The Life Of A Rumor
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Comment from Anne Johnston
"A rumor starts, and true or not,
the cycle it goes through
can lead to violence, sadness, fear,
it's just what rumors do."
What true words you have written, a warning for us all to make sure we know the whole story, before we repeat it.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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"A rumor starts, and true or not,
the cycle it goes through
can lead to violence, sadness, fear,
it's just what rumors do."
What true words you have written, a warning for us all to make sure we know the whole story, before we repeat it.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this nice review and your insightful comments. Both are very appreciated. :)
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You are very welcome
Comment from jaded831
Very well written. I never listen to people about others or hearsay. Better to take advice from people who can teach you to make for a better life, form your own opinions about people.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Very well written. I never listen to people about others or hearsay. Better to take advice from people who can teach you to make for a better life, form your own opinions about people.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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You are very wise! Thank you for this nice review. :)
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Dear B.N.
I am genuinely sorry I do not have any 6's for your poem to which everyone can relate.
Some think idle gossip is benign, but it is like cancer running unchecked.
Your words of wisdom are right on the mark, and they should be engraved on the door of every workplace.
Stellar poem.
Good luck with all your writing!
Cindy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Dear B.N.
I am genuinely sorry I do not have any 6's for your poem to which everyone can relate.
Some think idle gossip is benign, but it is like cancer running unchecked.
Your words of wisdom are right on the mark, and they should be engraved on the door of every workplace.
Stellar poem.
Good luck with all your writing!
Cindy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much for this wonderful review and your kind words. :)
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You?re welcome.
Comment from MJK
Love this piece. Lots of rhymes with precise and perfect word choice like "infection" and "direction." Love the personication in " dies for lack of sharing." Your closing line is pow!
Using the present tense makes it seem alive and spreading. (You used past tense in stanza 4 only, so consider switching to present there.)
You write that a rumor's movement never stops, but then later you write that it fades away. Maybe just a little rewording could fix that contradiction.
These are just some little adjustments that could make a good piece even stronger.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Love this piece. Lots of rhymes with precise and perfect word choice like "infection" and "direction." Love the personication in " dies for lack of sharing." Your closing line is pow!
Using the present tense makes it seem alive and spreading. (You used past tense in stanza 4 only, so consider switching to present there.)
You write that a rumor's movement never stops, but then later you write that it fades away. Maybe just a little rewording could fix that contradiction.
These are just some little adjustments that could make a good piece even stronger.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thanks for this great review and good advice. I made some changes that I think improved it. Thanks to you of course. :)
Comment from lancellot
Well, this is the second entry I've read so far and I'm just gonna stop now. This is very well written and is a perfect topic. One that I doubt anyone else had thought of. So much truth in this, especially with social media.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Well, this is the second entry I've read so far and I'm just gonna stop now. This is very well written and is a perfect topic. One that I doubt anyone else had thought of. So much truth in this, especially with social media.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this exceptional review... It means a great deal to me. Thanks for reading my poem. :)
Comment from LisaMay
I wish the life of a rumour ended as soon as the first person heard it, so it wouldn't spread so infectiously and insidiously. You have written very well about this unfortunate and destructive aspect of human nature.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I wish the life of a rumour ended as soon as the first person heard it, so it wouldn't spread so infectiously and insidiously. You have written very well about this unfortunate and destructive aspect of human nature.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Rumors used to run rampant at the hospital where I worked years ago. I never participated because I knew it would eventually come out about who said what. Thanks for reading my poem and for this insightful review. :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I have no idea what is in the water this morning but I have read dozens of pieces that are amazingly written. Yours included.
I would have a few lines differently though. For example, the line that extends way beyond the other lines in para 4. Living on for days, weeks, months, or years, could work well with "however long" instead of days, wks, mos, and yrs. Maybe?:
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I have no idea what is in the water this morning but I have read dozens of pieces that are amazingly written. Yours included.
I would have a few lines differently though. For example, the line that extends way beyond the other lines in para 4. Living on for days, weeks, months, or years, could work well with "however long" instead of days, wks, mos, and yrs. Maybe?:
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Yes! You are right and I've changed it. Thank you for helping me improve my poem and for this nice review. :)
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great. keep posting.
Comment from pome lover
Great pick of subject for this contest!
And you go through all the results, the destruction of lives, the unnecessary worry and angst - the pure insidiousness of rumors.
I have a question. In the first line of the second verse, the second word, do you mean life? given life? I assume you do.
Anyway, a good subject for the contest. Best of luck.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Great pick of subject for this contest!
And you go through all the results, the destruction of lives, the unnecessary worry and angst - the pure insidiousness of rumors.
I have a question. In the first line of the second verse, the second word, do you mean life? given life? I assume you do.
Anyway, a good subject for the contest. Best of luck.
Katharine
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this nice review and the correction...both are greatly appreciated. :)
