Death Came Knocking
What if we kept death distracted for awhile?16 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello mystery poet a Good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your This is serious writing prompt entry, you executed it well, what's more serious than death? You managed to make it lighthearted and fun. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Hello mystery poet a Good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your This is serious writing prompt entry, you executed it well, what's more serious than death? You managed to make it lighthearted and fun. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thank you for your review of my poem, I appreciate your input.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You have innovatively expressed in a free flow about an utopia to keep death distracting for a while making a boat filming relates to delaying death when death knocks the door; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers; post your good writing on a white background using larger font size, like black and white ever. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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You have innovatively expressed in a free flow about an utopia to keep death distracting for a while making a boat filming relates to delaying death when death knocks the door; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers; post your good writing on a white background using larger font size, like black and white ever. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing my poem and your comments. I'll take in to consideration your suggestions.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is super clever! What a refreshing idea. If only it worked that way. Tea and popcorn sales would skyrocket. I appreciated this piece and enjoyed the read. I wish you much success with this entry.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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This is super clever! What a refreshing idea. If only it worked that way. Tea and popcorn sales would skyrocket. I appreciated this piece and enjoyed the read. I wish you much success with this entry.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the great review. Perhaps I should start checking out Jolly Time popcorn and Lipton as possible stock picks. That was funny.
Comment from Eunice Amero
Oh dear what a way to express death. Death takes no time but you sure had it taking time for you. Too bad many more couldn't get that change. Death has no respect for anyone but you in your writing serve him well. LOL you are funny and a good writer. I liked this. It gave you a chance to live your life. Good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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Oh dear what a way to express death. Death takes no time but you sure had it taking time for you. Too bad many more couldn't get that change. Death has no respect for anyone but you in your writing serve him well. LOL you are funny and a good writer. I liked this. It gave you a chance to live your life. Good luck.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the exceptional review. I feel honored. I read a book by Christian author Max Lucado once who mentioned that Jesus ruined every funeral he ever attended. We could use him here today.
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What do you mean Jesus ruins ever funeral he attended. Its not Jesus who causes death. But He allows it to happen and sin was caused and God says no one lives forever here until they know Jesus and we are in Heaven. But you are welcome.
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I think you mis-understood what was said. Take a look at Lazarus- he was dead several days before Jesus raised him. He also raised the little girl who was dead with all the mourners carrying on. He kicked them out and called her back to life. There may have been several other examples but I can't recall them right at the moment. I agree with you, Jesus doesn't call death, he was so bothered by it that he rescued several people who had already passed on. Sorry for the mis-understanding.
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Oh lm sorry. I agree with you
Sorry just havent felt the best lately and suffering a broken heart. Please forgive me
Never wanted thatbto happen
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No worries. I'm sorry to hear that you aren't feeling well and even worse that you are heartbroken over someone. I often pray for my FS friends and will do so for you. May the Lord give you peace.
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you are going to think I'm got out of my mind but do you know of any Christian soldiers around like 57 who don't mind a older woman I am so lonely. I think you so much for praying for me. If you do find one you can write me at 1951eunice@gmail.com Hope you don't think I've lost it but I like American soldiers the best but I like America. Thanks again I am still heart broken.
Comment from mermaids
You have created a poem that is unique and reads like a mini movie. I like how the individual leaves death at his house and travels until ready for death. You have a smooth poetic form and use of words that tells a different kind of tale.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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You have created a poem that is unique and reads like a mini movie. I like how the individual leaves death at his house and travels until ready for death. You have a smooth poetic form and use of words that tells a different kind of tale.
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the wonderful review. Your kind words mean a lot to me. I'm not a poet as a general rule, but I was intrigued by the writing prompt.
Comment from jaydub99
This is really creative, interesting and well written. It has a great cadence and each time I read it I grabbed a little more from it. I think you hit the topic head on and I like your interpretation of it. Great job, I would change nothing.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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This is really creative, interesting and well written. It has a great cadence and each time I read it I grabbed a little more from it. I think you hit the topic head on and I like your interpretation of it. Great job, I would change nothing.
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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My word, what a wonderful review. Thanks for taking the time to read my offering. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
