Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 80 "Chapter 51"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Jay Squires
I admit you had me going when you started out the chapter with Jordan discovering a sleeping coach on his mom's bed. All was well explained, of course, and it made for a heckuva first paragraph!
The proposal and acceptance were very romantic and touching. Her intermittent vomiting was certainly testimony to the depth of his proposal. Not really, but it wasn't candles and fine wine. It was gritty, and for all that it was truly romantic.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I admit you had me going when you started out the chapter with Jordan discovering a sleeping coach on his mom's bed. All was well explained, of course, and it made for a heckuva first paragraph!
The proposal and acceptance were very romantic and touching. Her intermittent vomiting was certainly testimony to the depth of his proposal. Not really, but it wasn't candles and fine wine. It was gritty, and for all that it was truly romantic.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading this chapter. I appreciate the recap prior to reading the next chapter. I read a lot of chapters on this site and it helps job my memory.
Your dialogue is well written, however if every time someone speaks they would have their own line, it may be easier to read. That's just my opinion and preference.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed reading this chapter. I appreciate the recap prior to reading the next chapter. I read a lot of chapters on this site and it helps job my memory.
Your dialogue is well written, however if every time someone speaks they would have their own line, it may be easier to read. That's just my opinion and preference.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
A perfect ending. I loved it. You did a wonderful job with this story. I was right there for every up and or down. I can totally relate to this lovely romance tale. being a hopeless romantic myself, this story was well within my wheelhouse. Thank you for writing such a delightful story with characters that were easy to care about and love. I am actually going to miss them and their antics.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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A perfect ending. I loved it. You did a wonderful job with this story. I was right there for every up and or down. I can totally relate to this lovely romance tale. being a hopeless romantic myself, this story was well within my wheelhouse. Thank you for writing such a delightful story with characters that were easy to care about and love. I am actually going to miss them and their antics.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
What a lovely ending, Barbara! Gabriel is a rare man, able to put his deep love for Katherine ahead of any other needs he could have, and he's cares so much for her boys. Excellent work. I think I'll miss these two.
One little typo: After the way I spoke to you (to) yesterday,
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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What a lovely ending, Barbara! Gabriel is a rare man, able to put his deep love for Katherine ahead of any other needs he could have, and he's cares so much for her boys. Excellent work. I think I'll miss these two.
One little typo: After the way I spoke to you (to) yesterday,
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I have made the correction. Thank you for the catch. I usually leave little words out, now I'm adding them. LOL Thank you;
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from eliz100
This is a great ending. Kind of set up for a sequel. Do you write sequels. A wedding in a day, not easy. I have enjoyed reading you book. I am getting hooked on the next one.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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This is a great ending. Kind of set up for a sequel. Do you write sequels. A wedding in a day, not easy. I have enjoyed reading you book. I am getting hooked on the next one.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I have never written a sequel. I'll ponder it.
Comment from BethShelby
I was thrilled Katherine has said yes and there is a wedding about to take place, but can't you go down the road however far it would take and get them past all the aftermaths of cancer and let everyone be well and happy? You don't see many books end with someone puking every few minutes and the future uncertain unless it is one of books popular in the sixties where everything was too realistic and true to life to have a happy ending. Actually I really enjoyed this story and if you want to let everyone imagine their own ending that is cool too. I will imagine a happy ending.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I was thrilled Katherine has said yes and there is a wedding about to take place, but can't you go down the road however far it would take and get them past all the aftermaths of cancer and let everyone be well and happy? You don't see many books end with someone puking every few minutes and the future uncertain unless it is one of books popular in the sixties where everything was too realistic and true to life to have a happy ending. Actually I really enjoyed this story and if you want to let everyone imagine their own ending that is cool too. I will imagine a happy ending.
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I have been convinced to do a short epilogue. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Yay. They are getting married. What's s this 26 weeks about? I always like happy endings. So this one pleases me. I need to read you rother book from now on . Are you going to start a new one soon? You are a prolific writer.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Yay. They are getting married. What's s this 26 weeks about? I always like happy endings. So this one pleases me. I need to read you rother book from now on . Are you going to start a new one soon? You are a prolific writer.
Well done.
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Katherine's treatment and then radiation will take a total of 26 weeks. Gabriel doesn't want to wait. They're getting married today.
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a wonderful end to a wonderful story. It was great and so well done. You are such an excellent writer. I hope I can get a good as you are one day. Have a blessed Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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What a wonderful end to a wonderful story. It was great and so well done. You are such an excellent writer. I hope I can get a good as you are one day. Have a blessed Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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You are a good writer. Just keep an eye on your writing dialogue. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, that was a wonderful ending and to the whole book. I have been enjoying this story as you well know. Now you'll have all the edits to make. Good luck with the publishing. Hugs, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Hi Barbara, that was a wonderful ending and to the whole book. I have been enjoying this story as you well know. Now you'll have all the edits to make. Good luck with the publishing. Hugs, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you. Yes, I will edit, send it to one editor and then send it to another before I attempt to publish. I am tired of self-publishing. I never sell many books because I have no idea how to promote it.
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I agree with you. I'm prepared to do the same as you with the Fisherman's Son. Please let me know how you get on.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well that sorted that out! I'm so pleased that they are getting married, but how about an epilogue to tell us how the cancer op went and how the wedding went. I have to know these things!! LOL Well done, my friend, I loved the story and I loved that they will get married. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Well that sorted that out! I'm so pleased that they are getting married, but how about an epilogue to tell us how the cancer op went and how the wedding went. I have to know these things!! LOL Well done, my friend, I loved the story and I loved that they will get married. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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I will think about an epilogue. I've never written one. REALLY. I'll research it. Thank you.
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It's easy. You can make it as long or short as you want. Just let your readers know that she came through all her surgery and chemo and has been cleared, and how happy the boys are they Gabe is now their dad. That sort of thing. It rounds it off nicely. xxxx
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I will.
