Orion's Belt
Amphibrach meter26 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Orion's Belt
by Sugarray77
Beautiful poem with perfect Amphibrach meter. The imagery is outstanding. I wish I could write meter poems like you. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Orion's Belt
by Sugarray77
Beautiful poem with perfect Amphibrach meter. The imagery is outstanding. I wish I could write meter poems like you. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Gypsy.
Melissa
Comment from E. Denison
Fantastic work here, Sugarray77. You have done wonderful things with the imagery here, with a masterful display of transformation. This reads like a lyrical classic. The middle stanza I truly think is the strongest, with a wonderful read both internally and when read aloud. Beautiful work here. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Fantastic work here, Sugarray77. You have done wonderful things with the imagery here, with a masterful display of transformation. This reads like a lyrical classic. The middle stanza I truly think is the strongest, with a wonderful read both internally and when read aloud. Beautiful work here. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
My goodness, Melissa, this is breathtaking! Fantastic imaginative writing in what seems to me perfect meter. Dazzling. And with a soupçon of fun. I see this as a wonderful children's book, lavishly illustrated.
Thanks for sharing your marvelous talent
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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My goodness, Melissa, this is breathtaking! Fantastic imaginative writing in what seems to me perfect meter. Dazzling. And with a soupçon of fun. I see this as a wonderful children's book, lavishly illustrated.
Thanks for sharing your marvelous talent
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Marilyn.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
It's not just that you have captured the meter perfectly with this poem, that makes it outstanding. It's the imagery of a queen being bejeweled by heavenly constellations that makes it come alive! I loved this. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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It's not just that you have captured the meter perfectly with this poem, that makes it outstanding. It's the imagery of a queen being bejeweled by heavenly constellations that makes it come alive! I loved this. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, June.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This is a very imaginative poem about how you can clothe yourself like a queen with the stars of this well know constellation.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Melissa,
This is a very imaginative poem about how you can clothe yourself like a queen with the stars of this well know constellation.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Joan.
Melissa
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Melissa,
Fantasy is fun once in a while. Some methods are more part of us than others.
Don't mention it.
Joan
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is just lovely. I really like the picture, with Orion superimposed over the star constellation. I like the way you referred to the stars as a circlet of gems for your neck, a queen's diadem, and jewels of grandeur for your hair. Great metaphor! Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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This is just lovely. I really like the picture, with Orion superimposed over the star constellation. I like the way you referred to the stars as a circlet of gems for your neck, a queen's diadem, and jewels of grandeur for your hair. Great metaphor! Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Carol.
Melissa
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Happy Easter! Hope your day is special in every way. Blessings.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Beautiful poem! I loved listening to the detailed discussions of this superb poem on the recordings from our class. I regret that I couldn't participate directly. This one shines.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Beautiful poem! I loved listening to the detailed discussions of this superb poem on the recordings from our class. I regret that I couldn't participate directly. This one shines.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Tim.
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's quite a picture, Melissa. Beautiful indeed. I have never paid and mind to the stars. Most of my focus has been the moon, maybe because I am a Cancer, Moon Child, they call us. Well done with this. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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That's quite a picture, Melissa. Beautiful indeed. I have never paid and mind to the stars. Most of my focus has been the moon, maybe because I am a Cancer, Moon Child, they call us. Well done with this. Nancy:)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Nancy.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow you brought an abundance of sparkle into your words here and I was dazzled by the scene, great meter and well chosen words, a very talented write and I am running our of sixes very fast! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Wow you brought an abundance of sparkle into your words here and I was dazzled by the scene, great meter and well chosen words, a very talented write and I am running our of sixes very fast! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed pulling out the whimsical and fantasy vibes with this one about Orion. Afterwards, I found the perfect artwork that showed off his belt. I DO love writing in amphibrach meter. I seem to hear it in my sleep... LOL. Thanks so much, Dolly.
Sorry I'm so late.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
A revised review.
Ah that is so much better with a much stronger metrical ending. I read somewhere on the internet that many poets interpolate anapaestic poems with lines of amphibrach. That might be an interesting angle to explore
This is now magic, as you know.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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A revised review.
Ah that is so much better with a much stronger metrical ending. I read somewhere on the internet that many poets interpolate anapaestic poems with lines of amphibrach. That might be an interesting angle to explore
This is now magic, as you know.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Well.... I did forget and will rush to edit.. I had forgotten. Thank you, Jim.
Melissa
