Checkout Cheryl and Charlie
They've been together since their first date. (398 words)19 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I love the play on words, it made a sweet romantic story even sweeter.
This was filled with humor from the bad dates to Cheryl and Charlie finally dating.
A romantic story can go overboard with lovey/dovey stuff. This was just perfect.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I love the play on words, it made a sweet romantic story even sweeter.
This was filled with humor from the bad dates to Cheryl and Charlie finally dating.
A romantic story can go overboard with lovey/dovey stuff. This was just perfect.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I agree that too much lovey-dovey mush can be off-putting. That's why I generally don't read romance stories - or write them.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What an engaging short story, Lisa. I love the in's and out's of failed dates,but the best was the play on words after the shelves fell and they were cleaning up the mess. Well done Dear. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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What an engaging short story, Lisa. I love the in's and out's of failed dates,but the best was the play on words after the shelves fell and they were cleaning up the mess. Well done Dear. Nancy:)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your appreciative review, which I in return appreciate greatly.
Comment from Wanderlust53
That's a great story. Your sense of humor shows through in whimsical fun yet shy Charlie. I don't usually review stories as I don't feel qualified to do so. This was a fun read and a happy ending.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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That's a great story. Your sense of humor shows through in whimsical fun yet shy Charlie. I don't usually review stories as I don't feel qualified to do so. This was a fun read and a happy ending.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed the humour in my story. Some people hate puns, but I like wordplay so i use them often. It has become a bit of a signature mark in my work.
For reviewing, I think the only qualification you need is to think about what you've written and give an honest opinion of how it affected you - or not - without hurting a sensitive writer's feelings. But they shouldn't put work up for comment if they can't handle another's opinion.
Comment from Begin Again
Bravo! Lisa Laughter is always the key to a wonderful relationship in the beginning, middle and end. Wonderful story!
Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Bravo! Lisa Laughter is always the key to a wonderful relationship in the beginning, middle and end. Wonderful story!
Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I agree. If you can laugh at life's slings and arrows together you can weather any storm, I feel.
Many thanks for your review.
Comment from Wendy G
Very romantic!! An unorthodox beginning to a relationship- but why not? Lol. Well written and fun to read. Best wishes for your entry in the contest!
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Very romantic!! An unorthodox beginning to a relationship- but why not? Lol. Well written and fun to read. Best wishes for your entry in the contest!
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thanks Wendy... and hearty congrats on your supernatural win!
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a romance writing prompt entry.
Cheryl and Charlie such a perfect couple comes complete with the rose and vase!
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I like the way you told each previous story with each previous suiter and how it turned out to be a nightmare.
This gave presents to your short story.
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Rich in Theme and Imagery it also, read well and flowed well.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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This is a romance writing prompt entry.
Cheryl and Charlie such a perfect couple comes complete with the rose and vase!
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I like the way you told each previous story with each previous suiter and how it turned out to be a nightmare.
This gave presents to your short story.
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Rich in Theme and Imagery it also, read well and flowed well.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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You made my day with this wonderful review! Thank you so much.
Comment from Debra White
Aw, I really enjoyed this short and sweet story, LisaMay :)
It looks like Cheryl is going to get her happily ever after with Charlie.
Your story is well written with likeable characters, nice use of dialogue and a gentle humour. Very nice...
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Aw, I really enjoyed this short and sweet story, LisaMay :)
It looks like Cheryl is going to get her happily ever after with Charlie.
Your story is well written with likeable characters, nice use of dialogue and a gentle humour. Very nice...
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Short and sweet and maybe a bit predictable. Thanks for your review.
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Sometimes, that's what a reader wants/needs! I certainly enjoyed it :)
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It's a gentle antidote to a stressful day.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Yes, this was very romantic although predictable as I anticipated what was going to happen before it happened. The grocery clerk offers a 'date' while Charlie says I have 'bean' looking for a girl like you is funny yet the part about them rolling on the floor as they step upon a loose can is a little unbelievable and so that makes the whole tale somewhat far fetched though humorous in its own way. I hope my honesty doesn't offend you in any way. But overall this is a pleasant ride through a romantic story of two people who fall in love at first sight.
Thanks for sharing, you always do a good job telling a story.
Jesse
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Yes, this was very romantic although predictable as I anticipated what was going to happen before it happened. The grocery clerk offers a 'date' while Charlie says I have 'bean' looking for a girl like you is funny yet the part about them rolling on the floor as they step upon a loose can is a little unbelievable and so that makes the whole tale somewhat far fetched though humorous in its own way. I hope my honesty doesn't offend you in any way. But overall this is a pleasant ride through a romantic story of two people who fall in love at first sight.
Thanks for sharing, you always do a good job telling a story.
Jesse
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I'm not offended at all. This is derived from something I saw. I actually saw someone trip over a can in a supermarket and pull a girl down with him as he tried to stop falling.
In my story, maybe the young couple 'fell' in love... not at first sight, as it had been building up over a few weeks when they kept seeing each other at the store..
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Wow, fact is sometimes stranger than fiction! Thank you for your clarification. It makes more sense now that I know the details.
Jesse
Comment from lyenochka
Aww!! That's so sweet! I like how you build to this couple getting together by first showing us what didn't work with the previous candidates and why Charlie got everything right. I hope you do well in the contest!
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Aww!! That's so sweet! I like how you build to this couple getting together by first showing us what didn't work with the previous candidates and why Charlie got everything right. I hope you do well in the contest!
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you!
