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Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Stark Truth"Adventures around & upon a hill
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Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading this chapter. It left me wanting to know what comes next. Your writing pulled me in right from the start. Your descriptive language is wildly descriptive.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed reading this chapter. It left me wanting to know what comes next. Your writing pulled me in right from the start. Your descriptive language is wildly descriptive.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2022
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Thank you for such a thrilling review. You are welcome to go to my portfolio to get caught up. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it.
What has happened thus far is Madeline, now known as Bro. Samuel, was touring Glastonbury with a harp therapist friend, Cordelia. They'd been having creepy feeling about the area, with just the mention of the place. Cordelia is inner dowser, who just knows. She said she knew they'd been there before.
At that point Madeline steps through a vortex into the 15th Century. This is all I'll tell you in case you want to 'fan' me to be able to read the rest.
When you go to my portfolio, no written reviews are necessary, just enjoy.
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Thanks for the ? coach - up.? Will fan you to read the rest.
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***Warm smile***
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is interesting if a bit confusing. It is probably because I haven't read any of the previous chapters of this story. It does sound a bit painful for a monk to lay on hard stone for hours at a time. Nicely written
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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This is interesting if a bit confusing. It is probably because I haven't read any of the previous chapters of this story. It does sound a bit painful for a monk to lay on hard stone for hours at a time. Nicely written
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I know how difficult it is to come into a book when it is already in progress.
The previous chapters are about my actual trip and 'energy' spot experiences through England. But when we got to Glastonbury, two of us had past life triggers. So in writing this story, basically factual, I deviated by inventing the direction of the story to be that I stepped through a vortex & went back into the 15th century...a horrid era. If you want to catch up on the past life part, it is in the 2nd part of
Ch. 19 on
Comment from lancellot
Her or his power is quite interesting. The chapter is very well written and the reader feels like they are right there watching and struggling in the darkness. We can almost feel Madeline's confusion. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Her or his power is quite interesting. The chapter is very well written and the reader feels like they are right there watching and struggling in the darkness. We can almost feel Madeline's confusion. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from pa Banardi
I thought your wringing was really good and thought out.
Your events were very interesting.and told a good story good luck in your writing and in the contests
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I thought your wringing was really good and thought out.
Your events were very interesting.and told a good story good luck in your writing and in the contests
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your review. I am glad youenjoyed it.
Comment from jessizero
This was most interesting. It captured and kept my attention throughout this installment. Thank you for choosing to share this here. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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This was most interesting. It captured and kept my attention throughout this installment. Thank you for choosing to share this here. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you enjoyed it
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a bit of a humorous chapter, Liz. I'm wondering if I missed reading a chapter though, because I'm not sure how Madeline got to this place. I have, on occasion, accidentally deleted something in error. lol I'll have to go back to check. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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This is a bit of a humorous chapter, Liz. I'm wondering if I missed reading a chapter though, because I'm not sure how Madeline got to this place. I have, on occasion, accidentally deleted something in error. lol I'll have to go back to check. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your loyal review & following. If you check back to Ch 19 you'll see how she stepped down into darkness. There's no need for a written review if you just want to quickly catch up
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You're welcome, Liz. I'll take a look at it tomorrow. Time to call it quits tonight. Can't seem to keep up with reviews anymore after being the "shingles" week.
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I find I have to catch up after I've spent an entire day working on my current book. Phew, a lot of work,studying the 15th century. Iguess when I was living back then I didn't know I was missing silverware or internet...bwaaa
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Lol
Comment from aryr
This was indeed an amazing continuation chapter, Liz. Poor Madeline has traveled back in time or hit a time warp. I can only imagine what the rest of her group think. It is interesting that she was somewhat introduced to Prior Abbot Richard. Only time will tell why she was here. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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This was indeed an amazing continuation chapter, Liz. Poor Madeline has traveled back in time or hit a time warp. I can only imagine what the rest of her group think. It is interesting that she was somewhat introduced to Prior Abbot Richard. Only time will tell why she was here. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
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This was great, Liz, you are so welcome.
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***warm smile***
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How on earth are you going to get out of that situation? And you've changed sex as well! You really are in a pickle now. You can't go looking for your friends because you are being punished for being late, hmm!! I can't wait to read on and see what happens next. Another fine chapter, Liz. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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How on earth are you going to get out of that situation? And you've changed sex as well! You really are in a pickle now. You can't go looking for your friends because you are being punished for being late, hmm!! I can't wait to read on and see what happens next. Another fine chapter, Liz. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
This piece starts well with a quandary which is just coming to a head as the scene ends. The pace is good. The dialogue is believable. The images are sharp.
Suggestions:
I would like some smells and perhaps the feel of the cloth. Also a comment on the humidity of the place.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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This piece starts well with a quandary which is just coming to a head as the scene ends. The pace is good. The dialogue is believable. The images are sharp.
Suggestions:
I would like some smells and perhaps the feel of the cloth. Also a comment on the humidity of the place.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the sensory imagery suggestions. I'll consider those alerts.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! What happened to Madeline? How will she get out of that time tunnel she fell into? Did the others notice her missing? I guess this is necessary for them to uncover the mystery about that place and their connection to each other.
I really liked how you captured movement and feeling here:
"did the 'Tim Conway shuffle' 'til I could feel a broadening of breathing space."
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Oh no! What happened to Madeline? How will she get out of that time tunnel she fell into? Did the others notice her missing? I guess this is necessary for them to uncover the mystery about that place and their connection to each other.
I really liked how you captured movement and feeling here:
"did the 'Tim Conway shuffle' 'til I could feel a broadening of breathing space."
Comment Written 17-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your expressive involved review. This must have been a horrible time for us in that century. It slowly comes out more.
