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Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "A Particular Friendship"Adventures around & upon a hill
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
The snapshots, and untied ends, add more interest to the story.
An intriguing tale with strong characterizations sprinkled throughout.
All the women change into another person, interesting premise.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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The snapshots, and untied ends, add more interest to the story.
An intriguing tale with strong characterizations sprinkled throughout.
All the women change into another person, interesting premise.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm not sure if I've invited you or not: It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from jessizero
I have been following this story for a while now, but I came into it in the middle. I may now have to go back and read from the beginning. Thank you for continuing to share. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I have been following this story for a while now, but I came into it in the middle. I may now have to go back and read from the beginning. Thank you for continuing to share. Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I may already have given this to you, if so, it can be a review...lol
it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from aryr
A fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. I really enjoyed how Madeline/Samuel showed her intense research and rationale into why she/he has surmised the impressions she/he did for each of the fellow brothers, for example John is Cyndy. It was great that you included in your narrative notes the entire list. Great job, very well done and enjoyed.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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A fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. I really enjoyed how Madeline/Samuel showed her intense research and rationale into why she/he has surmised the impressions she/he did for each of the fellow brothers, for example John is Cyndy. It was great that you included in your narrative notes the entire list. Great job, very well done and enjoyed.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad you caught it. It's hard to miss a chapter. I get lost if I do & have to go back to the author's portfolio.
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You are so welcome, Liz. My computer was off during my visit but I had 80 some reviews so I was selective of those I picked, lol, of course yours was one. Sure glad I didn't have to miss it.
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I get overwhelmed when I have 30, I can't imagine sifting through 80 bwaaa. I'm glad you found mine.
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You are so welcome, Liz. You are the only Liz that I know on FanStory, lol.
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Lol...phew
Comment from Judy Lawless
It's interesting to see that all of the 15th century Brothers, will become women in the 20th century, but I guess you've done that because the women are all a group of only women at the harp therapy lessons. This continues to be an intriguing story, Liz. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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It's interesting to see that all of the 15th century Brothers, will become women in the 20th century, but I guess you've done that because the women are all a group of only women at the harp therapy lessons. This continues to be an intriguing story, Liz. Well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I',m glad you are enjoying it.
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You're most welcome, Liz.
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***Hugs***
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm finding this to be intriguing reading, Liz. I admire your use of little character shapshots that stop action in the midst of its movement and leave the reader with a thematic mosaic and a lot of untied ends. You've done exceptionally well with this.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I'm finding this to be intriguing reading, Liz. I admire your use of little character shapshots that stop action in the midst of its movement and leave the reader with a thematic mosaic and a lot of untied ends. You've done exceptionally well with this.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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That's so nice of you to notice and to say. Thank you for such a lovely review.
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Reading it was my complete pleasure, Liz.
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***big warm smile***
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really interesting time in Samuel's life. As he gets to know Justin, he discovers he was caught in an unacceptable relationship. Madeline should probably be afraid of Justin's interest in Samuel.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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This is a really interesting time in Samuel's life. As he gets to know Justin, he discovers he was caught in an unacceptable relationship. Madeline should probably be afraid of Justin's interest in Samuel.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. You are right about the painful consequences.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad that you are giving us little portraits of the people in the new time/location and their match in the 21st century. I like the Cyndy comes from a long line of sheepherding folk and she still knits.
I wonder why only Madeline has been sent back and has the 21st knowledge/memories. It's very isolating for her but she's doing great considering the circumstances. It's a mystery she has to uncover.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I'm glad that you are giving us little portraits of the people in the new time/location and their match in the 21st century. I like the Cyndy comes from a long line of sheepherding folk and she still knits.
I wonder why only Madeline has been sent back and has the 21st knowledge/memories. It's very isolating for her but she's doing great considering the circumstances. It's a mystery she has to uncover.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you for your supportive refreshing review. You always seem to thankfully follow Katherine with her 4's. I've asked her to not bother, but she insists. I've been checking with my real friends as to what they want me to call them as a monk & what their skill will be. It was fun to hear Cyndy's story. She is also quite a knitter. She figures she got that passed down from her mother's side. James/Evelyn's is lovely, coming up in a couple of chapters. Maybe in one of my stories, there will be a Helen...lol
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Well, I look forward to your revelations about monastic life as you have learned a lot in your personal experiences.
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Thank you...hugs
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I feel that your novel is struggling slightly at the moment. It seems to have lost direction, and the storyline has become muddled. A prime example of what I see as the problem is:
Now I know why Patrick isn't ever in our work crew.
This sentence stands alone, with no lead in or explanation. I think you need to revise one last time carefully before submitting your posts, just now.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I feel that your novel is struggling slightly at the moment. It seems to have lost direction, and the storyline has become muddled. A prime example of what I see as the problem is:
Now I know why Patrick isn't ever in our work crew.
This sentence stands alone, with no lead in or explanation. I think you need to revise one last time carefully before submitting your posts, just now.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you for the review, but as I've said to you, I prefer you not score me a C. If it's that bad writing, why do you insist on reading my work.
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I read because often it's excellent. I thought you would like constructive criticism, I don't grade C as you say it without explaining why. I thought you would find this helpful to improve. If you don't want it I'll stop. Sorry.
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'Now I know why Patrick isn't ever in our work crew.' was discovered in previous...that's the artificiality of this system. If you just binged the story, it would flow very smoothly
Comment from R. Marc Goodson
An excellent chapter, well designed and vividly written. Most of the action here is in clever description, not dialogue. It reminded me of reading U.K. authors, where there is a dearth of dialogue and a great deal of scene setting and action.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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An excellent chapter, well designed and vividly written. Most of the action here is in clever description, not dialogue. It reminded me of reading U.K. authors, where there is a dearth of dialogue and a great deal of scene setting and action.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you for your delightful review.
It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
