Orion's Belt
Amphibrach meter26 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Very well written. Imaginative. Even the picture is apropos. The vocabulary may stretch many to spend time finding definitions, but I am fine with what you have written. Hey. That rhymes.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Very well written. Imaginative. Even the picture is apropos. The vocabulary may stretch many to spend time finding definitions, but I am fine with what you have written. Hey. That rhymes.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Haha.. a poetical review. Thanks so much Tom. So glad you enjoyed my visit to the stars. LOL
Melissa
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It's deserving of recognition.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Melissa.
-An excellent poem filled with
vivid imagery and effective rhyme.
-I like the premise established in line one
and the story you tell based on that.
-There are so many good images like,
"velvet of midnight" and "tassels of comets."
-You do an excellent job how these things
would adorn a necklace, slippers, and more.
-An excellent concluding verse and closing line.
-This is one of your best poems; I can't say
enough good things about it.
-Thank you for sharing the beauty you put into it.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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-Very nice image, Melissa.
-An excellent poem filled with
vivid imagery and effective rhyme.
-I like the premise established in line one
and the story you tell based on that.
-There are so many good images like,
"velvet of midnight" and "tassels of comets."
-You do an excellent job how these things
would adorn a necklace, slippers, and more.
-An excellent concluding verse and closing line.
-This is one of your best poems; I can't say
enough good things about it.
-Thank you for sharing the beauty you put into it.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Thank you so very much Pam for your lovely review. It deeply encourages me and makes my heart sigh that you liked it. Hugs, my friend. I listened to that lovely music... divine.
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa. I'm glad you liked the music. It is so inspiring.
Comment from RainbewLatte
To begin with, I love the rhyme scheme you chose to go with. It's as if your lines weave in and out against each other creating a certain flow. Having a rhythm and flow to poetry is always fun to read. The topic and idea you decided to go and write about (beautiful artwork by the way wherever it came from, credits to the artist) shoots for the stars and as if I had the justice to say it, you definitely hit them.
It really is such beautiful work, well written and well stated. I wish you good luck and all the best in everything you do!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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To begin with, I love the rhyme scheme you chose to go with. It's as if your lines weave in and out against each other creating a certain flow. Having a rhythm and flow to poetry is always fun to read. The topic and idea you decided to go and write about (beautiful artwork by the way wherever it came from, credits to the artist) shoots for the stars and as if I had the justice to say it, you definitely hit them.
It really is such beautiful work, well written and well stated. I wish you good luck and all the best in everything you do!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Jonathan, what a lovely review. I really appreciate your comments. We just finished the FanStory class on meter yesterday and I decided to write in amphibrach meter which is a three beat meter of da, DUM, da... or unstressed, stressed, unstressed... anyway its fun and creates a lovely flow. So glad you liked my visit to the stars. I will try to find the artist and give credit, but found the pic on Google... thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Willie P. Smith
I'm just an old country boy and a couple of your words slipped over my head, but I understood enough to say you penned a beautiful poem. Having to look up a word or two just makes me smarter. Very good work.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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I'm just an old country boy and a couple of your words slipped over my head, but I understood enough to say you penned a beautiful poem. Having to look up a word or two just makes me smarter. Very good work.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Hello Willie... thanks so very much for your lovely review. I am glad you enjoyed my visit to the stars LOL. :)
Melissa
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post, and displays your considerable skill with words, and your knowledge of poetic lucidity is exceptional, as your poem that you've written here Melissa, language rich, smooth written in abcb rhyme, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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This is an excellent post, and displays your considerable skill with words, and your knowledge of poetic lucidity is exceptional, as your poem that you've written here Melissa, language rich, smooth written in abcb rhyme, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much Roy. We just finished the FS Meter class yesterday and I thought I would craft a verse in amphibrach meter and share with everyone. It's fun to stretch and grow :). The next class in June is on writing in foreign/European forms... I know he is going to teach the Rondeau.. I'm looking forward to it. Thanks again.
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from Sally Law
Me, too. The night sky arouses many things and certainly poetic tributes. This one truly is truly queenly. A stunning offering in this form.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal XOs
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Me, too. The night sky arouses many things and certainly poetic tributes. This one truly is truly queenly. A stunning offering in this form.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal XOs
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2022
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Good morning Sally. Thank you. It was a homework piece for the recent FS Meter class. Its fun to try the different metric forms... learned quite a few things this time around. :). Thanks again!!
Melissa
