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Five

My baby sister

44 total reviews 
Comment from John Ciarmello
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I absolutely loved this story. It was funny and refreshing. I love the photo of them. You seemed to be a wonderful older sister and I'm sure you still are. It was simply enjoyable. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you. My brother Danny and sister Beverly were born a year apart and folks often thought they were twins. Hugs.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this story with us. I enjoyed reading.

It was that summer that I gave Beverly the nickname, (You can omit the second 'that' its an extra word and not needed.)

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you and thanks for the tip. I will edit and correct it. You're right it is unnecessary. Hugs.
Comment from Tpa
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I enjoyed your memoir and believe you had followed the rules of the prompt, writing about a sibling who wisely escaped working in the fields. I wish you the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you for reading and commenting. Hugs.
Comment from Raul1
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I have enjoyed reading your story. It's beautifully written. Well written. Well done. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you for reading and commenting. Hugs
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Very nice story. Well told.
dress her myself than drag her - 'then' drag her
which is Five in Spanish. - this five doesn't get captitalized
An aside -- You don't need to be quick to teach math or algebra :-)
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you and thanks and thanks for the tips. I will edit and correct. hugs to you.
Comment from the13thpoet
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Hello Prettybluebirds a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your Fiction with some truth, it was a good enjoyable read, I loved this line:
"It takes Beverly forever and five minutes longer to do anything. She is slower than molasses in January"............reminds me of my daugher....lol
good job and good luck!

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you. Beverly was always pokey. Sometimes I think it was on pupose to get out of doing things she didn't want to do. LOl Hugs.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I think your strong and determined sisterly love stood your sister in good stead as she knew she could always rely on you as you were here rock, I am glad she did so well at school and became a scholar, a fine story, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you and thanks for the six stars. Yeah, Beverly is almost genius smart. I think the pokey was part of her way of outsmarting all of us. Hugs
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 29-Mar-2022
    You are most welcome, well deserved, a joy to read x x x
Comment from Wendy G
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I enjoyed your story a lot. It was interesting, honest, and well-written with touches of humour. Yes, she was obviously quite smart, and knew how to get out of the hard work, but still get school clothes. Lol. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you. I apprecaite your reviews and look forward to them. Hugs
Comment from juliet p rucker
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I'd swear we had the same little slow moving sister. Only my sister, Andi and I grew up in Washington state, picked strawberries that summer and I always ended up having to rinse and dry the rest of the dishes after I had washed them too quickly for her to dry. Of course, we had to finish before we could go outside and play.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you. Boy, your dish washing story sounds like ours. Beverly was suppoesd to dry the dishes and she always claimed she had to go to the bathroom which was outside. By the time she got back I had the dishes all done, of course. Hugs.
Comment from Judy Lawless
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This is a well written story about you and your family, prettybluebirds. It seems you have many things to remember from those days of getting to school and picking cherries. Well written. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
    Thank you. Yep, those were good times even if Beverly exasperated me at time. Hugs.
reply by Judy Lawless on 29-Mar-2022
    You?re most welcome. :)