The Biker's Bitch
A freestyle tale of emotional abuse & dominance.12 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
Congratulations on your winning poem! It was well designed, in stylish Björk.Wishing you continued success in your writing creations.
All the best.ð??¸
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Congratulations on your winning poem! It was well designed, in stylish Björk.Wishing you continued success in your writing creations.
All the best.ð??¸
Comment Written 10-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much! Your entry was very creative. It was an interesting prompt to think about a different direction and be inspired by someone else's inspiration.
Comment from lyenochka
I know nothing about this "Bjork" so have no clue how to assess this poem but I know you probably captured the heart of the song that you referenced in your notes. Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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I know nothing about this "Bjork" so have no clue how to assess this poem but I know you probably captured the heart of the song that you referenced in your notes. Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review. I wasn't familiar with her songs either... those notes are details from the contest prompt. I had to go onto Youtube to hear some of her music.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
You know you just painted most every guy's dream girl, don't you? Or at least the guys I know. The photo reflects that sentiment very well. Very strong and domineering words...mmmmmm.
Salaciously perfect.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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You know you just painted most every guy's dream girl, don't you? Or at least the guys I know. The photo reflects that sentiment very well. Very strong and domineering words...mmmmmm.
Salaciously perfect.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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I think you must associate with rather unpleasant types if they enjoy abusing and dominating girls like the biker giving the girl in this poem a hard time. 'Every guy's dream girl' might be eye candy draped across a motorbike but she doesn't deserve to be treated badly.
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Never, ever abuse or try to dominate a woman. NEVER. My intentions may have gotten mis understood in the silence of the internet type. A woman is a queen in my eyes. I will protect and defend at all costs any of them. Eye candy, yes, but treated badly - no, no, no!
Please do not think of me in that sort of negative way.
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Good. I'm glad you clarified that for me, and I apologise for overreacting to your initial reply.
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No problem. I just really don't want anyone to think that of me. I'm an old fat Grampa who loves his wife dearly and respects women maybe even more than I should. I was just trying to respond to the message the photo and your verse was sending, that's all. Really, I'm a "good guy".
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A raw and honest write about being bullied and controlled Lisa and I know what that feels like as I once knew someone just like this and was often crying inside over the relationship but knew I was not to blame for the arguments. A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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A raw and honest write about being bullied and controlled Lisa and I know what that feels like as I once knew someone just like this and was often crying inside over the relationship but knew I was not to blame for the arguments. A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Me too... not with a biker though.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Both with emotion and imagery you capture the abused and trapped woman. It is excellently written and truly spot on. My older sister had a friend or two that were doormats to these types of individuals yet they hung on afraid of being alone or hoping he would change, sometimes with disastrous results.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Both with emotion and imagery you capture the abused and trapped woman. It is excellently written and truly spot on. My older sister had a friend or two that were doormats to these types of individuals yet they hung on afraid of being alone or hoping he would change, sometimes with disastrous results.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thanks Mary. Being alone is better than being abused, and trying to change a guy is not possible. I feel sorry for girls in this position. I was in a psychologically abusive relationship for a while (not with a biker).
Comment from Wendy G
I think your imagery is superb with the play on words about a real dog (bitch) with the abused woman, and her conflicting emotions., with being abused and trapped. It's excellent. Sending best wishes for this powerful entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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I think your imagery is superb with the play on words about a real dog (bitch) with the abused woman, and her conflicting emotions., with being abused and trapped. It's excellent. Sending best wishes for this powerful entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Thanks for appreciating this rather gritty offering. I certainly appreciate the high rating!
I don't know much about biker gangs. I ride a motorbike myself but would never be attracted to that rough lifestyle. Here in NZ we are currently having an outbreak in Auckland of biker gang rivalry spilling into violence and drive-by shootings. (no-one dead yet, mostly houses shot up to terrify people.)
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Oh that?s not good. There?s always a few who spoil things for everyone.
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I'm always intrigued by antisocial bad behaviour and why a lot of people think it is preferable to enjoying good relations with people.
Comment from royowen
Just loved this, although I could never see you being a biker's bitch somehow, but I love the strong line up, somehow, I think a girl would have to have a propensity to like the cave man style person, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Just loved this, although I could never see you being a biker's bitch somehow, but I love the strong line up, somehow, I think a girl would have to have a propensity to like the cave man style person, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Good golly no, I would never be that girl and never be attracted to a biker. I always wanted the freedom of riding my own bike - I think the biker's girl just clings on the back being a decorative piece of ass. That might be highly inaccurate as I don't know any.
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Good touch Jenny
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Biker's Bitch, jabs at the readers' eyes as we imagine the pincushion, masochistic moll who exists at the pleasure of a human failure.
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This poem, The Biker's Bitch, jabs at the readers' eyes as we imagine the pincushion, masochistic moll who exists at the pleasure of a human failure.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
Comment from RodG
I have never met a biker's bitch, but your poem vividly describes what one's life might be like. I like your use of short, clipped lines and your visual imagery creates a sharp picture. Rod
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I have never met a biker's bitch, but your poem vividly describes what one's life might be like. I like your use of short, clipped lines and your visual imagery creates a sharp picture. Rod
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh go on! You don't really believe she can ride that thing do you? Look at the angle. It is quite clear se is just sitting on it, stationary and with the prop stand down.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Oh go on! You don't really believe she can ride that thing do you? Look at the angle. It is quite clear se is just sitting on it, stationary and with the prop stand down.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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She's just for looks - I'm sure she just clings decoratively to her biker guy while perched dangerously on the pillion seat. Ho wouldn't like her having her own bike. (Not that I know much about bikers - I am a motorcyclist.)
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I fine distinction. Lol.
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Fine as in first-rate or fine as in minimal?
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Minimal
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Nah - I don't agree. Bikers are big and ugly and mean and selfish and ride bikes that are too big for them. As a motorcyclist I am not like that. I would hate to be called a biker.
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I was not aware there was a distinction. Sorry.
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We are having trouble in NZ at the moment with rival bikers' gangs doing drive-by shootings - Head Hunters, Killer Beez and Tribesmen
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That's bad. Over here anyone who rides is a biker. There are a couple of bearded middle aged guys with a TV series called The Hairy Bikers. They ride all over the place and give cookery demonstrations. Lol. No I'm not joking.
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Those Hairy Bikers sound cool, definitely not sticking to the stereotype.
