Dear children of my children
What I really want to say to the ...14 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
W ( I will not use your name because of the rules) this is an absolutely wonderfully written piece of art! I created a contest and I only have one vote, dang should have thought that through! Exceptional work! Up to and exceeding your usual standard! Terry.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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W ( I will not use your name because of the rules) this is an absolutely wonderfully written piece of art! I created a contest and I only have one vote, dang should have thought that through! Exceptional work! Up to and exceeding your usual standard! Terry.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Many thanks Terry for your amazing review. As I pondered what to say for this excellent contest, I thought I would write something that they might like to see later on and keep (hopefully!). Your support is very encouraging.
Wendy
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Thank you again for the Exceptional rating and six highly valued stars. They, along with your kind words, are so very encouraging.
Comment from Eunice Amero
I agree, this is lovely. I love the poem up top. Kids sometimes don't realize the love we have for them. Children should stop and think they won't always have their parents and grand parents with them. This is lovely and thank you for sharing. Good luck.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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I agree, this is lovely. I love the poem up top. Kids sometimes don't realize the love we have for them. Children should stop and think they won't always have their parents and grand parents with them. This is lovely and thank you for sharing. Good luck.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you very much Eunice. I appreciate your very kind words and support a great deal.
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You are very welcome. I might be leaving fanstory.
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Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a grandparent's expression of love as well as words of wisdom to his or her grandchildren.
The work highlights a guiding quotation as well as other necessary accoutrements for successful living in life.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with good character building.
Excellent work. Bravo.
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reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a grandparent's expression of love as well as words of wisdom to his or her grandchildren.
The work highlights a guiding quotation as well as other necessary accoutrements for successful living in life.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with good character building.
Excellent work. Bravo.
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Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you Lloyd. I appreciate your thoughtful review and thought-provoking words.
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Remain Blessed.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Fleedleflump
What a beautiful piece this is. I love that you get the best of both world by using both poetry and prose, and then referring back to the verse with the context of what we've just read. Brilliantly, cleanly written throughout and filled with pride and affection.
One tiny (really tiny) note:
'It suggests being confident in your choices, and of being able to withstand peer pressure.' - the 'of' broke my flow here and can be removed without issue.
I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
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reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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What a beautiful piece this is. I love that you get the best of both world by using both poetry and prose, and then referring back to the verse with the context of what we've just read. Brilliantly, cleanly written throughout and filled with pride and affection.
One tiny (really tiny) note:
'It suggests being confident in your choices, and of being able to withstand peer pressure.' - the 'of' broke my flow here and can be removed without issue.
I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
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Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you very much Mike! I appreciate this great review, and also your suggestion. I changed it - you are right, it doesn't need to be there, and is better without it. Your words are very encouraging.
