Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Symphony of raindrops"Musings of an old man - 2022
30 total reviews
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was a nice poem about the rain. It can come with it's own music that's nice to take in when it's there. I'll just have to think of it more often. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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This was a nice poem about the rain. It can come with it's own music that's nice to take in when it's there. I'll just have to think of it more often. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
This nonet is excellent in every respect--skillfully composed, appealing, and very creative--using a series of musical terms to describe the "music" of the falling rain.
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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This nonet is excellent in every respect--skillfully composed, appealing, and very creative--using a series of musical terms to describe the "music" of the falling rain.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Janice, thanks so much!
Comment from Bridge
A lovely poem. Very beautifully captured. Very creative and very well written. The artwork suits the poem very well. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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A lovely poem. Very beautifully captured. Very creative and very well written. The artwork suits the poem very well. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Bridge, thank youfor the review and good wishes.
Comment from June Sargent
I enjoyed this nonet that highlights the beauty and rhythm of the falling rain. Nature sets the pitch and the pace - we just need to follow. At the end of it - we'll see that rainbow. Perfect piece for spring, a time of rebirth and renewal.
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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I enjoyed this nonet that highlights the beauty and rhythm of the falling rain. Nature sets the pitch and the pace - we just need to follow. At the end of it - we'll see that rainbow. Perfect piece for spring, a time of rebirth and renewal.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you June for your great comments.
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed the strong imagery of music throughout this one with the final culmination of do - re - mi, unexpected, but just right. Best wishes for your clever and original entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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I enjoyed the strong imagery of music throughout this one with the final culmination of do - re - mi, unexpected, but just right. Best wishes for your clever and original entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Wendy, thank you so kindly!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Jim.
-You wrote a good nonet with a good topic, and shape.
-Very good use of sound imagery like "pitter-pattering"
and "drip by drip."
-Effective musical imagery, too, and a good ending
with the song lyrics!
-You put a lot into this, and I enjoyed it.
-One thing to look at is line one; you have 9 syllables.
One suggestion is
Pitter-pattering rain adds/makes/sets rhythm
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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-Nice image and presentation, Jim.
-You wrote a good nonet with a good topic, and shape.
-Very good use of sound imagery like "pitter-pattering"
and "drip by drip."
-Effective musical imagery, too, and a good ending
with the song lyrics!
-You put a lot into this, and I enjoyed it.
-One thing to look at is line one; you have 9 syllables.
One suggestion is
Pitter-pattering rain adds/makes/sets rhythm
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thanks for the input, Pam. I always value your thoughts.
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You are welcome.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Symphony of raindrops', is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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'Symphony of raindrops', is an exceptionally well-written and heart-warming piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you very much!
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You're very welcome.
the Duchess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A perfectly formed nonet full of the melody of raindrops and I do find the pitter patter soothing at night when I am cosy in my bed sleeping. I enjoyed the ride here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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A perfectly formed nonet full of the melody of raindrops and I do find the pitter patter soothing at night when I am cosy in my bed sleeping. I enjoyed the ride here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Yes, I agree with you that rain can be so soothing. Thank you, al always!
Comment from Whitewave
JLR,
This is very clever. Your words match the picture, to the last drop. There is definitely music and rhythm in the rain. The multitude of sound vibrations brings healing to the earth and listening ear.
(Just wondering about the syllable count in line 1 - I think there are 10.
It doesn't spoil anything for me but might matter for the contest? Changing the word 'creates' to 'beats' or dropping the 'ing' off pattering might help? All up to you. I like it anyway.)
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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JLR,
This is very clever. Your words match the picture, to the last drop. There is definitely music and rhythm in the rain. The multitude of sound vibrations brings healing to the earth and listening ear.
(Just wondering about the syllable count in line 1 - I think there are 10.
It doesn't spoil anything for me but might matter for the contest? Changing the word 'creates' to 'beats' or dropping the 'ing' off pattering might help? All up to you. I like it anyway.)
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Whitewave hum, I must be missing something. I used the site: how many syllables to recheck ...
pitter - 2
pattering - 3
rain - 1
creates - 2
rhythm -1
9 total thanks for your serious concern - I so value input....
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Rhythm = rhy / thm = 2
This has to be 2 syllables but no worries.
Good luck.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Oh, I like this poem! I like the metaphor of water being music and the ponds collecting tones. Most inventive. Good job on this, JLR! And best of luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Oh, I like this poem! I like the metaphor of water being music and the ponds collecting tones. Most inventive. Good job on this, JLR! And best of luck on the contest!
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you so much!
