Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Animas at Play', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a delight to both read and review. To me this is definitely a six. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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'Animas at Play', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a delight to both read and review. To me this is definitely a six. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Hello my friend from down under! Wow, I so appreciate this si-star validation and I am getting along quite well, as I hope is the case for you, as well!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The picture is priceless! You chose it well for your lovely children's poem. The animals were surely have a time of their lives here, whether playing of fighting, or eating. Everything children do whether animal of human. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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The picture is priceless! You chose it well for your lovely children's poem. The animals were surely have a time of their lives here, whether playing of fighting, or eating. Everything children do whether animal of human. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
An awesome entry for the Children's Poem writing prompt Contest. It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
The theme about animals is so cute and the presentation goes well together.
The rhyme doesn'tseem forced.
Well done! I wish you the best in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Hello,
An awesome entry for the Children's Poem writing prompt Contest. It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
The theme about animals is so cute and the presentation goes well together.
The rhyme doesn'tseem forced.
Well done! I wish you the best in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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I love your comments, thank you!
Comment from Frank Malley
This is a good starting point for a children's poem, but it needs development rhythmically. I have the sense that children's poetry should be easily phrase-able for singing, like Jack and Jill and Old Mother Hubbard. I didn't try to make the statements of this poem more aligned with rhythmic motifs, but I think it could be done.
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reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This is a good starting point for a children's poem, but it needs development rhythmically. I have the sense that children's poetry should be easily phrase-able for singing, like Jack and Jill and Old Mother Hubbard. I didn't try to make the statements of this poem more aligned with rhythmic motifs, but I think it could be done.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Frank yep, silly for me - a person with two left feet to dance among the stars of children's poetic genre. But practice, practice on I must.
Comment from Jessie Eldora
I like this cute little poem, like way in which it is written. Good luck for the rhyming children's poetry contest. A great illustration used for the poem.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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I like this cute little poem, like way in which it is written. Good luck for the rhyming children's poetry contest. A great illustration used for the poem.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Jessie, thank you. while this poetic style is not mt favorite voice I felt I must give a good try.
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was adorable. The rhyme and meter were held to very well. I loved the alliteration too, it really helps give it a sense of whimsy. The animals all sounded so cute and personable, just like how a child (or even an adult) can imagine them at play. Great job!
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This was adorable. The rhyme and meter were held to very well. I loved the alliteration too, it really helps give it a sense of whimsy. The animals all sounded so cute and personable, just like how a child (or even an adult) can imagine them at play. Great job!
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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R.B. thank you!
Comment from zanya
It's a delight to read children's poetry - to help take us away, at least temporarily from the stresses and strains of adult life , just to ponder on the antics of 'Babs the bunny' or 'Toto the tortoise'
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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It's a delight to read children's poetry - to help take us away, at least temporarily from the stresses and strains of adult life , just to ponder on the antics of 'Babs the bunny' or 'Toto the tortoise'
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Zanya, yes to let our minds dance in the forest with God's playful creatures could be good for our hearts to soften more often.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem fir children. It has a great flow and rhyme. Great photo choice to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This is a nicely written poem fir children. It has a great flow and rhyme. Great photo choice to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from WriterHeather
A very cute children's poem that kids will enjoy. I love the rhyming in it and the colorful characters that are having lots of fun. Bestvif luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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A very cute children's poem that kids will enjoy. I love the rhyming in it and the colorful characters that are having lots of fun. Bestvif luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you, Heather!
Comment from lindafisher
This is such a sweet little poem. This is the sort of poem that little children really enjoy. They can identify with these friendly little creatures. A perfect bedtime story to help them fall asleep
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This is such a sweet little poem. This is the sort of poem that little children really enjoy. They can identify with these friendly little creatures. A perfect bedtime story to help them fall asleep
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Linda, thanks much!
