Tucker: Double Crossed (Part-4)
The good guys made to look bad.33 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
A virtual six! Sorry the others went fast. This is amazing! Now I've got all the details how I can get away with murder, I have to pop down to the supermarket and pick up the ingredients!!!
You cannot let Tucker get his name all smirched up, not by that rogue!!! And I hope you've been watching 007 and James Bond so you have some hidden tools in Tammy's and TD's teeth or something?
This is fabulous writing, Ric, you certainly brought this chapter together superbly, there was so much going on, and the ending was shocking! You have a lot to sort out for the next chapter! Exceptional chapter, my friend! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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A virtual six! Sorry the others went fast. This is amazing! Now I've got all the details how I can get away with murder, I have to pop down to the supermarket and pick up the ingredients!!!
You cannot let Tucker get his name all smirched up, not by that rogue!!! And I hope you've been watching 007 and James Bond so you have some hidden tools in Tammy's and TD's teeth or something?
This is fabulous writing, Ric, you certainly brought this chapter together superbly, there was so much going on, and the ending was shocking! You have a lot to sort out for the next chapter! Exceptional chapter, my friend! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 07-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your kind words and generous review. Yes, you are so right. Since I don't use an outline or plot and just start writing, letting the action and the characters take the story wherever it will, I've painted myself into a corner. But hopefully, I'll figure it all out. LOL. I always appreciate YOU, and your kindness and encouragement!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Ric,
After a long time, but SUPERB in all respects!
This piece of Fiction has impressive phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
The characters, scenes, and situations are described in a very charming way.
INTERESTING Indeed!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Hello Ric,
After a long time, but SUPERB in all respects!
This piece of Fiction has impressive phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
The characters, scenes, and situations are described in a very charming way.
INTERESTING Indeed!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Hello, RP,
I've missed not seeing you around lately, but be assured, you haven't been out of mind. Thank you so much for the extra-special six-star review, kind words, and encouragement. But most of all, It's great to get your message and know you are okay! Now, my quest for acceptance with this post is complete. Thanks a million.
Wishing you the best, my friend,
Ric
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Hi Dear Ric,
What a pleasant reply!
Keep writing!! Henceforth, you will always find me near you.
Take care. With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from LJbutterfly
I couldn't read fast enough. There are so many twists, turns, surprises, and action scenes I'm exhausted. This story demonstrates your attention to detail, clear descriptive explanations, and your very vivid imagination. Now, your characters have to get out of the mess you put them in. Good luck. I'll be waiting.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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I couldn't read fast enough. There are so many twists, turns, surprises, and action scenes I'm exhausted. This story demonstrates your attention to detail, clear descriptive explanations, and your very vivid imagination. Now, your characters have to get out of the mess you put them in. Good luck. I'll be waiting.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Lorraine, for your extra-special six-star review and kind words. As a crazy who doesn't outline or have a plot to start my stories, I just start writing and let the action and my character take us where they will. But this time, I've painted my characters into a corner I don't know how to get out of. LOL. I'll just start writing again and see what happens. I appreciate YOU, and your encouragement!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, scary info about how to make a body disappear without a trace, and it looks like Tucker played a bad hand. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Wow, scary info about how to make a body disappear without a trace, and it looks like Tucker played a bad hand. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Iza, for your generous review, kind words, and for taking time to read a chapter of my foolishness. Much appreciated!
Comment from Sugarray77
Wow, what great writing. I was mesmerized at the intensity and tension you kept going throughout this piece. Skillfully handled and a great, imaginative plot. Well done!
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Wow, what great writing. I was mesmerized at the intensity and tension you kept going throughout this piece. Skillfully handled and a great, imaginative plot. Well done!
Melissa
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Melissa, for your extra-special six-star review and kind words. I'm just a silly old boy who tries to keep life exciting from his La-Z-Boy. LOL. I appreciate your time and encouragement! Ric
Comment from karenina
Oh, but you've outdone yourself with this installment, sir!
The thing about letting your characters take you where they may is that NOW you have quite a lot of mental gymnastics to do to untie the knots here!
Your writing is unassuming, down to earth yet bigger than life.
I love being swept up in the Hijinx. Your knowledge about all things guns and (yew) acids and such is counter-balanced by your pithy dialogue and great "eye" of the scene playing out!
I'm a little bit addicted. DO you hold meetings for readers like me? TO help us get through to the next post?
I'm a fan. You KNOW that! Now get busy and save Tucker's reputation!
(smile)
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Oh, but you've outdone yourself with this installment, sir!
The thing about letting your characters take you where they may is that NOW you have quite a lot of mental gymnastics to do to untie the knots here!
Your writing is unassuming, down to earth yet bigger than life.
I love being swept up in the Hijinx. Your knowledge about all things guns and (yew) acids and such is counter-balanced by your pithy dialogue and great "eye" of the scene playing out!
I'm a little bit addicted. DO you hold meetings for readers like me? TO help us get through to the next post?
I'm a fan. You KNOW that! Now get busy and save Tucker's reputation!
(smile)
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Karenina, for your extra-special six-star review and kind words. I'm not sure anyone could learn anything from me in the writing department that would be beneficial, and especially, not a talented poet like you. But it's nice to be buttered up with kindness and encouragement that keeps an old hack scratching. LOL. I appreciate YOU! Bunches!
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Hah! I speak the truth! No buttering up necessary!
Comment from Sally Law
Wow, this had it all except a happy ending. Hopefully the whole dirty lot of them will come tumbling down. I hope the same for everyone corrupting our nation, bringing us to an all-time low. One can hope. Exceptional writing, my friend. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Wow, this had it all except a happy ending. Hopefully the whole dirty lot of them will come tumbling down. I hope the same for everyone corrupting our nation, bringing us to an all-time low. One can hope. Exceptional writing, my friend. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Sal, for all your encouragement and kind words, and of course, for the extra-special stars. I would have given up writing a long time ago if it hadn't been for reviews like yours that offer an old boy hope and motivation to keep digging in the dirt. I appreciate YOU, today and always! Ric.
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You are most welcome! I hate to near that one so talented almost gave up. I'm glad to be a part, albeit small, of your success story. Blessings to you always,
Sal :))
Comment from Judy Lawless
Wow, Ric. This is a heart-stopping tale you're telling here. Great imagery as usual, carries it on speedily. The story deserves six stars, but, I found a few things that require some editing. I hope you find them helpful.
"A security service whose main duties are to contain and arrest." - this is an incomplete sentence and I'm not certain if it belongs to the previous sentence or the next one. :)
"...organization in North and South American(America), and Mexico."
"...the biggest criminal in Northern American(America),"
"Farnsworth (was) hoisted upon the throne, ..."
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Wow, Ric. This is a heart-stopping tale you're telling here. Great imagery as usual, carries it on speedily. The story deserves six stars, but, I found a few things that require some editing. I hope you find them helpful.
"A security service whose main duties are to contain and arrest." - this is an incomplete sentence and I'm not certain if it belongs to the previous sentence or the next one. :)
"...organization in North and South American(America), and Mexico."
"...the biggest criminal in Northern American(America),"
"Farnsworth (was) hoisted upon the throne, ..."
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Judy, for you generous review, kind words, and suggestions. They are always greatly appreciated. The security service sentence is intentional, and it belongs in between the other two sentences. I have already changed American to America, but obviously not before you caught it. LOL. And, in the way I worded the "Farnsworth hoisted upon the throne," it was so that I didn't have to use "was". Thanks for reading.
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You're welcome, Ric. Thanks for your explanations. I thought maybe someone else might have already pointed out the America errors. As for the others, the wording just made it difficult to understand for me, as often incomplete sentences do. :)
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Yes, Judy, Helen had pointed out the foolish American for America mistakes. But it doesn't make me appreciate you taking the time to point them out any less. :-)
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Thanks, Ric. :)
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After much thought, and in consideration for all the time you spend trying to keep me straight. I've gone back and changed that sentence that was hard for you to read. "The FBI is a domestic law enforcement agency and security service whose main duties are to contain and arrest." It was a simple fix, by just removing the "A" and adding "And." And although, I still like it better as a fragment, you have me making a conscious effort of considering readers preferences over my own, which is how it should be. LOL. Thanks.
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Oh, I appreciate it, Ric, but it wasn't necessary. I'm only one reader. :) Bless you.
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Everything in life starts with one, my dear. :-)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good action, plot development, though a bit rich with cliche's.
The first paragraph semicolon should probably be a dash as used in the 2nd paragraph.
exhaled deeply, and - comma not needed
Short-circuited brain signals unable to differentiate between a rhythmless Hustle and be-bopping Macarena. - needs a verb
an 8x8 vertical column. - 'vertical' is redundant. 8 inch or feet?
A deceptive and ruthless thief; now, admired as a hero. - generally, a semicolon requires a complete sentence on both sides.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Good action, plot development, though a bit rich with cliche's.
The first paragraph semicolon should probably be a dash as used in the 2nd paragraph.
exhaled deeply, and - comma not needed
Short-circuited brain signals unable to differentiate between a rhythmless Hustle and be-bopping Macarena. - needs a verb
an 8x8 vertical column. - 'vertical' is redundant. 8 inch or feet?
A deceptive and ruthless thief; now, admired as a hero. - generally, a semicolon requires a complete sentence on both sides.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Wayne, for you generous review, kind words, and suggestions. This story is meant as more of a farce than serious, as is most everything I write with silly, simile and cliché-laden exaggerations. Plus, you'll find that I use a lot of fragments, many times intentionally. I assumed that 8x8 in a pole barn would be understood to mean inches, but from now on, I'll stop assuming. The vertical was added for those who might not know the difference between say columns and ceiling joist directions. But again, fine points that are greatly appreciated. Thanks again for taking time to read my foolishness.
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lol
Might need a few 'more' cliches, then!
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Believe me, Wayne, I had a bunch more in the beginning. LOL. Much appreciated!
Comment from jenintorre
Wow! What amazing and fast paced writing. You are very clever. You have a great knowledge of acids. I sure wouldn't
Want to get on the wrong side of you.
Thanks for a brilliant read. All the best. Jen. X
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Wow! What amazing and fast paced writing. You are very clever. You have a great knowledge of acids. I sure wouldn't
Want to get on the wrong side of you.
Thanks for a brilliant read. All the best. Jen. X
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Jen, for your extra-special six-star review and kind words. Just a silly old boy who tries to keep a little excitement in life from his La-Z-Boy when he'd rather be carousing and whooping it up like the days of old. LOL. Hope all is well in your world. I appreciate YOU!
