Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

First off -- yeww! I liked the progression of your poem as you checked off other dairy delicacies, but finally got to the real issue. I guess you have drunk raw milk, but if not, I feel it is an acquired taste.

 Comment Written 21-May-2022

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reply by the author on 21-May-2022

Thanks, Bill :-). I has lots of fun writing this!

Comment from JoannaN

Excellent

This poem is funny and witty. The idea of a dairy fairy is a good, creative concept. I would be even nice to create a whole lore about a dairy fairy :)

 Comment Written 21-May-2022

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reply by the author on 21-May-2022

Now there's a fun thought! I'm really glad you liked it :-)

reply by JoannaN on 21-May-2022

It was a pleasure to read it :)

Comment from GARY MACLEAN

Excellent

Ewwwww, a little too graphic - lol. Great thought and original idea for sure but I find it difficult to wrap my "lips" around that "teat", lol. I found it a little difficult to work around the alternate spelling of yoghurt (yogurt) also. I'm just too familiar with supermarket fare.

Lots of yummy foods included here.

Good job

 Comment Written 20-May-2022

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reply by the author on 20-May-2022

Yeah, I was a bit salacious with this one, lol. I'm from the UK so I've only ever seen yoghurt spelled with an h. I didn't realise it was one of those words that's different elsewhere. I learn every day :-)

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Hmm? Please don't apologize; it would mean a pause in your primal sup of milky stew. I loved this piece--what a sensational entry. I wish you much success in the contest. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 19-May-2022

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reply by the author on 19-May-2022

Thanks for the great review, John :-). I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.

Comment from SimianSavant

Exceptional

You didn't go halfway with this daring and creative entry. A luscious and intimate foray into the fairy that leaves the reader udderly addicted.

One small suggestion: *sick* and *fix* do not quite rhyme, though all your other rhymes work quite nicely. If you were to keep one word, I think *fix* is the better one; here are some rhyme possibilities.

Thanks for a great read,

 Comment Written 19-May-2022

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reply by the author on 19-May-2022

Thanks so much HFP :-). I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! I'll have a look and see whether I can tweak things now I've had a night's sleep.

Comment from leather

Excellent

I love the illustration--it is so funny. I never considered a direct delivery of teat milk as a magic fix, but now I know there is at least one person who has. Unusual topic. I wish you the best.

 Comment Written 18-May-2022

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reply by the author on 19-May-2022

I bet someone, somewhere, has a fetish for this - thankfully not me lol.

Comment from Eunice Amero

Exceptional

This is cute and funny. I wasnt sure if l could write anything. Cows are great to have. You did a awesome job. I enjoy this. I think you will won. You did a good job. Good luck.

 Comment Written 18-May-2022

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reply by the author on 19-May-2022

Thank you so much! I had a lot of fun writing this cheeky entry and I'm thrilled you liked it :-)

reply by Eunice Amero on 19-May-2022

You are more hhan welcome.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This reminds me of the whole "Over the Moon" scene in Rent. I love your story/poem. Thank you for sharing this "dear dairy" entry. Best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 18-May-2022

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reply by the author on 19-May-2022

Thank you for the lovely response :-). I'm going to have to watch Rent now... So glad you enjoyed the read.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A great job with your humorous sonnet poem about the need for direct dairy access. But I was shocked by the "moo-juice from the sow" as I was thinking this was going to become a pro-nondairy solution. I don't know of any dairy products from the sow - only from sheep and goats. Fun poem and I hope you do well in the contest!

 Comment Written 18-May-2022

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reply by the author on 18-May-2022

Thank you so much :-). Yes, I think I may have dipped a little too far into the absurd there. Will have a think!

reply by lyenochka on 18-May-2022

It was for the humorous effect, so I understand. Apparently, sows are too difficult to milk. But even camels and horses have been milked for yogurt and cheeses...

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is the first time I have ever seen a humorous irreverent sonnet like this. I ws a bit shocked to start with, as I always image the form to be serious and romanic, and generally majestic. However your sonnet grew on me with time, and I came to appreciate it.

 Comment Written 18-May-2022

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reply by the author on 18-May-2022

Thank you, Katherine :-). I do love to subvert expectations!