Surviving the Scorch
I don't always enjoy Summer!12 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love all the S words you've used in Surviving the scorch. I would much rather put up with the heat than this unusually, for our tropical clmate, cold weather . Enjoyed your presentation, mike. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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I love all the S words you've used in Surviving the scorch. I would much rather put up with the heat than this unusually, for our tropical clmate, cold weather . Enjoyed your presentation, mike. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks Valda :-). I'm almost always too hot so the hot weather inevitably makes me uncomfortable! I should probably move to Iceland or Greenland, lol.
Mike
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi Fleedleflump, wow, this is
a masterpiece of a seasonal
alliteration poem. All the
stanzas are superbly penned.
You write extremely well.
May you continue writing for
a long time to come. ~
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Hi Fleedleflump, wow, this is
a masterpiece of a seasonal
alliteration poem. All the
stanzas are superbly penned.
You write extremely well.
May you continue writing for
a long time to come. ~
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Regina :-). What a wonderful, encouraging review! I'm so glad you liked it.
Mike
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
Wowy zowy! Alliteration ambling across the abyss of awareness, all in sonnet form!! You have the poet's touch. Slowly getting to know your work. Looking forward.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Wowy zowy! Alliteration ambling across the abyss of awareness, all in sonnet form!! You have the poet's touch. Slowly getting to know your work. Looking forward.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Aw, thanks, Richard :-). I think I was in the mood for showing off with this one - some probably found it a little impenetrable!
Mike
Comment from strandregs
Mike my man
You certainly had alliteratingly fun beaming up sss's from
Your never ending pit of ssss.
Sussurus?
Siggilis?
I'll look those up later.
Reading the poem , for me
Is like trying to get all the almost invisible bones out of a sneaky fish
Reminds me of the days I did reserve duty
In the Syni desert.
Or holiday in Eilat walking out the hotel
door into a 40 c oven.
It was just slightly breezier in the Golan heights but only in the shade.
Thank for reminding me of those horrors.:-))Z.
In a good way.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Mike my man
You certainly had alliteratingly fun beaming up sss's from
Your never ending pit of ssss.
Sussurus?
Siggilis?
I'll look those up later.
Reading the poem , for me
Is like trying to get all the almost invisible bones out of a sneaky fish
Reminds me of the days I did reserve duty
In the Syni desert.
Or holiday in Eilat walking out the hotel
door into a 40 c oven.
It was just slightly breezier in the Golan heights but only in the shade.
Thank for reminding me of those horrors.:-))Z.
In a good way.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks for the awesome review - I can see your mind works always in semi-poet mode :-)
Mike
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
The vocabulary of this poem is something to experience. It makes my old English teacher's heart wonder what you would have been as a student. Sometimes saying something simply is also elegant and appealing to many readers. (Think Langston Hughes) I enjoyed the alliterative phrasing sprinkled throughout the poem. I too find the extreme seasons, summer and winter, a bit much. Be glad you aren't in the southern portion of the USA. You would be melting from the sweltering sunrays as you dodge scorching bullets from AR-15's as you try to complete the mundane tasks of living. The graphic and choice of font color and background add to your piece.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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The vocabulary of this poem is something to experience. It makes my old English teacher's heart wonder what you would have been as a student. Sometimes saying something simply is also elegant and appealing to many readers. (Think Langston Hughes) I enjoyed the alliterative phrasing sprinkled throughout the poem. I too find the extreme seasons, summer and winter, a bit much. Be glad you aren't in the southern portion of the USA. You would be melting from the sweltering sunrays as you dodge scorching bullets from AR-15's as you try to complete the mundane tasks of living. The graphic and choice of font color and background add to your piece.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much :-). This was definitely one of my indulgent writes, letting the poet be pretentious and have fun with words. Doing my A-levels at school, I had 2 very different teachers. One was freshly qualified and made the mistake of teaching her favourite texts in Literature classes. As a result, when I disagreed with her preconceived interpretations, she gave me low grades and said I didn't understand the text. The other teacher, a little older, encouraged us to look for different meanings. If we came up with something he hadn't seen before (and backed it up properly), he'd write 'piglet idea!' in the margin. In his classes, piglet ideas became like badges of honour :-).
I am glad that, here in London, the hail is made of ice rather than bullets. I just wish it was less humid!
Mike
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I was much like the latter teacher. My classes were free-spirited. I often taught barefoot, and my kids laid on the floor, under tables, wherever they liked. I didn't care as long as they learned. Extra credit was to paint, draw , illustrate in some manner what they had written. Music of every genre was played as we worked. we changed the genre every 5 minutes. They were encouraged to bring music to class. I taught 6th, 8th , 11th and 12 grade English over 28 years.
You are an excellent writer. Hope you are also receptive to criticism. Several on this site are not. One person sent me a message to not read her work. Another man stated I was hostile. Jeez! doesn't anyone want to grow. Shucks, I am a life-long learner.
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That sounds like a great learning environment :-). And yes - I'm happy for the editing assist when people catch errors or suggest alterations. It's only when I get 1 star reviews with 'this needs work' that I get annoyed!
I see posts pop up now with 'pardon my grammar' at the bottom, which sounds like a passive-aggressive way to say they don't want to hear about how bad their writing is!
Mike
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My kids loved me, and I loved them. Once a Ludwig kid; always a Ludwig kid. My kids in my first class are my FB friends. They are 40.
Comment from karenina
Alliterative ssssssplendor here! We pine for summer and lay resplendent 'neath the blazing rays... Until dusk hastens us along and we clamor for aloe to soothe the blistered souvenirs! Clever write...
We need to be careful what we wish for!
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Alliterative ssssssplendor here! We pine for summer and lay resplendent 'neath the blazing rays... Until dusk hastens us along and we clamor for aloe to soothe the blistered souvenirs! Clever write...
We need to be careful what we wish for!
Karenina
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you :-). I've always suffered on summer days because I'm rarely cold. I know loads of other people the same, and yet they're programmed to say it's 'lovely weather' lol. For me, a sunny winter day with crisp air, visible breath and that chilly white clarity it brings is beautiful.
Mike
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I'm with you. I'd enjoy a stroll seaside in September over dog days of August anytime!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Give me mid-fall--when the leaves are changing colors and I need my flannel shirt! This is a truly excellent sonnet--expressive of the misery summer brings, skillfully written with vivid details, creative rhyming, and effective use of alliteration.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Give me mid-fall--when the leaves are changing colors and I need my flannel shirt! This is a truly excellent sonnet--expressive of the misery summer brings, skillfully written with vivid details, creative rhyming, and effective use of alliteration.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Janice :-). I always think I can do something about cold - put on another layer or turn up the heating. But when it's hot, I can't walk round the shopping centre with my bits out so I just have to lump it lol
Mike
Comment from royowen
I'm not sure where you live Mike, but we can have some blistering weather here, but we've had a very mild summer the last couple. This is a great sonnet, and it earmarks your ability with the pen, to write passionately about this them takes some doing, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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I'm not sure where you live Mike, but we can have some blistering weather here, but we've had a very mild summer the last couple. This is a great sonnet, and it earmarks your ability with the pen, to write passionately about this them takes some doing, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Roy :-). I like in London, UK. The actual heat usually tops at 35ish degrees Celsius in mid summer, but the humidity is rarely below 75%, and is often in the 90s, so you can break into a sweat blinking.
Mike
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I understand, I?ve been there when it?s hot, the accomodation there is built for the cold, here it?s the other way around. I went to Lords when it was about 90, the next day I was at Brighton, it was 55, heh heh.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem sums up what many believe about summer, Mike.
Your words are carefully chosen, the alliteration and assonance
works well, the image and color scheme are perfect, and your
message is clear. It's been so hot here with 100*+ in early
April. We have 105-108* predicted for the early part of next
week. It will be mid-November before it cools down.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Your poem sums up what many believe about summer, Mike.
Your words are carefully chosen, the alliteration and assonance
works well, the image and color scheme are perfect, and your
message is clear. It's been so hot here with 100*+ in early
April. We have 105-108* predicted for the early part of next
week. It will be mid-November before it cools down.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Jan :-). It's the humidity that's draining here in the UK - usually around 90% - so I spend the whole of summer wet!
Mike
Comment from John Ciarmello
Your choice of words sizzled off my tongue, Mike. I loved the way this read and conjured the heat from the depths of one's mind to their skin's surface. Your use of vocabulary to provoke sensation astounds me. There is only one other poet that can do that, and he is, besides you, a favorite.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Your choice of words sizzled off my tongue, Mike. I loved the way this read and conjured the heat from the depths of one's mind to their skin's surface. Your use of vocabulary to provoke sensation astounds me. There is only one other poet that can do that, and he is, besides you, a favorite.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, John - what an awesome compliment :-).
Mike
