God Will Decide
Contest Entry5 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written contest entry you have penned with very good descriptive words and omitting the words you cannot use. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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This is a very well written contest entry you have penned with very good descriptive words and omitting the words you cannot use. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
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you are so welcome!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
God may be our judge but the decision to be or not to be, will be ourselves. It why we were gifted agency, first given in heaven where we decided to follow Christ or Lucifer. A third of the host opted out, lost the opportunity of bodies and certainly cannot do as they please under Satan's rule.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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God may be our judge but the decision to be or not to be, will be ourselves. It why we were gifted agency, first given in heaven where we decided to follow Christ or Lucifer. A third of the host opted out, lost the opportunity of bodies and certainly cannot do as they please under Satan's rule.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
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ok
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. All rules appear to have been followed. Your story flows smoothly.
One spag--need a space--end of his life,he space after comma.
Bet wishes in the contest.
Your faith will reach the test of time by choice of God and it depends on how you act towards others.
[in this line you used the word God for the second time in the sentence.
May I suggest
You faith will reach the test of time by His choice, and it will depend on how you act towards others.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. All rules appear to have been followed. Your story flows smoothly.
One spag--need a space--end of his life,he space after comma.
Bet wishes in the contest.
Your faith will reach the test of time by choice of God and it depends on how you act towards others.
[in this line you used the word God for the second time in the sentence.
May I suggest
You faith will reach the test of time by His choice, and it will depend on how you act towards others.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you! I fixed it! Thanks for the review!
Comment from lancellot
I read this several times and I am still confused. I'm sorry but this is not a story.
Bill has heard those messages from his angels through time ever slightly looks up above, God sends His angels coming down, reaching for him every time, and finally finishes the end of the tunnel, Bill finds what is his all everlasting freedom.
This really long (run-on) sentence does not make sense. I'm not trying to insult the writer, but try reading this out loud.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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I read this several times and I am still confused. I'm sorry but this is not a story.
Bill has heard those messages from his angels through time ever slightly looks up above, God sends His angels coming down, reaching for him every time, and finally finishes the end of the tunnel, Bill finds what is his all everlasting freedom.
This really long (run-on) sentence does not make sense. I'm not trying to insult the writer, but try reading this out loud.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
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I have made the corrections. Does it make sense and is it now good enough for five stars? Please check!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You wrote a good story following the directions.
-Some good points in the opening paragraph
about fate, choice, and actions.
-Good description of the angels
and a concluding thought about
Bill finding "his everlasting freedom."
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You wrote a good story following the directions.
-Some good points in the opening paragraph
about fate, choice, and actions.
-Good description of the angels
and a concluding thought about
Bill finding "his everlasting freedom."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
