Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for bringing to our attention the shocking numbers of homelessness in our country. And I'm sure that the pandemic has added to that number. In some places, however, we have homeless people with guns who are not just the invisible but quite dangerous to their community. I like your call to Congress to make changes. If only they could work together. Great job in your very challenging poetic form!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Thank you for bringing to our attention the shocking numbers of homelessness in our country. And I'm sure that the pandemic has added to that number. In some places, however, we have homeless people with guns who are not just the invisible but quite dangerous to their community. I like your call to Congress to make changes. If only they could work together. Great job in your very challenging poetic form!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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I appreciate your validation.
Comment from DeboraDyess
The numbers are staggering. I've been close but never lost my home but my husband was homeless after Viet Nam. This brings such light to that situation.
Well done, also, on a new poetry format (for me).
Thank you for writing about such a tough topic.
Blessings and best,
Deb
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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The numbers are staggering. I've been close but never lost my home but my husband was homeless after Viet Nam. This brings such light to that situation.
Well done, also, on a new poetry format (for me).
Thank you for writing about such a tough topic.
Blessings and best,
Deb
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Deb, thank him for his service - we are brother veterans, same sad era
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And thank you for your time, perseverance, and dedication to our country and our people.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You wrote your poem well with that complex style. I enjoyed
reading it though it was poignant. Your topic is well expressed
about an issue that has been festering for too long and is only
getting worse. Those in their ivory towers don't know, or care,
what happens in the trenches. Thanks for the informative
notes, too.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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You wrote your poem well with that complex style. I enjoyed
reading it though it was poignant. Your topic is well expressed
about an issue that has been festering for too long and is only
getting worse. Those in their ivory towers don't know, or care,
what happens in the trenches. Thanks for the informative
notes, too.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Jan, thank for your supportive comments.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written, well presented and thought provoking.
I don't know the exact percentage, but a large portion of homeless are either homosexual young people, abandoned by their families or are suffering from mental illnesses.
I hope all of your readers will receive this compassionate message.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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This is well written, well presented and thought provoking.
I don't know the exact percentage, but a large portion of homeless are either homosexual young people, abandoned by their families or are suffering from mental illnesses.
I hope all of your readers will receive this compassionate message.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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K.L. thank you!
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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I appreciate your review.
Comment from dragonpoet
JLR,
This poem and artwork reminds us of the plight of the poor and homeless.
It shows all the reasons we give not to be generous to help them. If we did maybe they wouldn't be dirty and would be less likely to give up. These show judgements that might hurt us in the end.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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JLR,
This poem and artwork reminds us of the plight of the poor and homeless.
It shows all the reasons we give not to be generous to help them. If we did maybe they wouldn't be dirty and would be less likely to give up. These show judgements that might hurt us in the end.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Hi, Joan thank you!
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Hi JLR,
No problem
Joan
Comment from Janet Foor
The homelessness in America is a sad commentary on us.
Thank you for sharing their plight and for bringing an awareness of those who walk among us every day but are not seen by us.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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The homelessness in America is a sad commentary on us.
Thank you for sharing their plight and for bringing an awareness of those who walk among us every day but are not seen by us.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Janet, yes sad, but true~
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love your plea in your title JLR. A hellish existence indeed to have to live on the streets.
halfwits derelicts addicts - great rhyming descriptions in this emotional poem. Well said, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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I love your plea in your title JLR. A hellish existence indeed to have to live on the streets.
halfwits derelicts addicts - great rhyming descriptions in this emotional poem. Well said, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Valda, thank you for your support!
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great rhyming, easy to read and giving us a picture of those homeless people who are out there. Like your words say, it is so easy to overlook and forget about them. We may not be able to help them all, but when we have a chance to help even one, we will be blessed.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Great rhyming, easy to read and giving us a picture of those homeless people who are out there. Like your words say, it is so easy to overlook and forget about them. We may not be able to help them all, but when we have a chance to help even one, we will be blessed.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Hi Anne, thank you!
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You are welcome
Comment from Dawn Munro
Unconscionable, the plight of the homeless -- in nations of great wealth! Your poem speaks to a situation that defies explanation by so-called 'humane, civilized society' and does it beautifully, most especially with these lines:
"All those that allow this stench of failure under their armpit --
Jesus sees these lost souls; surely, saddened to look at this scene."
I would suggest only one change, and that is to the word "that" -- when describing/speaking of people, I would use "(who) allow..."
Powerful! Bravo! Best of luck in the contest. A marvelous use of your pen, IMO.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Unconscionable, the plight of the homeless -- in nations of great wealth! Your poem speaks to a situation that defies explanation by so-called 'humane, civilized society' and does it beautifully, most especially with these lines:
"All those that allow this stench of failure under their armpit --
Jesus sees these lost souls; surely, saddened to look at this scene."
I would suggest only one change, and that is to the word "that" -- when describing/speaking of people, I would use "(who) allow..."
Powerful! Bravo! Best of luck in the contest. A marvelous use of your pen, IMO.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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IMO, I am so honored by your comments and kind recommendation. Best of life, always to you!
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Thank you! How kind!
