Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I think you've done a good job of describing jealousy as this thing that imprisons us, as it certainly does. I also like the self-talk here - saying "my turn will come" and "I won't keep score". As you speak to yourself, you are also telling others how we can free ourselves.
It's a nicely written entry into this contest. Good luck.

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2022

Thank you very much Pam. I appreciate your lovely comments and good wishes.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

This is a great entry for this competition. I reply like the way you contrast what he should be like with what he should be like. Thanks for sharing this and best of luck with the competition

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2022

Thank you very much for an encouraging review and for your good wishes. All are appreciated.