Grandma Knows Best
Ronsardian Ode15 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
I'm not sure how you combined the two, but the results are lovely and uniquely yours. I agree, two slices are better than one. I am the grandma, (Grammy) now! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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I'm not sure how you combined the two, but the results are lovely and uniquely yours. I agree, two slices are better than one. I am the grandma, (Grammy) now! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Sal :) Glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra xx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Cute little poem and indeed Grandma knows what is the best for you:"The cup and saucer rattle in my hands
as Grandma pours
the steaming tea. She says she understands,
but then ignores
my small request for milk and sugar too,
just tells me that; "Such stuff's no good for you."
Then with a grin,
"But cake's not sin!"
- She hands me not one slice, but two!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Cute little poem and indeed Grandma knows what is the best for you:"The cup and saucer rattle in my hands
as Grandma pours
the steaming tea. She says she understands,
but then ignores
my small request for milk and sugar too,
just tells me that; "Such stuff's no good for you."
Then with a grin,
"But cake's not sin!"
- She hands me not one slice, but two!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from karenina
Clever merge!
Just a short time ago I attended a class/lecture on the Ode.
The professor enthusiastically introduced the Keatsian Ode-- one facet of which was (you guessed it)--a fixed rhyme scheme!
Wish I'd known of this type! I would have asked for clarification!
That aside, you've written true to this rhyme scheme, in subtle praise of your grandmom...and the change in syllabic line counts give the Ronsardian ode a charming feel!
(Of course! Grandmas--Always "know best!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Clever merge!
Just a short time ago I attended a class/lecture on the Ode.
The professor enthusiastically introduced the Keatsian Ode-- one facet of which was (you guessed it)--a fixed rhyme scheme!
Wish I'd known of this type! I would have asked for clarification!
That aside, you've written true to this rhyme scheme, in subtle praise of your grandmom...and the change in syllabic line counts give the Ronsardian ode a charming feel!
(Of course! Grandmas--Always "know best!)
Karenina
Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Karenina :)
Thank you so much for your feedback and for enlightening me about the Keatsian Ode :) The info I included on the authors note was lifted straight from the club event page - I should've done my reaearch!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
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Yes...after I'd reviewed my third, I suddenly realized that bit of info was part of the contest event description. If I hadn't just recently been engaging with a library seminar on "Odes" I'd have not had a clue! Byany rhyme scheme I loved your ode!--Karenina
Comment from lyenochka
Hahaha! That's funny. Perhaps in older age our contradictory behavior becomes even more obvious than earlier. Yes, no sugar in the tea but double the cake servings? Enjoyed the poem in which you met two club challenges at once!
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hahaha! That's funny. Perhaps in older age our contradictory behavior becomes even more obvious than earlier. Yes, no sugar in the tea but double the cake servings? Enjoyed the poem in which you met two club challenges at once!
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Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Helen :) Thank you for your feedback!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Bridge
A lovely poem written in a very interesting form. The artwork really suits your poem. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.............
With regards
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A lovely poem written in a very interesting form. The artwork really suits your poem. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.............
With regards
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Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Bridge, for your kind feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
