Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Another Summer Day"Musings of an old man - 2022
33 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
Your details of this summer day are excellent. It makes me picture myself right in the middle of it all as the sun rises. Thank you for sharing this poem here. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-May-2022
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Your details of this summer day are excellent. It makes me picture myself right in the middle of it all as the sun rises. Thank you for sharing this poem here. Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 01-May-2022
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Hi and thank you!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written and well presented. Your writing is wildly descriptive, as I felt as thought I was on the beach looking up at the soft muted pinks and red of the setting sun.
The message is a strong one that I hope all of your readers will receive.
reply by the author on 01-May-2022
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This is well written and well presented. Your writing is wildly descriptive, as I felt as thought I was on the beach looking up at the soft muted pinks and red of the setting sun.
The message is a strong one that I hope all of your readers will receive.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 01-May-2022
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K.L. Thank you so very much for your your good wishes.
Comment from royowen
We are still enjoying mild sunny weather here where I live in Australia, but I guess that will change shortly. Beautifully written Jim. You are good at the free verse, but you are becoming a very good all round performer in poetry, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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We are still enjoying mild sunny weather here where I live in Australia, but I guess that will change shortly. Beautifully written Jim. You are good at the free verse, but you are becoming a very good all round performer in poetry, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Roy, my it makes my heart soar with delight with your compliment. I am pleased that as you have entered in your fall season that you are still enjoying your the last warmth of sunny weather.
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Good job
Comment from Goosey Gander
You have done an excellent job with your poem, "Another Summer Day!" I love how descriptive your words are. I love the word 'luminescence.' It is a beautiful word, and so is your poem.
-GG
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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You have done an excellent job with your poem, "Another Summer Day!" I love how descriptive your words are. I love the word 'luminescence.' It is a beautiful word, and so is your poem.
-GG
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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GG thank you so much for this validation.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You described a moment in time here and I enjoyed the activity on the beach on this wonderful summer day, a joy to read, your free writes are the best, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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You described a moment in time here and I enjoyed the activity on the beach on this wonderful summer day, a joy to read, your free writes are the best, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Hi Dolly, thank you! I trust you are getting along well!
Comment from Raul1
It is clear and concise. The sentences flow with clarity. I have enjoyed reading your poem. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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It is clear and concise. The sentences flow with clarity. I have enjoyed reading your poem. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thank you sir!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words paint a great picture of a summer day at the ocean, JLR.
I enjoyed reading about all the many examples involved. You make
readers feel like they are walking along seeing and feeling everything
in your poem. The image is great. Your word are well thought out
and descriptive.
I wonder about this line
A lithe athletic blond, with a youthful yellow lab,
are bonding with the toss of a frisbee
[I believe the are should be is since the subject is singular. The dog is part of the prepositional phrase. Maybe you could delete the word with and the comma then add the word 'and.'
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Your words paint a great picture of a summer day at the ocean, JLR.
I enjoyed reading about all the many examples involved. You make
readers feel like they are walking along seeing and feeling everything
in your poem. The image is great. Your word are well thought out
and descriptive.
I wonder about this line
A lithe athletic blond, with a youthful yellow lab,
are bonding with the toss of a frisbee
[I believe the are should be is since the subject is singular. The dog is part of the prepositional phrase. Maybe you could delete the word with and the comma then add the word 'and.'
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Oh Jan, your extra set of eyes always offers improvement! Thanks so much!
Comment from Cecilia R
Your poem about the wonders of the early morning beach made me long to head for the ocean again. You paint an enticing picture with your words. It is easy to read with its gentle flow from scene to scene. Great job.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Your poem about the wonders of the early morning beach made me long to head for the ocean again. You paint an enticing picture with your words. It is easy to read with its gentle flow from scene to scene. Great job.
Cecilia
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Cecelia, thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your descriptions of this lovely, warm sunny day, bring your poem to life. I could see me walking along that beach, watching the crabbers, and enjoying all the day has to offer. It's a lovely free verse poem, well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Your descriptions of this lovely, warm sunny day, bring your poem to life. I could see me walking along that beach, watching the crabbers, and enjoying all the day has to offer. It's a lovely free verse poem, well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from zanya
The language here in this poem is rich and evocative reminding us as Summer nears of some of the pleasures to be found in the natural world at this time and with a tone of gratitude
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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The language here in this poem is rich and evocative reminding us as Summer nears of some of the pleasures to be found in the natural world at this time and with a tone of gratitude
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Zanya, I certainly do appreciate your validation with this free verse.
