Black and Blue
Reflections on inspiration47 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very good artwork, poem, and formatting.
-You do a good job of showing both sides of what the mirror reflects.
-I like the contrast of ink in the first verse, and the footprints of joy vs.
black ink stamping its rage.
-The theme of beauty in the rest of the poem is very good, especially
"romantic dreams in similes described."
-A very good concluding couplet that also shows good contrast.
-Not only did you do all of these things but also wrote an excellent sonnet while doing so.
-Impressive work; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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-Very good artwork, poem, and formatting.
-You do a good job of showing both sides of what the mirror reflects.
-I like the contrast of ink in the first verse, and the footprints of joy vs.
black ink stamping its rage.
-The theme of beauty in the rest of the poem is very good, especially
"romantic dreams in similes described."
-A very good concluding couplet that also shows good contrast.
-Not only did you do all of these things but also wrote an excellent sonnet while doing so.
-Impressive work; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Pam, for the detailed and in depth review. Most of all, I'm happy you enjoyed it :-)
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You are very welcome. You did a great job with the poem!
Comment from Frank Malley
"Black and Blue" is a very clever poem that uses these two ink colors to exemplify two antagonistic yet always coexistent aspects of human response: one of delight, and one of anger. The poem's diction is chosen to align with each response: the lines about delight are bright and elated in sound and suggestion, while the lines describing anger are full of diction loaded with fear and antagonism.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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"Black and Blue" is a very clever poem that uses these two ink colors to exemplify two antagonistic yet always coexistent aspects of human response: one of delight, and one of anger. The poem's diction is chosen to align with each response: the lines about delight are bright and elated in sound and suggestion, while the lines describing anger are full of diction loaded with fear and antagonism.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Frank - I really appreciate not just the positive response, but the time taken to see the dual inner workings of this poet's head, lol :-)
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I enjoyed the poem - best of luck! Frank
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Congratulations! You succeeded in mirroring the triadic onslaught of the writer's pen; with capabilities to prevail in "the realms of light," "hate" as well as "fight."
The work highlights the dynamics of inspiration as rummaging through the aforementioned triads either collectively or as exclusive pivots of the writer's cerebral moment.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, metaphors, similes, imagery, and palpable personification.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Congratulations! You succeeded in mirroring the triadic onslaught of the writer's pen; with capabilities to prevail in "the realms of light," "hate" as well as "fight."
The work highlights the dynamics of inspiration as rummaging through the aforementioned triads either collectively or as exclusive pivots of the writer's cerebral moment.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, metaphors, similes, imagery, and palpable personification.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Lloyd - I'm glad you enjoyed it :-)
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You have certainly achieved the two sides of the emotions in your blue and black text. I love the opening lines as
The blue ink strolls
Whilst the black ink stamps
A great read, good luck in the contest. Cheers
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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You have certainly achieved the two sides of the emotions in your blue and black text. I love the opening lines as
The blue ink strolls
Whilst the black ink stamps
A great read, good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Pearl :-). This is a variation on one of my oldest poems, written when I was about 14 - it was raw and messy, but the core was solid so I thought I'd update it!
Comment from royowen
There's one thing about posting a poem, or even a sonnet such as this one, though it's a really good, and a super post. I think you've been very inventive with this post, and I expect it should do well, beautifully written, with great language, good rhyming, well done, good luck blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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There's one thing about posting a poem, or even a sonnet such as this one, though it's a really good, and a super post. I think you've been very inventive with this post, and I expect it should do well, beautifully written, with great language, good rhyming, well done, good luck blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Roy - I'm really glad you liked it :-)
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Most welcome
Comment from Whitewave
I think I see opposites in your mirror - perhaps the shadow image - the darker side, not often seen but always there. Inspiration can be found in both sides - in wings of light or hate and fight.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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I think I see opposites in your mirror - perhaps the shadow image - the darker side, not often seen but always there. Inspiration can be found in both sides - in wings of light or hate and fight.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Indeed, sometimes what we see reflect isn't the side we like to show :-). Thank you for the great review!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an outstanding sonnet that you have written for the Mirror contest. I loved every word, and every interplay between your two antagonists/moods (or I don't really know what I should call them, but in my head I know what I mean). Kate xx
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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This is an outstanding sonnet that you have written for the Mirror contest. I loved every word, and every interplay between your two antagonists/moods (or I don't really know what I should call them, but in my head I know what I mean). Kate xx
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Kate - it's really appreciated :-). You know what you mean, I know what I meant, and I know what you mean! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
