Square Peg, Round Hole.
A young boy hangs himself from a tree6 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I find it difficult to relate to the pain one must endure if they are "tainted" with a taste for the same sex. I am certain it is severe and can lead to scenarios such as you have painted here.
One suggestion:
9th stanza, last sentence: "Not" should be "No"
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I find it difficult to relate to the pain one must endure if they are "tainted" with a taste for the same sex. I am certain it is severe and can lead to scenarios such as you have painted here.
One suggestion:
9th stanza, last sentence: "Not" should be "No"
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
Comment from Pantygynt
The word 'gay' was chosen as a mnemonic using the initials of the phrase Good As You and has nothing to do with the state of happiness normally associated with that word. in so many cases it seems to be such an inappropriate word as so man gays are deeply unhappy, like the subject of this poem who takes his own life.
It is nevertheless a fine response to the challenge.
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The word 'gay' was chosen as a mnemonic using the initials of the phrase Good As You and has nothing to do with the state of happiness normally associated with that word. in so many cases it seems to be such an inappropriate word as so man gays are deeply unhappy, like the subject of this poem who takes his own life.
It is nevertheless a fine response to the challenge.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is an excellent poem about a very sad situation. The poem has a very nice flow. The rhymes are good. The economy of words is very effective. The pathos is controlled but still gives an important feeling. The message is regrettable. Excellent work. Terry.
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This is an excellent poem about a very sad situation. The poem has a very nice flow. The rhymes are good. The economy of words is very effective. The pathos is controlled but still gives an important feeling. The message is regrettable. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Fleedleflump
I've been close in the past, but I hate to think of anyone getting to that point where there seems no way out. I think we sometimes expect things to be far worse than they turn out to be - that's what stress does to our brains. We have to hold onto that thought - see how things turn out before we decide they're unbearable.
Beautifully written.
Mike
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I've been close in the past, but I hate to think of anyone getting to that point where there seems no way out. I think we sometimes expect things to be far worse than they turn out to be - that's what stress does to our brains. We have to hold onto that thought - see how things turn out before we decide they're unbearable.
Beautifully written.
Mike
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from lancellot
There are a lot on emotions within this poem. A lot of metaphors and references to things going on right now and how some may feel about them or feel while living through them. I'm sure some parts will relate to everyone.
Good luck in the contest.
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There are a lot on emotions within this poem. A lot of metaphors and references to things going on right now and how some may feel about them or feel while living through them. I'm sure some parts will relate to everyone.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done a great job with the writing prompt. I can feel the emotion in every word that you wrote. I imagine some gay people do feel exactly as you describe in your poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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You have done a great job with the writing prompt. I can feel the emotion in every word that you wrote. I imagine some gay people do feel exactly as you describe in your poem. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
