That name!
Don't you dare call me ...29 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, okay. This is a well written slice of life. You did a good job building a complete picture. You gave backstory on yourself and the immediate family. Set up the conclusion well, personality information.
Well crafted.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Hmm, okay. This is a well written slice of life. You did a good job building a complete picture. You gave backstory on yourself and the immediate family. Set up the conclusion well, personality information.
Well crafted.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtful review! Hope I didn?t give away too much information about my personality!!
Wendy
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No, you made the story complete.
Comment from robyn corum
Wendy,
Wow. Remind me to never mess with you in a dark alley. Or a lit one, for that matter. heehee
Good for you. I mean, I feel a wee bit sorry for him, too. But I'm getting over it.
This was well-written - and makes a great entry for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Wendy,
Wow. Remind me to never mess with you in a dark alley. Or a lit one, for that matter. heehee
Good for you. I mean, I feel a wee bit sorry for him, too. But I'm getting over it.
This was well-written - and makes a great entry for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks Robyn! First and only punch from me! You?re safe. Lol. Thanks for your great review and good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
There were only two of us, myself, being older, and my brother. I raised four boys. I completely understand the teasing of boys. My boys still tease me to this day. LOL Matter-of-fact, at my mom's 90th birthday party my boys teased their grandma. LOL My third son's wife has made a family rule, no teasing until after breakfast. I enjoyed reading your writing prompt. Thank you for sharing.
We felt that he was privileged, as he always had his own bedroom. (you can omit the 'that', it's extra and not needed)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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There were only two of us, myself, being older, and my brother. I raised four boys. I completely understand the teasing of boys. My boys still tease me to this day. LOL Matter-of-fact, at my mom's 90th birthday party my boys teased their grandma. LOL My third son's wife has made a family rule, no teasing until after breakfast. I enjoyed reading your writing prompt. Thank you for sharing.
We felt that he was privileged, as he always had his own bedroom. (you can omit the 'that', it's extra and not needed)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Lol. Boys! You?ve had your fair share of teasing then. My son is a tease. Instead of calling us Dad and Mum, he always says Mad and Dumb. Lol. Thanks so much for your lovely comments.
Wendy
Comment from Sally Law
I definitely knows what this feels like. I was bullied in school because of my thin figure. I am glad you stood up. It took me awhile. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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I definitely knows what this feels like. I was bullied in school because of my thin figure. I am glad you stood up. It took me awhile. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much Sal. I appreciate your thoughtful review and encouragement, and good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Interesting how many fabrics of our lives cross. I was the sole brother to FIVE sisters. It was hell. I could have been out of town and if something went awry was blamed for it. Sisters. Bah, humbug. of course, they grew out of it.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Interesting how many fabrics of our lives cross. I was the sole brother to FIVE sisters. It was hell. I could have been out of town and if something went awry was blamed for it. Sisters. Bah, humbug. of course, they grew out of it.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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You understand perfectly his situation! Hope you all get along well now!!
I appreciate your review.
Wendy
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Wendy G, a fantastic Friday to you. I hope this finds you well. I liked your True Story writing prompt entry. While I don't condone punching people in the face, I'm willing to let that one slide and chalk it up to sibling rivalry, lol. In the end I guess he learned his lesson. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Hello Wendy G, a fantastic Friday to you. I hope this finds you well. I liked your True Story writing prompt entry. While I don't condone punching people in the face, I'm willing to let that one slide and chalk it up to sibling rivalry, lol. In the end I guess he learned his lesson. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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I would have been in big trouble if he had told. It was very out of character for me. Lol. Thanks so much for reviewing. Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Wow! What a little toughy! Good job.
And nice writing.
I particularly like the expressive use of nouns (sometimes used as verbs) in place of 'said' - "I stormed."
I wish FanStory more easily allowed for the use of italics. Writers are sometimes forced to misuse single and double quotes simply for emphasis.
Good work.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Wow! What a little toughy! Good job.
And nice writing.
I particularly like the expressive use of nouns (sometimes used as verbs) in place of 'said' - "I stormed."
I wish FanStory more easily allowed for the use of italics. Writers are sometimes forced to misuse single and double quotes simply for emphasis.
Good work.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for your input and thoughtful comments. All are appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Wendy,
I feel for Graham... but he still deserved that. lol
"Or ...? he taunted, smirking.- need closing speech marks here.
However, he never called me "that name" again! - I would italicise or put this in bold rather than in marks for emphasis. It's a practice that has gone out of fashion and isn't really necessary. If you do want to use marks though, use the single ones to difffentiate it from dialogue.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Hi Wendy,
I feel for Graham... but he still deserved that. lol
"Or ...? he taunted, smirking.- need closing speech marks here.
However, he never called me "that name" again! - I would italicise or put this in bold rather than in marks for emphasis. It's a practice that has gone out of fashion and isn't really necessary. If you do want to use marks though, use the single ones to difffentiate it from dialogue.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtful review. And yes, I should have thought of that. I will adjust it. Good point. I appreciate your input.
Wendy
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Sometimes people push you to the limit. Time after time, telling someone to stop bothering you, or in your case, to stop calling you the nick name.
Someone else would not have waited as long as a sibling. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Sometimes people push you to the limit. Time after time, telling someone to stop bothering you, or in your case, to stop calling you the nick name.
Someone else would not have waited as long as a sibling. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you Carolyn. You are right. I appreciate your review, as always.
Wendy
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You are welcome.
