Fantasy Lost
Two Stanza Poem contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from Rena Smith
This is a good poem. I like it because the words flow and it's interesting. I love fantasy and this poem is fantasy in a nutshell. The poet met the contest guidelines. I like the choice of rhyming words used. The poet did a good job and I love this poem because it's a steal in fantasy.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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This is a good poem. I like it because the words flow and it's interesting. I love fantasy and this poem is fantasy in a nutshell. The poet met the contest guidelines. I like the choice of rhyming words used. The poet did a good job and I love this poem because it's a steal in fantasy.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Rena. Yes, we don't have enough fantasy writes circulating on the site. I dearly appreciate the generous rating and kind review, Rena. Thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from SimianSavant
Very nice work that breaks the stereotypes of your typical mold. Your sonnet form writing is really really solid, some of the best on this site, and perfectly executed. I see what you did with your last line there. Brilliantly subtle. I don't know if this contest is in booth yet but you stand very good chances of placing well.
Ok I suppose this review wouldn't be complete without looking for something to improve. If you were to upgrade one line, maybe I would look at: *So sadly few appreciate these roles*
*Appreciate* sounds slightly more modern and less formal than some of the other words, and part of it is just that it stands out with the most syllables (4), where you have one other word with 3, and all the rest are 2 or 1.
Maybe something like:
So sadly few will ever {play/seek} these roles
Idk, food for thought! Nice work.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Very nice work that breaks the stereotypes of your typical mold. Your sonnet form writing is really really solid, some of the best on this site, and perfectly executed. I see what you did with your last line there. Brilliantly subtle. I don't know if this contest is in booth yet but you stand very good chances of placing well.
Ok I suppose this review wouldn't be complete without looking for something to improve. If you were to upgrade one line, maybe I would look at: *So sadly few appreciate these roles*
*Appreciate* sounds slightly more modern and less formal than some of the other words, and part of it is just that it stands out with the most syllables (4), where you have one other word with 3, and all the rest are 2 or 1.
Maybe something like:
So sadly few will ever {play/seek} these roles
Idk, food for thought! Nice work.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the great review and big sixer, friend. Yeah, the sonnet iambic meter's pretty well what I love the most in writing. Once I figured out the little secrets of how it worked I was hooked. Lol.
Just to let you know, I think 'AGAIN' you got robbed. You took the lead of the true contest with 4 votes while everyone had 1 but yet two of them still came up from nothing to get ahead of you. That's flat out BS. Lynda and I were behind you and your piece was far superior that the crap that won. Yeah, fishy shit happens on here but what can I say, get use to it. Lol
Again, thanks for the big six, D. It actually finally made it to booth. Some of these people are dumber than silverware. Have a great weekend, friend.
Comment from jessizero
This was lovely, and it's impressive that you were able to express so much in only two stanzas. Thank you so much for sharing this with the community. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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This was lovely, and it's impressive that you were able to express so much in only two stanzas. Thank you so much for sharing this with the community. Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Jess. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from kahpot
Very well done, your last line tugs at the heart, Fantasy should never die, dreams and hope are made of this within our little ones, an excellent read and poem, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Very well done, your last line tugs at the heart, Fantasy should never die, dreams and hope are made of this within our little ones, an excellent read and poem, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Kahpot. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
