The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Not Another Zachary Situation"Adventures around & upon a hill
8 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Leaves readers to wonder what horrors lay in store up ahead.
Good amount of suspense written into the storyline.
Returning to her proper station in life appears to be the main object in this tale.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Leaves readers to wonder what horrors lay in store up ahead.
Good amount of suspense written into the storyline.
Returning to her proper station in life appears to be the main object in this tale.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. Yes, Samuel/Madeline wants to get back to the 21st century. ***Spoiler*** Not yet
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter. The reader too wonders what happened to the boy, but the imagination of what horrors await are a lot.
The ending was his/her telling us the envisioned scheme for escape, not the escape itself, right?
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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A well written chapter. The reader too wonders what happened to the boy, but the imagination of what horrors await are a lot.
The ending was his/her telling us the envisioned scheme for escape, not the escape itself, right?
Comment Written 22-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. ***Spoiler*** no escape yet
Comment from Beck Fenton
I'm impressed at your telling your story like this.
I was left confused by the Hours... Is it truly every 3 hours night and day? No wonder many in a religious order are cranky to say the least!
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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I'm impressed at your telling your story like this.
I was left confused by the Hours... Is it truly every 3 hours night and day? No wonder many in a religious order are cranky to say the least!
Comment Written 22-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Thank you for your review. Yes, that was the case & still may be for monks. I forgot, or blocked out that I had a Justin experience that turned out to be a Zachary scenerio. I was very traumatized, which is why I included it in my story.
Comment from aryr
What a fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. Madeline as Brother Samuel is truly upset after confronting Brother Justin for fear that he will become another Brother Zachary. She/he will definitely find a way back to her time, to Cordelia. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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What a fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. Madeline as Brother Samuel is truly upset after confronting Brother Justin for fear that he will become another Brother Zachary. She/he will definitely find a way back to her time, to Cordelia. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you for your ever supportive review. I forgot, or blocked out that I had a Justin experience that turned out to be a Zachary senerio. I was very traumatized, which is why I included it in my story.
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You are most welcome, Liz. Regardless you do write great stories.
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This has been very therapeutic for me as I get more insight into my own experiences in a modern day convent which was still under a monastic rule. It's interesting to look back at my early days in the convent through a story teller lense. I've still gotten sad and angry, but it has not hit me as so real.
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That's amazing, Liz.
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***hugs***
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a well-written, but sad chapter, Liz. I feel Madeline's hurt and sorrow. I'm hoping she will be returning to the 21st century soon, and all will be well.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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This is a well-written, but sad chapter, Liz. I feel Madeline's hurt and sorrow. I'm hoping she will be returning to the 21st century soon, and all will be well.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm afraid she'll have to wait for things to get better.
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You're welcome, Liz. I'm sad to here there is more of this torture.;(
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"hugs"
Comment from lyenochka
Oooh! Does this mean that by going out the back door, she might be back to herself in the 21st century? I didn't understand why going out the back would result in the statement "I've never checked out front." I'm directionally impaired so I'm stuck between the back and front.
I liked the suspense you put in this and how the worry about Justin has finally moved Madeline to take action.
Minor punctuation suggestion:
"Please brother have the charity to pray for me." (Please, brother,)
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Oooh! Does this mean that by going out the back door, she might be back to herself in the 21st century? I didn't understand why going out the back would result in the statement "I've never checked out front." I'm directionally impaired so I'm stuck between the back and front.
I liked the suspense you put in this and how the worry about Justin has finally moved Madeline to take action.
Minor punctuation suggestion:
"Please brother have the charity to pray for me." (Please, brother,)
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you for your ever faithful review.The back is the way they went out to work, it's how Madeline followed her friend to the pottery shop. The front is where the offices are. She's been too afraid to go out front. She's not even allowed anywhere outside of their designated working area. She wants to sneak around to the front. That is where they were standing waiting for the shuttle to take them to the Tor. You've given me some good ideas to put in the next chapter I will explain it as I have here.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The rules seem meant to make someone feel alone, unwanted, and in constant fear of a mistake. I hope her attempt at escape works as she doesn't seem able to be Brother Samuel any more.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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The rules seem meant to make someone feel alone, unwanted, and in constant fear of a mistake. I hope her attempt at escape works as she doesn't seem able to be Brother Samuel any more.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. She does seem to be reaching her limit.
Comment from jessizero
This was an upsetting installment of this story. I am left once again wondering what will happen next. Thank you for continuing to tell this story. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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This was an upsetting installment of this story. I am left once again wondering what will happen next. Thank you for continuing to tell this story. Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. Sadly, a lot of this story is upsetting, but ***Spoiler***
it eventually... gets better.
