Eternalized
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Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi John, this is such a unique
and original masterpiece.
To love your not yet present
grandchildren is very noble.
Your words are stellar and
penned with grace. I hope
you're having a fab Sunday.
Blessings ~
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi John, this is such a unique
and original masterpiece.
To love your not yet present
grandchildren is very noble.
Your words are stellar and
penned with grace. I hope
you're having a fab Sunday.
Blessings ~
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Regina! Thank you so much for going back to Externalized. I want to thank you for following me. I enjoy your reviews
Comment from Annmuma
WOW!! Very creative and intuitive. I felt the certainty with which this story was written and yet could hear that slight rattle of uncertainty revealed int he the statement: "your fathers would call me crazy........" Beautifully written and should be a contest contender if not winner. good luck. ann
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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WOW!! Very creative and intuitive. I felt the certainty with which this story was written and yet could hear that slight rattle of uncertainty revealed int he the statement: "your fathers would call me crazy........" Beautifully written and should be a contest contender if not winner. good luck. ann
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for your review and kind words, Ann.
Comment from Tpa
I wasn't sure of your story. At first, I thought it was metaphorical, a glance from God looking over his civilization. After another read, I believe it was from the beyond that sees and protects those the left behind.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I wasn't sure of your story. At first, I thought it was metaphorical, a glance from God looking over his civilization. After another read, I believe it was from the beyond that sees and protects those the left behind.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you for the review, Tpa.
Comment from Bridge
A lovely and well written story. It touched my heart because I could identify with the thought expressed. Very well described. Thanks for sharing.
With regards
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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A lovely and well written story. It touched my heart because I could identify with the thought expressed. Very well described. Thanks for sharing.
With regards
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you, for the kind review, Bridge.
Comment from nomi338
How unique. I used to imagine my yet unborn children. When they arrived I did nothing to mold them into the persons I imagined them to be, surprisingly, they do to a certain degree match up to who I thought they would be. Imagine that.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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How unique. I used to imagine my yet unborn children. When they arrived I did nothing to mold them into the persons I imagined them to be, surprisingly, they do to a certain degree match up to who I thought they would be. Imagine that.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you, nomi, for your review. I'm happy they are as you have imagined; it gives me hope.
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I suspect that some of it is due to inherited genetic traits.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a beautiful sentiment and I can see you are going to be a doting grandma when your time comes. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing this great piece.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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This is a beautiful sentiment and I can see you are going to be a doting grandma when your time comes. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing this great piece.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you so much for the great review and kind words, dmt1967.
Comment from LisaMay
Your writing is a little obscure at times with not enough elaboration to fully understand what you mean, for instance in the opening paragraph you write of repentance, apprehension, and boundaries. But all in all I am impressed with the imaginative way you have written this piece, with its crisp imagery. But why is the kaleidoscope in black and white?
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Your writing is a little obscure at times with not enough elaboration to fully understand what you mean, for instance in the opening paragraph you write of repentance, apprehension, and boundaries. But all in all I am impressed with the imaginative way you have written this piece, with its crisp imagery. But why is the kaleidoscope in black and white?
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you for your review, LisaMay
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi,
I loved this short story. You captured a wonderful feeling within your notes to your 'yet born' grandchildren.
You wrote this with a sense of sincerity and wisdom that made for a good read.
I can't fault anything I've read. No, I would not change a thing, and I do love the last stanza... a truly capturing ending.
Well done and all the very best in this contest... I wish you nothing but the best.
With our thoughts we create...
a knowing of our evolution.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Hi,
I loved this short story. You captured a wonderful feeling within your notes to your 'yet born' grandchildren.
You wrote this with a sense of sincerity and wisdom that made for a good read.
I can't fault anything I've read. No, I would not change a thing, and I do love the last stanza... a truly capturing ending.
Well done and all the very best in this contest... I wish you nothing but the best.
With our thoughts we create...
a knowing of our evolution.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you, James, for the kind review.
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My pleasure, thank you for sharing it... very creative.
Comment from Cristine22
A good read, both pleasant and poignant. This reminds me of a recent conversation in an online Buddhist group that I'm part of. The topic was unconditional acceptance, so I've had that on my mind. What could be more unconditional that loving someone who has yet to be born? They're loved however they end up being and can't become a way that would stop you from loving them. A great message. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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A good read, both pleasant and poignant. This reminds me of a recent conversation in an online Buddhist group that I'm part of. The topic was unconditional acceptance, so I've had that on my mind. What could be more unconditional that loving someone who has yet to be born? They're loved however they end up being and can't become a way that would stop you from loving them. A great message. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I am a mother hoping to be a grandmother one day and this really struck a chord with me. I think it's an exceptional piece of writing, full of love and hope and dreams.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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I am a mother hoping to be a grandmother one day and this really struck a chord with me. I think it's an exceptional piece of writing, full of love and hope and dreams.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Thank you for your review, Pam, and the six stars are much appreciated. We can only hope!
