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The Tor

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Adventures around & upon a hill

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Comment from lancellot
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Well, I didn't think get home and her real body back wouldn't be so simple either. It doesn't really seem she/he is all that desperate to escape. Given the extreme treatment this is both odd but not. People do remain in abusive situations for many reasons.

 Comment Written 28-May-2022


reply by the author on 28-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. You are so right I, and about 5 others nun-mates/friends stayed throughtheworst of it. We lived under the monastic rules from 1965-1968. Thenthing slowly became more relaxed. I think of my friend who dies at 102+ who probably lived like that since she was about 17. Do the math to figure how many years she lived in that rigidity, which answers why 'nuns' were so mean.
Comment from tfawcus
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You have a lean writing style with short, punchy sentences, and your sparse use of imagery adds to its impact. I get a good idea of the devastating hardships of living in the Middle Ages. Although I haven't read previous chapters, I found it easy to empathise with your hero/heroine. An enjoyable reading experience.

 Comment Written 28-May-2022


reply by the author on 28-May-2022
    Thank you for your interested review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from aryr
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What an absolutely great continuation chapter for the book of The Tor, Liz. Poor Madeline/ Brother Samuel is even more confused that she/he was before. Things are definitely not working out as she/he planned. Abraham is a councilor of sorts while Brother Harold is charged with copying books. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.

 Comment Written 26-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    Thank you for your ever supportive review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
reply by aryr on 27-May-2022
    You do come up with mega surprises, don't you! You are so very welcome, Liz.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
    You do my heart good
reply by aryr on 29-May-2022
    Big smile!!! 😊💝
Comment from Judy Lawless
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I found I had to re-read some parts of this, Liz, to find the hidden meanings in some of what is told. I think that might be a good thing. It causes more engagement. I'm sorry Madeleine hasn't made it back to the 21st Century. She must be getting tired of living as Samuel in the 15th. Well done.

 Comment Written 26-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it & it is drawing you in.
reply by Judy Lawless on 26-May-2022
    You?re most welcome, Liz. I?m always wondering where this story will end up. :)
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
    Glad it's got a hold of you...that's the goal...lol
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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The description in this chapter is excellent and imaginative, making it well-worth a five star rating. I enjoyed my read very much, but I do hope you manage to escape back into the 21st century. Kate xx

 Comment Written 26-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it & it is drawing you in.
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh, poor Madeline! I was hoping she could have escaped and even with time alone with Abraham, she can share all that she wants to share. I liked your reference to the Name of the Rose. My favorite part is the description of the scenery like "blood-tinged sunset" and the stark contrast between the 21st century road which is sparkling water to show us the different geological changes.
As for fiddlehead ferns - they contain carcinogens so I hope they don't eat much of that.

Question:
rhubarb swiss chard. (Is this a kind of swiss chard? I was tempted to read it as rhubarb and swiss chard, but I don't like rhubarb! Lol.)

 Comment Written 26-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. Its stalks are the color of the stalks of rhubarb. Too many fiddleheads could be another way to kill everyone off. bwaaa
reply by lyenochka on 26-May-2022
    It's a favorite in Korean cuisine but I won't eat them now after learning the people who process the fiddleheads commercially got cancer. I guess in small amounts it's okay. It's not a staple for sure!
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    I have harvested fiddleheads from my back yard. They take an eternity to clean this thin tan paper off them. I studied how to identify them on you tube. They warned dome dusty looking ones are deadlyu. So people have to know which are safe. I just decided after 3 years of frustration...I really don't like the taste of them. So now I don';t have to spend my time trying to clean them.
reply by lyenochka on 26-May-2022
    There are other more tasty and more nutritious free food out there! I don't like the taste either. Lol.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
    I was curious about broadleaf plantain. It grows all over my driveway. When we were kids, we liked scraping the seed stalks & shooting them at each other
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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What a hopeless feeling Samuel must have when going out the front does not end in the twenty-first century. Madeline's life in this distant in time century is far from pleasant. You seem to be a little comma happy in this one . . . kale (no comma) I can't reveal . . . This sentence is awkward and needs to be broken up. . . . practice (no comma) Eckhart . . .

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I've come to realize our lives get better every new lifetime. We may have some aspect left over, but now matter what, things have gotten better. What a horrible time for people, the medieval times.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Liz your book A Storm is Brewing,
this chapter is so intriguing and, I find well written
I will If I can will continue reading.
Its amazing of how you take us back forth from the 21st century back to the 15th century.
Gert



 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Thank you for your positive, involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it. It will always be there with no need to review, just enjoy.
Comment from jessizero
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Thank you for sharing yet another installment in this story. I am finding myself looking forward to reading more. Best wishes to you, and please keep up the good work!

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Thank you for your positive review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.