Happy Hostage Day
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Comment from Carolyn Dooley
The picture is great. It looks like someone has had it with the bull. The guys got to take a break with plenty of food and drinks. And by the time they smoked some weed, none of them cared about anything. And the boss got what he deserved in the end. Thank you for the humour.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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The picture is great. It looks like someone has had it with the bull. The guys got to take a break with plenty of food and drinks. And by the time they smoked some weed, none of them cared about anything. And the boss got what he deserved in the end. Thank you for the humour.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Thank you for this nice review and for taking the time to read my poem. :)
Comment from Susan Newell
Anonymous,
What a deliciously vengeful story told in a poem. I suspect I recognize the style. I have a feeling Nameless was known to the other employees, because he'd be the only one missing. I've added a couple of picky notes. Great poem/story.
Sue
my hands on the button!" ==> hand's
"Pick someone else", John Preston said,
"Cause I'm keeping my ass planted here." ==> else, " and "'Cause
employees they all quit in mass -- believe en masse, italicized to indicate foreign language
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Anonymous,
What a deliciously vengeful story told in a poem. I suspect I recognize the style. I have a feeling Nameless was known to the other employees, because he'd be the only one missing. I've added a couple of picky notes. Great poem/story.
Sue
my hands on the button!" ==> hand's
"Pick someone else", John Preston said,
"Cause I'm keeping my ass planted here." ==> else, " and "'Cause
employees they all quit in mass -- believe en masse, italicized to indicate foreign language
You might want to edit to delete the blank lines that are extending the text box.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Thank you for this great review and for your corrections, I'll fix them right away. Thanks again for reading my overly long poem. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, that was quite a tale. I suppose it is funny depending on which side of the preverbal ideological aisle you are on, and how much you can suspend disbelief for humor.
I think you did a good job, and certainly put a lot of work in. This will probably win, knowing the demographics of FS.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Hmm, that was quite a tale. I suppose it is funny depending on which side of the preverbal ideological aisle you are on, and how much you can suspend disbelief for humor.
I think you did a good job, and certainly put a lot of work in. This will probably win, knowing the demographics of FS.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Thanks for this great review. It is suppose to be funny, without any hidden message or ideological viewpoint. I'm not sure what you mean by the demographics of FanStory, but I hope it brings a smile to whoever reads it. Thanks again for reading my poem. :)
