Away With You
Free Form Verse: Caged by fear no more...19 total reviews
Comment from Annmuma
Great piece with nice imagery. One small spag issue: " My life, and
the lives of those
I love and cherish
is worth more" I think that last line should read: "are work more"
Good luck in the contest.
ann
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Great piece with nice imagery. One small spag issue: " My life, and
the lives of those
I love and cherish
is worth more" I think that last line should read: "are work more"
Good luck in the contest.
ann
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Hello Ann!
Thank you!
And you are correct about the subject/verb agreement = gremlins! :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I don't have the 6 that this poem so richly deserves! By dramatically and emotionally personifying your paralyzing enemy, you have conveyed a powerful message about breaking FEAR'S hold and reclaiming your joy.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I don't have the 6 that this poem so richly deserves! By dramatically and emotionally personifying your paralyzing enemy, you have conveyed a powerful message about breaking FEAR'S hold and reclaiming your joy.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Much appreciation, Janice!
Thank you!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
If the birds of the air were caged and they were set free, how would they feel? Would you be glad that their gone or perhaps want them to return to sing their song? I know you are speaking about your own feelings, but I am using the birds for an example.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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If the birds of the air were caged and they were set free, how would they feel? Would you be glad that their gone or perhaps want them to return to sing their song? I know you are speaking about your own feelings, but I am using the birds for an example.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Hi Rosemary,
I used the caged bird artwork to symbolize no longer feeling caged in by fear...
Thank you!
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If there is faith, there is no fear!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive, thought provoking, interesting,
heartfelt and creative. I pondered on these words. I really liked the
last stanza which shows courage and kindness to self. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork symbolizes freedom to me! Great Poem!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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The author's words are descriptive, thought provoking, interesting,
heartfelt and creative. I pondered on these words. I really liked the
last stanza which shows courage and kindness to self. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork symbolizes freedom to me! Great Poem!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Harmony!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Whatever it was, I wish you would have ended telling it. Evil thoughts? Let me know. Did I miss something?..................................................................................
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Whatever it was, I wish you would have ended telling it. Evil thoughts? Let me know. Did I miss something?..................................................................................
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Hello,
Yes... you missed it.
I tell the reader exactly what "it" is...
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Fear? and I thought it was a dalliance.
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Fear...
Comment from zanya
Yes fear can be such a powerful foe for us humans, often present in our lives without our fully realising - it can cripple our actions and activities - this poem delineates it well
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Yes fear can be such a powerful foe for us humans, often present in our lives without our fully realising - it can cripple our actions and activities - this poem delineates it well
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you, zanya!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem for the contest,
quite different from the other entries
in that it deal with fear until the last line .
The poem flows down the page quickly
turns at the mention of "fear."
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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This is an excellent poem for the contest,
quite different from the other entries
in that it deal with fear until the last line .
The poem flows down the page quickly
turns at the mention of "fear."
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Much appreciated, Robert!
Thank you!
Comment from jessizero
This was great. You built up the story well. I like that you denounce fear and you finished the poem wonderfully. Good luck in the contest. I am sure you will do well.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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This was great. You built up the story well. I like that you denounce fear and you finished the poem wonderfully. Good luck in the contest. I am sure you will do well.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you, jessizero!
Comment from prettybluebirds
I can relate to this writing as fear once had a grip on my mind. Why? I don't know. There was really nothing to fear but fear itself. Fear is paralyzing and can numb one's mind if not controlled. I love this poem. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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I can relate to this writing as fear once had a grip on my mind. Why? I don't know. There was really nothing to fear but fear itself. Fear is paralyzing and can numb one's mind if not controlled. I love this poem. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you, prettybluebirds!
Incredibly cathartic to pen!
Thank you!
