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The Tor

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Adventures around & upon a hill

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Comment from writer_13
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Your story is very interesting and I like the way you created characters that reincarnate into a later life and become friends with the main character of the story.

 Comment Written 05-May-2022


reply by the author on 05-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from leather
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This book has an interesting theme. It is not a common choice for topics and that, by itself, offers up the opportunity to move into fresh territory.
However, as a reviewer, I am being thrust into and moved between a two-sided world and inundated with a overload of characters: Stephen,
Cordelia, Sylvester/Somar, Robert, Karen,Caren, Cyndy, Mary Jo, Patrick, Prior Richard, and Madeline. I soon felt overwhelmed and confused with all these names and characters. It was more than I could comfortably assimulate. As a one chapter reviewer, I don't have the luxury of knowing these characters from other chapters. I think the plot is promising, but I also think that this chapter was a bit of a "hard read".

 Comment Written 05-May-2022


reply by the author on 05-May-2022
    Thank you for your efforts to review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
reply by leather on 05-May-2022
    Perhaps a first chapter selection for review would be worth considering. One would be "up to speed" right from the start and the characters would probably be introduced more gradually.

    Thank you for the invitation to read the book.
Comment from Judy Lawless
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I'm late getting to this, Liz. I've fallen behind in reviewing once again, this time because I've been gardening. :)

I really enjoyed reading this chapter. It's well written, and I feel excited for Madeline/Samuel having discovered the future identity of Patrick.

I love this line: "My head is like a closet with things just thoughtlessly thrown into it." I'll have to tuck it away for future reference. :)

 Comment Written 03-May-2022


reply by the author on 03-May-2022
    Thank you for getting to this review. It's like a rat race, if we want to work on our own story or for heavens sake...have a life. I've presently got 34, but I do need to make big money to renew this Chapter & get ready for the next chapter. I try to stay 2 ch ahead.
reply by Judy Lawless on 03-May-2022
    You?re welcome, Liz.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
    I saw it saying something about cups & saucers & plates very disorganized in a cupboard...so I changed it to a closet...you put your spin to it...lol
reply by Judy Lawless on 03-May-2022
    Love it! Lol
Comment from aryr
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This was a great continuation chapter, Liz. I am really impressed regarding the lengths and details that Madeline/Brother Samuel will go to in order to solve the mystery of her potential friends from before. So far, she feels that Stephen who was begging for food is Cordelia, Sylvester is Somara and that Robert is Karin. Patrick is most likely Caren a famous potter. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.


 Comment Written 02-May-2022


reply by the author on 02-May-2022
    Thank you for your loyal review. I'm glad you are enjoying this.
reply by aryr on 03-May-2022
    You are so welcome, Liz, anything you write is an adventure, lol.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
    lol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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The writing is good, the character is well-drawn, but how could you be meeting so many people from your past? Is it some kind of conjunction of the stars or something? You mention living in the nineteenth century, but I thought Madeline lived in the 21st century and grew up in the twentieth century. Just wondering.

 Comment Written 01-May-2022


reply by the author on 01-May-2022
    Thank you for you involved review. She was born in the late part of the 19th century. They were drawn to this cottages to meet each for what they thought was the first time, but from their reaction to the Tor & to Glastonbury, Madeline is thinking they were all affected by the Tor and Glastonbury. It turns out they were right about their reaction the Glastonbury. This will all come to a climax near the end of her time in the 15th century, to return to the 21st century. I can give you a spoiler if you'd feel more connected with what is building here.
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
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Interesting content. I have always been interested in the idea of time travel. In the following line, (kiddie corner to where I am standing), I assume you are referring to a word which means 'diagonally opposite'. If so, you might consider replacing kiddie corner with caddy-corner. Thank you

 Comment Written 01-May-2022


reply by the author on 01-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from jessizero
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As before, I am enjoying reading the continuing adventures of your characters. I hope Brother Samuel doesn't get caught for being late. Thank you for continuing to share.

 Comment Written 01-May-2022


reply by the author on 01-May-2022
    Thank you for your continual support.
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh, the mystery is unraveling! But is only Madeline the time traveler? Everyone else is back in the present? What a hardy soul to not be overwhelmed by the situation but she rejoices at the clues she found.

It's great that Madeline/Samuel has such good hearing that she can detect who it is by the rattle of the prayer beads!
I really liked " My head is like a closet with things just thoughtlessly thrown into it."

Questions:
I have twp solved Stephen (twp?)
Throughout the time we were are [preposition?) the cottages, she gifted (Who is she?) Caren? But that is revealed later so maybe reverse the order of the sentences?

 Comment Written 01-May-2022


reply by the author on 01-May-2022
    Oooof, thank you. It doesn't seem to matter how many times I check stuff, there are still errors. You've saved me a lot of 4's lol
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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There are small snippets of interesting explanation in this chapter, like pearls in oysters. It was a pleasure discovrering them and finding out the details of the monastic life. Thanks. Kate xx

 Comment Written 01-May-2022


reply by the author on 01-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you were able to find something interesting about it.