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Romantic Tanka Poems

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Comment from karenina
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I'm not ready to go.... But if I must, I pray it will be as peaceful and freeing as this...

This taps into my Algonquin heritage... I pray the eagle will guide my final flight home...


Karenina

 Comment Written 11-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank you, sweetie pie. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by karenina on 11-May-2022
    Your poems comfort me...
Comment from Gloria ....
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Excellent use of extended metaphor to draw to the future of soaring above the mountains to leave the withered fields behind once and for all.

Very nice, and I still get a charge out of the Eagle's long-feathered pants that go right to their ankles.

Thank you for sharing. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank very much, my friend. I'm happy you like it. I appreciate your excellent review.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like this poem- good presentation- good explanation in the notes - poem paints a picture of someone moving forward in life with strength leaving past failure behind- good job
Q 5 lines?

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Jijei can be written as a haiku or tanka. The details are on my notes.

    Thank you, ap

    I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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It is with those spiritual experiences of "soaring with eagles" that we can "leave behind the withered fields" of the past or even of this mortal life. Your poem reminds me of that passage in Isaiah 40:31 "but those who hope in the LORD will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles."
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 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    I love that passage from the Bible. Thank you, sweetie pie. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Jisei - Written in Modern Tanka
Flying High
Gypsy
I loved your tanka about eagles reminds of when I see eagles. They are amazing to watch. The way you tell us readers that --
a Japanese poem written by the poet before their own death
helps to make your Jisei tanka stand out.
Yes, we have eagles in Vermont.
Gert

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Beri Bee
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I absolutely love the use of "high over the highest" here! I can see and feel it in my mind's eye. The SOUL soaring with eagles feels magical. I remember hearing that only a few souls can soar with eagles, while the rest stay on the ground like turkeys looking up with their mouths open... drowning on water when it rains. Thanks!

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Beri Bee on 11-May-2022
    My pleasure!
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written 31 syllable Modern Tanka. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery to go with your words. Does it have to be about something Japanese to write for the club?

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    No, you can write it in any subject. You can write as haiku or tanka. Remember is about death of the poet.

    Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Teri7 on 12-May-2022
    ok. thank you!
reply by Teri7 on 12-May-2022
    ok. thank you!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
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Now you are talking or flying. This is the way to go. Going for the gusto of life. Staying on course high up in the sky. Keeping a birds eye view from above. Thank you for sharing this poem.

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Carolyn Dooley on 11-May-2022
    You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
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When I was young I would dream quite often about being able to rise up off the ground and watch the people walking down below, I guess my imagination would turn to writing one day, and it did. Beautifully written blessings Roy

 Comment Written 10-May-2022


reply by the author on 11-May-2022
    I dreamed about flying too. I think we all do until we are taught we can't.

    Thank you very much, Roy.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by royowen on 11-May-2022
    That?s true,