Easter
The greatest story ever told.48 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry. Wow! everything I read His story; I get goosebumps. You told it very eloquently. I enjoyed reading, I doubt you need my good luck wishes, but I will give them anyway. In my opinion you've nailed this contest.
But high priests of the city viewed His claim
As heresy and labeled Him a fraud. (I'm curious and this is probably my own thought. I wonder if they weren't more afraid of what Jesus taught than Him being a fraud.)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry. Wow! everything I read His story; I get goosebumps. You told it very eloquently. I enjoyed reading, I doubt you need my good luck wishes, but I will give them anyway. In my opinion you've nailed this contest.
But high priests of the city viewed His claim
As heresy and labeled Him a fraud. (I'm curious and this is probably my own thought. I wonder if they weren't more afraid of what Jesus taught than Him being a fraud.)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Barb. I think those two things go together.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine poem for Easter Paul and I enjoyed your fine rhymes and story in your own words. A good entry for the faith contest too.
This line is out of metre and will need some adjustment:
As HEREsy AND LABeled Him a fraud.
My favourite stanza is this one:
And as life from His mortal body slips,
The gathered multitude then taunts the Jew.
But then these words, to God, fall from His lips,
"Forgive them for they know not what they do."
Overall I thought this was an exceptional write.
I wish you luck with the contest and hope you have a happy Easter with lots of chocolate Easter eggs. We have a flat pack furniture company in the UK from Scandinavia called IKEA, they produced a chocolate bar and called it a flat packed Easter Egg! I thought that would make you smile.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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A fine poem for Easter Paul and I enjoyed your fine rhymes and story in your own words. A good entry for the faith contest too.
This line is out of metre and will need some adjustment:
As HEREsy AND LABeled Him a fraud.
My favourite stanza is this one:
And as life from His mortal body slips,
The gathered multitude then taunts the Jew.
But then these words, to God, fall from His lips,
"Forgive them for they know not what they do."
Overall I thought this was an exceptional write.
I wish you luck with the contest and hope you have a happy Easter with lots of chocolate Easter eggs. We have a flat pack furniture company in the UK from Scandinavia called IKEA, they produced a chocolate bar and called it a flat packed Easter Egg! I thought that would make you smile.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Christine. Heresy has three syllables, so I think I'm okay. Six stars from you is much appreciated. It means a lot.
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Do you say (here) with two syllables? I doubt it.
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Maybe that's the way they pronounce it in the UK. Check the dictionary.
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I misread it Paul! I do apologise, I thought you meant hearsay! But you mean heresy! I think I need new glasses! Sorry about that, but at least you still got the six stars, love Dolly x
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No apology necessary.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
This is the bible in fifteen stanzas. I haven't had the pleasure of reading
anything like this in a long time. Your poem also displays your knowledge of the bible. Very well done, a Joy to read. Willie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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This is the bible in fifteen stanzas. I haven't had the pleasure of reading
anything like this in a long time. Your poem also displays your knowledge of the bible. Very well done, a Joy to read. Willie
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Willie. I should read the Bible more.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was beautifully written, and worthy of a six, I'm sorry I don't have. Every time I hear this story it makes me go goosepimply, it is the best story ever to have been told. Your rhyme and rhythm is superb, and it was such a joy to read. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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That was beautifully written, and worthy of a six, I'm sorry I don't have. Every time I hear this story it makes me go goosepimply, it is the best story ever to have been told. Your rhyme and rhythm is superb, and it was such a joy to read. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Sandra. My muse was working overtime on this one.
Comment from Jessa Miller
Absolutely amazing. This gave me chills. I cannot fathom how this could have been any better. It was perfect, and I feel blessed that you shared it, and I got to read it. Thank you and amen!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Absolutely amazing. This gave me chills. I cannot fathom how this could have been any better. It was perfect, and I feel blessed that you shared it, and I got to read it. Thank you and amen!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Jessa. It was a pleasure to bring it to you.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a beautiful rendition of the Easter storty >Paul. We all know it so well, but it never fails to absorb and fulfill us. Good luck in the contest. Kate xx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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This is a beautiful rendition of the Easter storty >Paul. We all know it so well, but it never fails to absorb and fulfill us. Good luck in the contest. Kate xx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Kate. It is a great time of year.
Comment from jessizero
I love the story of Resurrection Sunday, and you have done a great job retelling it here in the form of a poem. Thank you for sharing this here. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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I love the story of Resurrection Sunday, and you have done a great job retelling it here in the form of a poem. Thank you for sharing this here. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Jessi. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Sally Law
Thank you for sharing the gospel story and the resurrection of Christ at Easter. It is a wonderful story that never grows old with me, for it gives me life, hope and peace. I very much look forward to His second coming and being with Him in glory.
Sending you my best today as always, and Easter blessings to you and yours, and my very best wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thank you for sharing the gospel story and the resurrection of Christ at Easter. It is a wonderful story that never grows old with me, for it gives me life, hope and peace. I very much look forward to His second coming and being with Him in glory.
Sending you my best today as always, and Easter blessings to you and yours, and my very best wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Sally. Every once in awhile I need to write something like this, after all the other junk that I write.
