Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Well, it is a twelve-line poem and fits the contest requirements. I'm glad you celebrated all the special moms in your life and the funny offbeat ending leaving the last couplet unrhymed. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 05-May-2022

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reply by the author on 05-May-2022

Thank you, Helen. I couldn't help myself.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Of course you did, Bill, since she's not here to proofread.
But it all works in the end. You gave a good brief history
of all the moms in your life. I enjoyed reading your
contest entry. The rhymes work, the flow is smooth, and
your words are straight from your heart.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 05-May-2022

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reply by the author on 05-May-2022

Thank you so much, Jan.

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

You succeeded on all counts Bill, except the rhyme on the last couplet - but I think you realised that. I enjoyed it very much. It told a good historical story of your family.

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 Comment Written 05-May-2022

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reply by the author on 05-May-2022

Thank you, Kate. I couldn't help myself.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

That was clever. I figured you meant to do that. :)
Your poem was so sweet. You have been lucky to have these women in your life. Thank you for sharing this poem here.

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 Comment Written 05-May-2022

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reply by the author on 05-May-2022

Thank you, Jessizero