely supporting material to force the unlikely conclusion.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reviewing Kate. I appreciate your thoughts.
Wendy
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Okay, tell me who is Kate? The story opens with her and then Erica seemingly is his wife. Interesting take as well having more than one see the light.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Okay, tell me who is Kate? The story opens with her and then Erica seemingly is his wife. Interesting take as well having more than one see the light.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Kate is Tom's wife, as mentioned in the first line. The asterisks indicate a change of scene to another family - Erica and Jasmine.
Thank you for reviewing. Appreciated.
Wendy
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I see that now in para 4... in another home. Now I need to find where Tom came in?
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There is no-one called Tom in my story.
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Well, I should have been! IDK where I found my namesake.
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Bump me up to five stars and I will put you in my next story!
Lol. (If I remember!)
Tom is a good name.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice story. And well written.
A lot of parents will identify.
I have similar story (true) myself.
Most likely a lot of people do.
Keep up the good work.
God bless you.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Very nice story. And well written.
A lot of parents will identify.
I have similar story (true) myself.
Most likely a lot of people do.
Keep up the good work.
God bless you.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much Wayne, for your thoughtful review, and blessings to you and your loved ones too.
Wendy
