Granddad Has Escaped
Now I have to dust the dust with my duster... (Freestyle)11 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Great story for your contronym poem ! And you used both the dust and the removal of dust for your challenge while telling us a humorous story of Grandfather's escaping dust! Best wishes in the contest!
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Great story for your contronym poem ! And you used both the dust and the removal of dust for your challenge while telling us a humorous story of Grandfather's escaping dust! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
Comment from BethShelby
This is a funny poem and I love the style with which you tell it. Grandpa has turned to dust but he is making a lot of housework for you for daring to scatter himself on the floor. I like the way the meaning changes.
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This is a funny poem and I love the style with which you tell it. Grandpa has turned to dust but he is making a lot of housework for you for daring to scatter himself on the floor. I like the way the meaning changes.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
Comment from pome lover
that's cute and clever, AND
I'm sure granddad IS chuckling and probably egging you on.
Good rhymes and funny, though respectful.
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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that's cute and clever, AND
I'm sure granddad IS chuckling and probably egging you on.
Good rhymes and funny, though respectful.
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Thank you for your lovely words of support.
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you're most welcome
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
firstly, many thanks for entering this competition. i didn't think folk would find the rules so tricky, but there you go! lol
Good use of dust as the contronym and this works out well.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Hi there,
firstly, many thanks for entering this competition. i didn't think folk would find the rules so tricky, but there you go! lol
Good use of dust as the contronym and this works out well.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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And thank YOU for setting up a contest with straightforward requirements. I only had to tax my brain with the content of my poem, not by turning it inside out trying to follow multiple restrictions.
Comment from jessizero
This was a great Contronym poem. It was a funny yet sad piece. I laughed. I sincerely hope that it is fiction. Thank you for sharing this poem. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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This was a great Contronym poem. It was a funny yet sad piece. I laughed. I sincerely hope that it is fiction. Thank you for sharing this poem. Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. This actually happened to my father's container of ashes but I've changed it a bit for the contest. After cremation, a few days later I was taking Dad home in a jar which was placed on the passenger seat beside me with the seat belt around it. The car in front stopped suddenly and I stomped on the brakes, sending Dad's jar flying. His ashes spilled into the foot well of my car and I had to vacuum him up later.
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Oh no! I am so sorry. I feel terrible now
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Don't feel bad. It was funny when it happened because it was just like dad to make a joke out of being dead. We had a wonderful relationship and I meant no disrespect to him. He died in 1998 but I still think about him so often. He was an older parent so he was more like a grandfather to me.
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I am glad to hear that
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I enjoyed the bitter humor of your poem, how in fun, you portrayed the broken vase of your granddad's ashes as a payback joke. The love you had for him is clearly evident here.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed the bitter humor of your poem, how in fun, you portrayed the broken vase of your granddad's ashes as a payback joke. The love you had for him is clearly evident here.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. This actually happened to my father's container of ashes but I've changed it a bit for the contest. After cremation, a few days later I was taking Dad home in a jar which was placed on the passenger seat beside me with the seat belt around it. The car in front stopped suddenly and I stomped on the brakes, sending Dad's jar flying. His ashes spilled into the foot well of my car and I had to vacuum him up later.
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Made me smile--again!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet natured write with a free-write feel although there are rhymes too, a magical remembrance of your Grandad here as his ashes scatter to the floor, leaving you to clear it up and smiling to yourself as he would have also found this funny, your words are full of heartfelt love, even though this is also quite sad, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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This is a sweet natured write with a free-write feel although there are rhymes too, a magical remembrance of your Grandad here as his ashes scatter to the floor, leaving you to clear it up and smiling to yourself as he would have also found this funny, your words are full of heartfelt love, even though this is also quite sad, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. This actually happened to my father's container of ashes but I've changed it a bit for the contest. After cremation, a few days later I was taking Dad home in a jar which was placed on the passenger seat beside me with the seat belt around it. The car in front stopped suddenly and I stomped on the brakes, sending Dad's jar flying. His ashes spilled into the foot well of my car and I had to vacuum him up later.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello mystery Poet , a Good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I liked your The Contronym contest entry, I think it was funny and you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Hello mystery Poet , a Good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I liked your The Contronym contest entry, I think it was funny and you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. This actually happened to my father's container of ashes but I've changed it a bit for the contest. After cremation, a few days later I was taking Dad home in a jar which was placed on the passenger seat beside me with the seat belt around it. The car in front stopped suddenly and I stomped on the brakes, sending Dad's jar flying. His ashes spilled into the foot well of my car and I had to vacuum him up later.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hello Poet -
You have done well with the humorous tone in this poem. Nice use of rhyme, too.
Good job adhering to the rules. Good luck in the contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Hello Poet -
You have done well with the humorous tone in this poem. Nice use of rhyme, too.
Good job adhering to the rules. Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. This actually happened to my father's container of ashes but I've changed it a bit for the contest. After cremation, a few days later I was taking Dad home in a jar which was placed on the passenger seat beside me with the seat belt around it. The car in front stopped suddenly and I stomped on the brakes, sending Dad's jar flying. His ashes spilled into the foot well of my car and I had to vacuum him up later.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Fun, fun fun! Maybe not for grandpa or you, but you sure had me chuckling!
Great theme, subject, rhymes that are always more fun to read, and since it was free style, no rules relating to how it bounces along or syllables. Thanks for the entertainment. I'm sure to have sweet dreams tonight, as I'm going to bed with a smile. ð???
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Fun, fun fun! Maybe not for grandpa or you, but you sure had me chuckling!
Great theme, subject, rhymes that are always more fun to read, and since it was free style, no rules relating to how it bounces along or syllables. Thanks for the entertainment. I'm sure to have sweet dreams tonight, as I'm going to bed with a smile. ð???
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thanks for your super review.... glad my poem enhanced your day.
