That name!
Don't you dare call me ...29 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
Good for you, Wendy! As you say, a girl's gotta do what a girl's gotta do. Perhaps that was your first step toward learning to stand up for yourself. Maybe your brother did you a favour. Well written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Good for you, Wendy! As you say, a girl's gotta do what a girl's gotta do. Perhaps that was your first step toward learning to stand up for yourself. Maybe your brother did you a favour. Well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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You may be right! Anyway my one and only punch fixed the problem. Thanks so much for your review and good wishes. All are appreciated.
Wendy
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You?re most welcome, Wendy
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
I really enjoyed this story. I gave it 5 stars in spite of some inconsistencies in the beginning because your really came into your own with the dialogue between you and your brother on the way to school. Good work on the story overall.
Regarding the problems at the beginning;
1. In the third paragraph, I feel that it would help to center the reader by using the names again, "(We sisters)We felt that he (Graham) was privileged, as he always had his own bedroom. "
2. "The girls" does not function well in first person with "our rooms" ..... perhaps "My sisters and I" would work better as it clearly remains first person.
Thanks for a great story.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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I really enjoyed this story. I gave it 5 stars in spite of some inconsistencies in the beginning because your really came into your own with the dialogue between you and your brother on the way to school. Good work on the story overall.
Regarding the problems at the beginning;
1. In the third paragraph, I feel that it would help to center the reader by using the names again, "(We sisters)We felt that he (Graham) was privileged, as he always had his own bedroom. "
2. "The girls" does not function well in first person with "our rooms" ..... perhaps "My sisters and I" would work better as it clearly remains first person.
Thanks for a great story.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Thank you for review and suggestions. Always appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great story, Wendy. You certainly jumped out of your comfort zone when you came through with your threat. I am sure you two made up quickly and I am glad that it cured him of calling you that name. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Great story, Wendy. You certainly jumped out of your comfort zone when you came through with your threat. I am sure you two made up quickly and I am glad that it cured him of calling you that name. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Thank you Anne. Great review. I always appreciate your words.
Wendy
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You are welcome, Wendy.
Comment from juliaSjames
Well written, Wendy. Excellent combination of narrative and dialogue in your appealing story of family life. Teasing gets old really fast. You stood up for yourself although you knew of course your brother couldn't slug you back. That's why he cried, with mortification. My grandson has two younger sisters and he often has to take out his frustrations on a punching bag his dad wisely bought him. I was amused when I lived in South America because people would call each other quite happily what's considered rude " Flaquita" (Skinny); "Gordita" (Fatty) and the list goes on ...
Good luck in the contest
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Well written, Wendy. Excellent combination of narrative and dialogue in your appealing story of family life. Teasing gets old really fast. You stood up for yourself although you knew of course your brother couldn't slug you back. That's why he cried, with mortification. My grandson has two younger sisters and he often has to take out his frustrations on a punching bag his dad wisely bought him. I was amused when I lived in South America because people would call each other quite happily what's considered rude " Flaquita" (Skinny); "Gordita" (Fatty) and the list goes on ...
Good luck in the contest
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks Julia! What a great review. Much appreciated - it made me smile. All around the world kids are the same.
Wendy
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:-))
Comment from Annmuma
You made me laugh! Thanks! Your imagery was so perfect that I could see you -as Skendy- punching your older brother Did you get treated with greater respect after that? Good job and good luck in the contest.
ann
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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You made me laugh! Thanks! Your imagery was so perfect that I could see you -as Skendy- punching your older brother Did you get treated with greater respect after that? Good job and good luck in the contest.
ann
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Yes! I did earn respect. The one and only time I have ever punched anyone! Lol. Thanks so much for your great review, and good wishes. All greatly appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a great story, but I must admit the nickname IS funny. I would have hated it also. Kids are cruel as they make fun of one another. I love the realistic dialogue between you and your brother before you actually punched him. I was surprised he cried. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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This is a great story, but I must admit the nickname IS funny. I would have hated it also. Kids are cruel as they make fun of one another. I love the realistic dialogue between you and your brother before you actually punched him. I was surprised he cried. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much. You are right - the nickname could have been much worse!! Lol. I might have been thin, but I must have been quite strong, and really hurt him. Lol. Thanks so much for reviewing- greatly appreciated, as always, as well as your good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
That's funny. I was a biter. I think most of the baby of the families bite. Siblings can be mean but they can also surprise us, just like you did to your brother. We all have to know when to stand up for ourselves.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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That's funny. I was a biter. I think most of the baby of the families bite. Siblings can be mean but they can also surprise us, just like you did to your brother. We all have to know when to stand up for ourselves.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much. Lovely review.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
Of course a boy would virtually be disgraced if he'd ever mention that a younger girl "beat him up" he would never have lived it down with the other boys, and would be fuel fo the fire of teasing. Well done you, name calling is a form of bullying anyway, beautifully written. Wendy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Of course a boy would virtually be disgraced if he'd ever mention that a younger girl "beat him up" he would never have lived it down with the other boys, and would be fuel fo the fire of teasing. Well done you, name calling is a form of bullying anyway, beautifully written. Wendy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much Roy. I appreciate your review. And you are right!
Wendy
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Most welcome
Comment from Paul McFarland
Well told. Probably one of your first uncomfortable situations. I think you handled it quite nicely. I'll bet you get along great now. You should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Well told. Probably one of your first uncomfortable situations. I think you handled it quite nicely. I'll bet you get along great now. You should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much for your great review. Much appreciated Paul, as always.
Wendy
Comment from jessizero
This was a fun and touching story. I can't believe you got away with punching your brother! Thanks for choosing to share this story here. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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This was a fun and touching story. I can't believe you got away with punching your brother! Thanks for choosing to share this story here. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you. Great review. Yes, it was so unlike me!
Wendy
